Mowing your lawn is dangerous to the small animals the reside in the protection of grass and dirt. Fatalities are a given.
Fluttershy doesn't take this very well.
I read fanfiction when I run out of things to do so here I am
Mowing your lawn is dangerous to the small animals the reside in the protection of grass and dirt. Fatalities are a given.
Fluttershy doesn't take this very well.
This whole fic:
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I forgot to say, mad props to my proof reader and editor Famous Last Words. Check him out please he's a very talented writer and I reccomend you read his story: Heart Invasion 101
I think I shattered three ribs and dislocated my spleen, I was laughing so hard, reading this!
4717384 thanks <3
4717523 I shared the link too, to try to get more readers to take a look
4717528 Thanks <3
Jeez, this is something out of a MadTV skit. Well done!
Also, this is me just being nitpicky:
Fruit bats (real ones, anyways) don't use echolocation.
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4717749 thanks I just assumed they all use echolocation
... Poor, poor Fluttershy... I can't believe what she went through, but that message at the end was just so hilarious! Other than that, I didn't see too many errors.
Capitalization error here.
Just a spacing error here.
Needs to be in bold letters, and maybe italics... but that's just me.
All in all, I'd have to say you did an excellent job on you're first story (Or rather one-shot story). Although there were a few minor errors, two having to do with being too spaced apart while one was capitalization you did a superb job. But don't worry, everypony doesn't exactly start off on a high note.
4717778 thanks for the review from you and everyone else who's commented, glad to see people want to progress and improve
Well that was... Different.
4718102 No problem. I'm glad to help out.
4718423 You know what they sing. isn't it great to be different
4719117 lol.... I guess.
Is this your cover art?
This story is wonderful :D
Despite it being bloody I found the ending quite funny.
Thanks :heart
4717384 I blame my own busted ribs on you, you linker-of-hilarious-shit, you!
4798073 Just doin my duty lol
Why does the fic not have a Comedy Tag?
This fic is Solid Gold Comedy!