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Phoenix Heart 27


"I often think that the night is more alive and more richly colored than the day."- Vincent Van Gogh

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When Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, & Scootaloo find a mysterious 'Funhouse' in the middle of the Ever free Forest.
They won't ever leave.......
The Cutie-Mark Crusaders in......FunHouse!!!!
You've been WARNED!!!!!!!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 29 )

4875921 Apparently you didn't learn anything from you're last train wreck story :facehoof:

It would have been a lot better if you made longer.

okay i get it i know i rushed but i'm back in school so...yeah i wanted to get this story out a.s.a.p so sorry if it sucks:facehoof: not my best work at ALL:facehoof:

4907294 did I hear someone call for help on a fic i can help with what you need

4955006 YES!!! PLEASE HELP ME!!!!!:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::scootangel:

4955012 ok I will do you want me to proofread or edit or pre-read?
For notice I am useing my iPod is that ok?

4955091 i'll need you to pre-read and edit. thank you sooooo much!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::scootangel::scootangel:

4955322 also if you could take a look at my other story 'Circus' i'd really appreciate it:pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

4955322 no proublem my friend I will get it done as soon as posble

4955346 can you send me a link plz

4955346 I just finished it and it was reallygood :twilightsmile:

4955405 unfortunately,i don't know how to send a copy of a link.:pinkiesad2:

4958446 hilight the name and are you useing a computer or a phone or an iPod?
For the computer right click on the name and a little box will pop up and find copy link than come to this page and click the icon that looks like a chain and right click on the first box and a little box will pop up than click paste

4958627 haha you got yah good job man I will read it thanks

The story is way too short and rushed, and there is no real fear without surprises, plot twists, suspense, or detail. It also seemed like there needed to be a better reason for entering the fun house. It was Interesting concept, though. :applecry:

Comment posted by Phoenix Heart 27 deleted Jun 15th, 2015

5724812 Thanks even though, I personally say it sucks...:pinkiegasp:

Whoa, that was scary, like a pony version of a horror movie! :pinkiecrazy: good work!

7423854 Wow....uhhh....thanks! (Honestly...that's the second "good" comment I've got on this story....):pinkiesmile:

....,this could have been better.

7545753 I am aware. This story is simply....not the best but...it's....alright.

This story was okay.

8259376 I am aware that it was...simply ok.

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