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  • 88w, 2d
    Lynked is pretty princess.

    30 comments · 504 views
  • 88w, 6d
    New Lynked Republic

    9 comments · 234 views
  • 89w, 4d
    An Actually Important Blog!

    14 comments · 383 views
  • 91w, 5d
    Weast?

    Arrr, lads and lasses, we be goin' to find th' treasure! I brought us th' map, here, leads us straight to th' Melodia App'ratus EqD submission, arr! Have a look, ladies;

    Good morning, afternoon, evening, or what have you! I am the pre-reader who is also a bear. Unfortunately, I cannot recommend your story for posting at this moment. Here are some of the reasons why:

    > It was a cool day, though the day wasn’t there for long, as Twilight began to eat away at it, turning it a vibrant purple and orange.

    Purple indeed, though this is not the purple unicorn you know and love. Also, Twilight should be twilight.

    > A blue bird had flown by my window, on the breeze, with a nut.

    Bluebird? One word?

    > Anyway, I went and fetched them from my cabinet, and was

    No comma.

    > ... suddenly, through my mailslot, slipped a little piece of paper folded tightly into an envelope.

    Your independent clause seems to be missing its subject.

    > ... but I made due.

    ... but I made do.

    > ... headache-in-music-form.

    This wraps around in a rather aesthetically displeasing way in your Google Doc. I imagine you had trouble figuring out how to fix that, and if you have, you can fix this by putting zero-width spaces after the hyphens in this word.

    > But instead, she went right to Vinyl and whispered something in her ear, who in turn whispered her reply.

    If it's as loud as you make it out to be, would they have heard anything whispering?

    - You seem to use a lot of:

    -- Directly addressing the reader.

    -- Parentheticals, with actual parentheses.

    Neither are bad, and at times, you use them to good effect. However, you seem to do so a bit too often, as at points the narrative becomes less Octavia telling a story and more Octavia just talking.

    - Could use more focused description of setting. Octavia's current way of telling the reader about places quickly pushes them aside for what happens next, which would be great if she were telling the reader a much shorter story by mouth.

    - Octavia doesn't seem to show much affect with respect to her terminal illness. "By the way, I'm dying."

    - Sound effects in prose, taking up entire paragraphs. While I'm not a fan of them, they seem really out of place in your story since your story's supposed to be Octavia logging her experiences or something.

    - Out of place Portal reference. (Really, if you were going to try to shoehorn in a Portal reference, why not the turrets?)

    Mostly minor grammar things and the description thing, which should be fairly simple fixes. If you need help with grammar, you can go to MLPChan's or Ponychan's /fic/ boards for one-on-one help. Send this back with fixes and it should be good to post.

    Not bad, eh? I have a few gripes, some being that a) Octavia isn't much affected by the fact that she's dying, 'cause she's known it for a long while now, an just wants to live her life with, and b) I wasn't trying t'a "shoehorn" a portal reference--I felt it might be cute to add it--but rather, it fit. Shoehorning refers to forcing for appeal to the audience, and as much of you might know by now, I had sworn up, down, left, right, east, and weast (yes, weast; it's where the treasure is) that I wasn't going to post it, and I also don't think it was forced. Logic core, emotion's processor, companion cube--seems logical. (I also have no clue where he suggested placing the portal turrets, because as far as I know I haven't added any cute bullet-hoses to the story...).

    Anyways, he's made some valid points, and I'm aware of the grammar mistakes that litter the story. We'll talk and hammer some things out, I just figured I'd see what you all thought. Also, I won't be here this week; I'm leaving tonight at 12:30, to go to a huge debate, so wish me luck ^.^

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  • 92w, 3d
    Lynked is bored.

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In the cold twilight hours, as the sun kisses the sky one final time, Rainbow Dash finds herself slumped on a cloud asking one of life's most important questions.

Art by: Sage of Winds

Featured on: Equestria Daily

First Published
12th Apr 2012
Last Modified
13th May 2012
#1 · 133w, 16h ago · · · What if? ·

What if Lynked is hit with insomnia?

She tries to be philosophical.

As always, I'd love to hear what you guys think. It's pretty late where I am, and I wrote this all in one sitting. How'd I do?

#2 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

that was deep, bro

#3 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

...

Looks like my writing is absolute shit compared to this. :applejackunsure:

#4 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

I can relate to Rainbow Dash in this story.  I'm currently out of sorts myself...

#5 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

I can relate to Rainbow Dash in this story.  I'm currently out of sorts myself...

#6 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

Impressive.

#7 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

This is a great rainbow-dash  character study! She always portrays herself as the self-sure daredevil, which makes a fanfic about her true emotions all the more interesting, great job!

#9 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

This is beautiful, Fabulously in insightful and so well written. I can relate to dash but goodness, I've never wanted to lay upon a cloud as much as I do now.

