well that is interesting so he is getting some of Rarity's emotions, also th05.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2013/098/e/f/pewdiepie_is_fabulous__x3_by_madiedraws-d60wc1b.jpg

4617680 For the record he's fabulous not FABULOUS. Elusive is not gay and this story was made to display that one may be into fashion and the like without being gay. But he doesn't have her emotions it's just his emotions are (temporarily)unstable. You think that's funny wait until next month (in story and quite possibly literally)

4617756 I swear after the next chapter, you may laugh your ass off

Okay, with the second chapter, I've picked up on your single biggest problem.
You've got way too much happening way too soon.

I could've gotten three chapters worth out everything you shovelled in this one.
Granted, I flat out refuse to write clop, but that's beside the point.

Is hunter going to bang apple bloom?

4621274 Now that would be telling, wouldn't it?

4620320 True but I tend to write, (relevant) flashbacks given that I'm working on one currently I think a little jam packing ain't as bad as me being overly vague. Either way I digress, Thank you for friendly input

4623082 I'm just glad you're not taking it as an 'attack' on your fic.
I've had that happen before.

4625653 only an arrogant bastard (which I am not) would turn their heads at constructive criticism.

<3

4806327 Merci beaucoup! No seriously, thank you for that

4819239 I don't speak French?(I'm not sure but I think its French) also love the work.
<3

4822392 Neither do I (not fluently at least) but yeah thanks for the comment.

I was enjoyin what I was seein.

what...the....fuck?