A pony on the run, a mysterious time-traveler and a love that bends time and space.
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- Member Since 26th Feb, 2014
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sydney_alice
I love writing stories, but if no-pony likes them, then why should I bother?
sydney_alice
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Considering the author's rage quit from the site and previous history with being a bitch to constructive criticism, I don't think my opinion would be welcomed or heard here.
On my other story, only one person gave me constructive criticism, everyone else didn't even give a reason for hating my story
5042430
It doesn't matter.
If they did do such a thing, then I suggest that you ignore them and look at the ones that actually give you criticism. Also, deleting your stories isn't going to make things better. It's just going to prove that you have something to hide. Anyways, on with the review..
To start, the pacing in this story is extremely rushed. I suggest that you take the time to establish what's going on by putting more detail into each scene. Not too much however. Just enough for the audience to know what's happening.
Second, the pacing in this story is also affecting the characters. We barely know anything about them, and since this is a story written in first person, I at least should expect to read what the main character is thinking right now.
Finally, be a little more descriptive, it sounds like Aurora isn't hurt at all by how this story's written. Again, it's a first person story, not a diary. Hell, even diaries would be more descriptive than this.
In conclusion, you have a lot to improve on. Understand that the only way to improve as a writer is by taking criticism whether it be harsh or kind. Deleting comments or responding to them in a bitter attitude won't make a difference, it'll only make you look egocentric than innocent.
5096218
Thanks for the criticism, and i agree.
Oh, btw, the reason I deleted my stories is because I wanted to add them when they were finished because I felt it wa sa mistake to relise them when they were hardly established.
5117180
You're welcome.
Just keep in mind that people are entitled to express how they felt in anyway. If they express how they felt about your story it in a mean-spirited way without explaining why, just ignore them. Don't have your self-esteem ruined by them.
As for your stories, I understand where you're coming from; But you do realize that you can edit it, right?
In conclusion, don't do what you did in your previous stories ever again; be welcoming to the people's critiques, and take it into consideration.
Good luck to you.
5117600 Thanks, I'll keep that in mind
5121796
You're welcome, my friend.