#10 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

Hmm a pondering RD. The imagery is great. Makes me think what is the best, life-long friends or pursuing your dreams and passions from your childhood. And someone has to flip their upside down thumb! 10/10 :twilightsmile:

#11 · 133w, 15h ago · · · What if? ·

That was really great.  Relatable, well written character piece.

#12 · 133w, 14h ago · · · What if? ·

I saw the author of this story and automatically thought, "This is not a Moonlight Sonata update. :pinkiecrazy: :twilightangry2:" But, I will read this.

#14 · 133w, 12h ago · · · What if? ·

Moments like these come in abundance, unfortunately during class, most definitely. Then again, it is refreshing to ease conflicting thoughts. Beautiful story; sometimes you just have to settle down and reflect on what makes you truly happy.

#15 · 133w, 11h ago · · · What if? ·

:rainbowderp: You wrote this in one sitting?! Wow I am blown away,  this was very deep and I think you have done a tremendous job at explaining one of life's philosophies with Rainbow Dash. Incredible work Lynked, keep it up!

-TheLoyalBrony

#16 · 133w, 9h ago · · · What if? ·

Yet another piece that should be Equestria Daily'd.

#17 · 132w, 6d ago · · · What if? ·

>>443055 I've actually sent it in, but I doubt it'll get on the blog.

>>442541 >>442327 >>441427 Wow, um, thanks! :twilightsmile: I'm flattered, hehe

#18 · 132w, 6d ago · · · What if? ·

I have to face this realization too, friends or dreams....but what if......our friends were our dreams

#19 · 132w, 6d ago · · · What if? ·

>>441233

Ah, the ravings of a philosphical insomniac... I do love those. Wish all it took was a late night for me to get philosophical too... nope, I only get like that when touched on a deep emotional level, and even my most profound stuff typical ends up gloomy. Depression is the source of my poetry, unfortunately.

#20 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

I think you really nailed it with the paragraph after "Life was just big one what if". One of my thoughts on life is that if you're happy with who and where you are, regret nothing, because you can't know what would have been. You can't answer the what if's that would accompany those regrets. You added another wonderful statement, simple and harmonious with that idea. Letting those appropriate what-ifs advise your decisions.

Great story, great message. :heart:

#21 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

This was beautiful. Thank you for sharing this piece of art with us. :rainbowkiss:

#22 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

Wow Rainbow Dash is a lot deeper than she lets on.

Congratulations on been featured on EqD by the way :rainbowdetermined2:    

#23 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448082 >>448249 >>448082 Thank you :twilightblush: I'm, well, ecstatic to say the least!

#24 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

Very Impressive bit of writing. I have to say you write with a style that takes nothing for granted. Your descriptions flow with the same pace that the story itself does, and that is quite hard to do. Even though I write in a completely different style, I must say that yours is simply amazing. Once again, great job and keep up the good work!:pinkiehappy:

#25 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448478 you put my thoughts down brilliantly, I, though, would add, that he is amazing at the philosophical stuff.

#26 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

Very nice story. For one night, it's extremely deep.

Also, when will you be continuing Cantervania? I'm starting to miss my semi-weekly dose of Twilight kicking flank. :scootangel:

#27 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448848 Well I have some of it done. I've just been taking a break for a while - I'm having a bit of blockage on it. Don't worry, shouldn't be too much longer now. I hope :facehoof:

Also, thanks for the input!

#28 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

The writing's a bit overwrought, but the description of the sunset is beautiful, and Dash's struggle comes across nicely enough. :rainbowhuh:

#29 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448892 Yes, and the pre-reader would agree. He said it was the most purple thing he'd read in a while :twilightblush:

I'm glad you like the story, though (I assume you did at least) :twilightsmile:

#30 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

Totally thought this was BronyNeumo's story when I saw it.

#31 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448925 Yes, I've been getting that quite a bit. Strange, too, I searched for What If before I named this thing and didn't find the fic :facehoof: Now that I've found it, I feel like an idiot.

#32 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448885 You, Sir, are very welcome.

I can live with a wait if the result contains enough awesomesauce. :rainbowwild:

#33 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448411

Bloody brilliant! I loved the perfectly worded to and fro of Rainbow's sleep-deprived conscience! Your descriptive powers are vast and seeming applied effortlessly!

I could almost smell the matted, oily stink of your unwashed Dash. Ugk! Thanks for that. I love the smell of sweaty, rancid pony in the morning!

Not! Blech! :pinkiesick:

Thanks for a great story! :pinkiehappy:

#34 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

>>443994HAH!  And you thought it wouldn't make it to Equestria Daily!

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/04/story-what-if.html

Enjoy the fame, my friend!

#36 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

Pretty good, but it's not my style.

Reminds me of angsty teenagers.

