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Fanfiction writer with a speciality in anything and everything to do with Pegasi, the military, and epic adventures. And SoarinFire.
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Good story.
While the premise pf the story itself was interesting...
What reall got me to read this was because I was wondering what kind of story a guy whose avatar is Theordore Roosevelt could write.
Random, I know. Anyways, the story itself is actually interesting and actually establishes the story well for starting off in medias res. And for a pony on earth. Rainbow isn't stupidly out of character; she seems to act and react as she normally would. And the human acts... normal.
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Well, TR happens to be my favorite President. Sorry, I have no humorous story to explain Mr. Roosevelt's presence on a site dedicated to ponies.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. My main goal was to illustrate the aftermath of her actions of trying to subdue the storm. For the reader to only view the periphery of the real problem Rainbow has (one she was at the periphery herself). It only becomes apparent why Rainbow is really afraid after her frustrations get the better of her and a friend prods her enough.
Glad you found the characters sufficiently 'normal'. I just wrote what made sense given Rainbow's situation.
4589836 Pshaw, Teddy is so awesome he needs no explanation.
(Check out the Mike Resnick Weird West books, They're set before Theodore took office and are really good fun.)
Cute and sweet. I found the injury to her nose a bit confusing. At first she acts like it's a simply bump with a few drops of blood, but then she's sniffling without issue and he's putting cotton around it, which to me implies more swelling and a serious injury.
Still very enjoyable.
Okay, here's what I got.
This story felt a bit long, like it could have be shorter. But that's really not a big deal.
Also, the idea isn't terribly original, but I like the way it was handled.
Other then that, this was pretty good.
8.5 out of 10
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Thank you magical talking microwave!
In all seriousness, I appreciate your honest review. I agree, not the most original idea, but it was more of a spur of the moment story. Honestly I'm a little surprised anyone is still reading it, let alone reviewing it, especially since my main story is Legacy of the Pegasi.
Regardless, I'm glad you liked it.
This was awesome, nicely done man, nicely done!
Faved.
Aww...Poor Rainbow Dash. *Hugs Rainbow Dash*
An interesting story. Short and simple, but still a pleasant read with a little bit of emotion. Rainbow’s speech surprised me a bit for a moment, I thought she was speaking in such funny way because she held something in her mouth, but in the end, it was a very nice detail.
The only minor issue that I found were some mixed up uppercase letters in dialogue tags. I can explain more if you wish