When Trixie is told about a Artifact that can reshape realty, She goes to see it for herself. During the times she is there, she gets a hold of the artifact and Rainbow's breaks it, having it shatter across four dimensions. When being call by Princess Luna, Rainbow Dash steps up and marks on a journey though realty to fix it. This time she is help by three other ponies that are tie to her, Firefly, Zapp, and Rainbow Mask. Together, the four work together to save their dimensions and each others from being in risk from wiping out.
Firefly- From Gen-1, Like Rainbow Dash, Firefly is fast at speed, but she is given the ability to preform stealth attacks. Firefly can even hide in shadows thanks to a spell that cloak in when ever she is in the shadows. Firefly, take the most hits from all four of them.
Rainbow Dash-The one that everyone knows. Rainbow is fast at speed and is give the ability to be warn about incoming attacks. The other do not share this. Rainbow can easy take out enemies. Rainbow Dash is the fastest of all four them.
Zapp-From the Power Ponies. Zapp is just like Rainbow Dash, only she more of a hero. Zapp can all ready control the weather, but is the given the ability to use a Thunder Mode. Zapp is strongest of the four and can handle large groups of enemies.
Rainbow Mask-My OC, Rainbow Mask is the descendant of Rainbow Dash. Rainbow Mask matches the speed of Rainbow Dash. Mask is given the ability to turn her Sonic RainBoom into a ground-pound move . Rainbow Mask, is the most balance of the four. Even if she shares Rainbow's speed.
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should be work
now story errors
you keep spelling reality wrong
telling spike that? weird
found
should be were
that whole sentence seems off
i recommend it be changed to "we should go and find it and give it to the princesses so they can keep it safe."
Trixie SORRY? HA
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Trixie then walks away from Snips and Snails to follow the Mane Six into the Everfree Forest
i recommend changing ask a question to asks
maybe put Ah am sure
cut out the s so its just nod
where
"Who knows what would have happen if we didn't find them."
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i recommend changing it all to past tense looked looked looked rose walked and the last error of this paragraph that sentence should change to glowed in the shape of a tablet
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whats with the g\jump? anyways jumped out of bed to teleport
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Great work can't wait for the next chapter.
4673205 I'm really sorry about that, I miss them completely. I go back and fix it.
4673227 its no problem just to me its a little annoying i suggest getting someone to proof read it like i just did for half of it
4673248 I been working on this story for the past few days, I must have slip back to my old days of writing again. I'll be more careful in the next chapter.
When I found out that this story was finally submitted, I actually clapped for joy!
4674602 Like it so far? Rainbow Dash is first for the next chapter.
So spiderman shattered dimensions parody huh. Dash is going to get together with spitfire here? I noted that rainbow mask had some of Spitfire's personality when she talked about D.I.S.C.O.R.D. there. Also you can use a oc of mine for a boss mask can face. Here is his bio:
Name: shadow dash
Alias: dark blade
Age:19
Description: dark fur with white mane and a silver blade with speed marks for a cutie mark.
History: shadow is a racer who had a hobby with metalwork when his family was killed by a villain the local police was not able to stop. He vowed to locate the killer and avenge his family. He lost his morals along the way and killed any thug after interrogating them to locate his target. Rainbow mask was his childhood friend and she vowed to stop him and bring back the friend he once was.
Abilities he gains from fragment: shadow manipulation and the same abilities as nightmare moon. Basically he can create weapons from shadows or become vapor.
4675348 Thanks, I might use him as a boss in Edge of Time.This already has it bosses role full up, to see them check here.
4675375 well I got a ability upgrade for zapp as well. The ability to create weapons out of electricity like tonfa, staff, and daggers to paralize foes.rainbow dash knows martial arts and since zapp is basically rainbow dash with powers she has the same knowledge and can use those weapons if she needed. By the way there was a fifth costume for dash that is the opposite of the shadow bolt one the wonder bolt one. And you really didn't answer my question about spitfire.
4676846 Well, Zapp does play the black suit Spider-Man and it does attack like Venom does. Yes, I know the suit is Venom, So they can appear when Zapp fights. And I don't got plans for Spitfire showing up in this story.
4677522 Where does the Mane-iac attack?
Hey Shazam, it's me. Listen, I don't think I can do the Jungle Fury story anymore, but this will be significantly easier since I have the game you're basing this off of.
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! IT'S AWESOME!!!!
This needs both a proof reader and an update.
NEXT CHAPTER!?