Fantastic Fillies

by Otto Octavius

Impending Doom

"We are the Fantastic Fillies!" Scootaloo proclaimed, followed by the cheering of the crowd which echoed through spacious chambers of the vibrant crystal castle.

"I've seen enough." Said a voice, followed by silence as the magically projected screen blinked out. The crystal unicorn who had been projecting it bowed down and then exited the room as quickly as possible while still showing deference.

"So, Celestia has finally done something interesting..." An armoured pony said sitting restlessly upon the throne for a brief moment, before continuing. "...Mildly interesting, that is."

"Your highness?" Said one of the guards as his ruler stood from the throne. "Will you address your subjects today?"

A slow chanting was becoming audible within the throne room. Everypony in the room turned their gaze towards the balcony that over looked the Crystal Kingdom and only it's undisputed sovereign was worthy of such a sight. That very pony made their way towards the cheering masses. With every step their cheers were perceived with further clarity.

"ALL HAIL THE MASTER OF THE CRYSTAL KINGDOM!"

The sound of metal meeting crystal was deliberately loud as the monarch stood upon the balcony, the crowd was overcome with joy knowing their leader was near.

"ALL HAIL DOOM!"

The cheering was ecstatic and it reached it's crescendo when they glimpsed the masked face of their sworn ruler.

"ALL HAIL QUEEN CADENZA VON DOOM!"

The once bright pink Alicorn, now covered horn to tail in gleaming metal armour, threw back her flowing green cloak and spread her steel-plated wings, she held out her metal hooves and felt the love that each of her subjects had for her and all the love that she would return a thousand fold.

Author's Note:

The Fantastic Fillies will return in "The Song of Doom."

Comments

[ianmoone]

Well, Didn't see that coming

[vakamablack]

I did

by the way, this is my first comment on this site, so, yay!

[Otto Octavius]

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You saw Doom coming? Impressive. Unless you've read Spider-Pony too, I kind of spoiled it in the latest chapter. Anyway, I hope seeing the twist coming didn't spoil the story for you.

[TheInvincibleIronBrony]

Alright, finally- wtf! 12000 words? Why do you do this to me? Whatever. Let's get crackin.

[TheInvincibleIronBrony]

Haha! I have conquered every word in your story! Bow to me!

Good story though. Maybe you should consider doing kind of an episodic thing though. Like a few chapters for one adventure and then a few note for the next. I loved the story, but a villain that only has any real screen time in the finale is hard to like.

[Otto Octavius]

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Yeah, this was kind of an experiment to see if I could write a great big one-shot story. I think I did pretty well but I agree that Namor needed more screen time. (So to speak) Maybe, I'll do a rewrite at some point.

[TheInvincibleIronBrony]

4733130 Sounds like a good idea. If you ever need to bounce ideas around I'm sure we could help each other out.

[ponyqqqq]

But u should do more chapters and that princsess doom be the frist villens.

[Awesomo3000]

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[Snow ghost pony]

Would've made more sence to make Sombra Dr. Doom, instead of cadance

[Otto Octavius]

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I disagree, when I finally get around to doing Fantastic Fillies 2 I want to paint Doom as more than a 2 dimensional villain. Cadance serves the purpose better in that regard. If I'd used Sombra there would be no question as to whether or not Sombra was the bad guy of the situation.

[Snow ghost pony]

5275336 in the show, not all of Sombra was destroyed. His horn was seen flying off of e screen largely intact. I'm thinking cadence stumbled upon the horn by accident and it corrupted her into Cadence Von Doom, similar to nightmare moon, only with cadence being in full control and perfectly aware of what she's doing. Course that's just my opinion and not your story, so if you want just ignore this comment then go right ahead.

In my admitadly limited knowledge of the good doctor, he's not nessecarily a BAD ruler, even if he is trying to take over the world all the time. In most of what I know about him, he actually seems pretty indifferent to everything until he sees an opportunity, which he then takes advantage of.
Sorry for rambling and I hope to read the SEQUAL when it comes out.

[Snow ghost pony]

5275336 now that I reread your answer, I can definatly see how Cadence fits this role. I do have a suggestion though, try giving her MPD, would help fill in some answers as to why she's evil now, and is the perfect picture of love and tolerance when around Twilight and the others.
Btw, MPD is Multi Personality Disorder