not a bad story, details are pretty good. an it's not just a clop fic! it actually has plot (forgive the pun) about the only current complaint, is a couple of your chapters feels like they could be moved around to make it flow better. goes from being in the forest to staying with the apples pretty quick. ok, that's equestria for you so can follow. then mentions turning into a hybred pony, so moving forward...then we jump BACK to the doom tree an the plot line there. a good story, but if you can, maybe move some chapters around. just a suggestion
8195465 Thank you for the comment. I am happy that you find the tales of Elusive Hunter fascinating and hope that he keeps your interest. The next arch is in the works.
If I member correctly didn’t twilight say that he could not have children with a human unless their DNA was also spliced with the ponies and that he could get a Mare pregnant
not a bad story, details are pretty good. an it's not just a clop fic!
it actually has plot (forgive the pun) about the only current complaint, is a couple of your chapters feels like they could be moved around to make it flow better.
goes from being in the forest to staying with the apples pretty quick. ok, that's equestria for you so can follow. then mentions turning into a hybred pony, so moving forward...then we jump BACK to the doom tree an the plot line there.
a good story, but if you can, maybe move some chapters around.
just a suggestion
keep up the good work
8195465 Thank you for the comment. I am happy that you find the tales of Elusive Hunter fascinating and hope that he keeps your interest. The next arch is in the works.
If I member correctly didn’t twilight say that he could not have children with a human unless their DNA was also spliced with the ponies and that he could get a Mare pregnant