#37 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

That was actually pretty well thought out. A good slow paced story which many could relate to and ponder about. I, too, find some relation to this story myself. What if what I was currently doing not worth the while? What if my true calling was somewhere else? What if my friends did not truly care for me? Some good questions that arose from this sweet story that I could always ponder on. Your descriptive writing and style are quite amazing and the theme fits quite well. I hope you would continue writing amazing stories like this.

#38 · 132w, 5d ago · · · What if? ·

I liked it :D I was expecting something that was going to make me depressed but I was pleasantly surprised it didn't

#39 · 132w, 4d ago · · · What if? ·

>>448941 Especially since it's on EQD too. ("To Fix You" Story 2)

#40 · 132w, 1d ago · · · What if? ·

Very philosophical, but very good at the same time (and amazingly well-written). If you write such stories because of insomnia, I would wish you many sleep-deprived nights. But that would be very egoistical of me, not to mention harmful to your body. :pinkiesad2:

Thanks for sharing such a gem. :twilightsmile:

#41 · 132w, 1d ago · · · What if? ·

A bit wordy, to be sure, and I'm not sure how apt a sleep-deprived Rainbow Dash would be both at noticing the beauty of the world and describing it so (character voice), but those things didn't detract too much from the overall point, which you got to almost immediately. The simple message is particularly poignant for me since, in addition to having wrestled with the endless "what if?"s for many years now and continuing to struggle with it to this day, I'm working on a story that is also about a character trying to deal with the uncertainty of life. Keeping that in mind, I wonder if RD's struggle could have been drawn out a bit more. Where's RD asking what would happen if she and the rest of the mane six had a falling out and by then she also wouldn't be able to join the Wonderbolts for whatever reason? What if they had a falling out and the 'Bolts rejected her; what would she do then?

Still, I liked it. :twilightsmile:

Don't hate me for this :trixieshiftright: I figured it needed these, and I don't care if I was right or not.

Wish I could write something as successful as this :(

Good story

Can't see a single reason why I should hate You for this. :derpyderp2: Wish I could be good at writing...or drawing...or anything related to art.

Anyway, good story. I hope for some more good stuff from You.

I pull up FIMfiction to find that I have an update to this story... and it's an author's note.

Browser! One "Varying Degrees of Want" PLZ!

...

Thank you browser.

To be honest though, It was nice to see this story again. I know I risk sounding sappy when I say this, but I've said similar things before, so screw being awkward.

I loved this story. Really. It meant a lot to me when I read it, not because it was pony, but because of the contemplative message it carried. I know what it is to feel indecisive and not know what to do... and this was a bright spot in a hard day. I grant that I'm weird by some standards... probably the fact that I prefer friendshipping or hetero in my ships, and that can be an issue for some. I may be a hopeless romantic at times and at others a cold jerk, and I usually think myself and my efforts are worth nothing and doomed to fail, no matter how intelligent or creative I get told I am.

I am the first to claim that I don't know everything, but there are a few things I am adamant upon. One is that stories are meant to convey messages to their readers. Those writers that acknowledge this fact gain control over the message their story sends out, and those that don't will write stories in which the messages are reflections of their subconscious.

I know not which author you are, but regardless, the message of this story will not be forgotten.

#46 · 128w, 3d ago · · · What if? ·

"A mental image of a feather quill materialized in the ferocious chaos of her mind...  ...in the painful maelstrom of her mind." You describe, very similarly, the storm in Rainbow's head twice in one sentence.

I had more to say but then I read >>468529's comment. So basically, what he said.

#47 · 127w, 3d ago · · · What if? ·

She had me worried for a second there near the end. I was like 'why despress yourself with all these hypotheticals? You don't need to choose between your friends and heroes...' and when she got to "Life was just one big what if" I was like

  'You better not be getting suicidal now Dash.'

Good story, I liked it. As others have already said, very philosophical.

Liked. Faved. Commented! I rarely comment. In this case, I just had to, because I can relate to Dash's thoughts and feelings here.

Very well done, but the end could have needed another paragraph or two about that weight leaving her shoulders. Maybe another hint at touching the moon? Also, lovely description of the sunset and clouds at the beginning! :twilightsmile:

nice story. enjoyed.

>>588673 For the sake of my sanity, please get out of my head...

But i have to agree with everything Thespurgin said, each and every story that is written by an author, and I personally hold you to this standard now that you've put out this piece of art, Lynked, has to have a message in it, whether underlying or abundantly clear (I assume this is what authors refer to as a theme).  Otherwise, it turns into nothing more than an interesting story that ultimately holds little substance and holds poorly to the winds of time.  But this work right here, this is worth something.  And as much as I don't deserve to exude such a Great and Powerful Trixie grandeur of arrogance (may not be the word I'm looking for, I'm still working on my wordsmithing), I must say that this was very much worth my time to read.  

I thank you for your contemplations. :)

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