A continuation of the Xenoverse the day of Twilight's ascension in which an Irish blacksmith and hunter named Galen, who was raised in a medieval tourist trap of a village is brought to Equestria, along with his dog, due to said ascension.
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Good story so far, just a couple of minor personal issues, I guess. Galen's accent is a trifle unwieldy to read, but that's pretty much personal preference.
Additionally, I can't remember which chapter or story its in, but I'm pretty sure it's canon that pegasi don't drink very much in the Xenoverse. As I recall, they don't metabolize alcohol very well, and drinking and flying is a no no. Again, I can't remember which story that's from, but I do know it was in one of the things anonauthor wrote...
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I'm taking a little liberty with some of the details and as you could see, Rainbow was practically molesting Lero in public at the end of the contest She can hold her alcohol, but I would like to think she gets black out drunk pretty quickly, even if I don't recall the particular chapter you're referring to As far as Galen's accent goes, it'll slowly disappear as he spends more and more time here, just as any accent would. He'll adjust his speech patterns over time without realizing it.
This is your best chapter yet. I love the sense of suspense we get at the very beginning. Had me wondering whether this was going to turn out to be 'all just a dream' or whether we'd suddenly entered 'Silent Hill' territory, especially as Herd Bellerophon suddenly vanished.
Then came Pinkie Pie, and you captured her perfectly. It was a delight reading Galen, he really felt like a true human being.
With a quick yawn, Galen returned himself to a sitting position and was about to stand up when a stirring to his side drew his attention to it. He glanced over and saw a portion of his hay mound rise up and fall away to reveal a bright pink coated mare with a slightly darker mane and tail with her back to him. She looked around owlishly before turning around enough to see that Galen was occupying the same mound as she was. Her eyes widened slightly and a furious blush rushed from the base of her neck to her hairline as she let out embarrassed little squeaks. Deciding to take the initiative, Galen did the only thing a man could do in a severely compromising position such as this after a night of hazy debauchery and finding a woman in his bed, or in this case, mound of straw. “Mornin',” he said in a low voice so as not to wake up any of the other sleeping ponies. “Some night last night, huh?”
So I'm wondering if this is an OC of yours? Or some pony we already know?
very nice
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I think we all know who it is
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I had a ball writing this one