She looked down to where the enchanted quill had been writing down the rediscovered family lineage of generations. She almost recast the spell when she understood why it stopped.
It was complete.
She had done it.
There at the bottom of the most recent piece of parchment lay the current branch of the tree.
“I did it.” She whispered to herself in shock. “An heir is found.”
“Huh.”
Well, curiosity satisfied she could ignore it and continue onto her next fancy…
Or…
A smile spread across her face and a great look of mischief filled her eyes. She could ‘rustle the jimmies’ of the Canterlot Nobles.
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First chapter is a little bit too fast. Rewrite is my opinion is what you must do with this story
While I agree that it is a little fast and I would have liked to have seen the missing chunks of time filled in, I am beyond excited for this!!!!! Macintosh has always been my favorite character and its about time he got his reward. Please tell me you will be updating soon. Until then, have a like and favorite. I wait excitedly for more!!!!
Just yes. Instant fav.
*chief editor voice* I like it keep up the good work but that space was unnecessary and maybe slow down a bit *drinks coffee*
All my yes! Cellys joke comesback to bite her.
Oh my God in heaven! More; I need more of this story! You can't stop now - it can't end here! I've become invested; I need this! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Seriously though, I'm super cereals - you need to expound upon this story further!
Oh please continue or expand this! Between Applejack's plans - apple plans - and the King's consorts this could get hysterical
I don't know if I'll continue this or not. I had plans for this to be a serious look into my own ideas about the unexplored history of Equs and the workings of the court...
It just kinda devolved into crack.
Maybe a sequal later on, LOL, I love Celestias reaction as her joke fell through.
A bit too fast, but I love the idea. Good work.
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Isaaaaawthaaat.
Keep re-reading this... Decided... Must have more...
This is why we can't have nice things, Celestia!
Seriously though; it's a fun premise, especially when it goes further than Celestia intended. I only wish there was more details of the royal shenanigans after the coronation, such as the Apple family abusing their new royal influence and Luna trying to assemble and engagement. Some more perspective from Mac would have been nice too. As amusing as it is for his only lines to be "Wut?", I would have really liked to see some of his thoughts and insights between his crowing and his bucking the moon into the sky.
Hahahahahaha, I almost pee'd myself. In fact, my head hurts right now for how much I laughed with this story. Thank you, I really, really enjoyed it.
You know what I found most funny about this?
That Celestia's nobles don't appear to have had their jimmies rustled all that much. There was some shock at first, but they apparently got over that fairly quickly.
It's nice to see them as anything but a cheap foil for Celestia^^
You didn't...
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Oh my sweet mother of god you did, there is no proper response to this
A neat read, but...you'll have to put in a little bit more detail as to why Big Mac himself was made the big honcho. Either the old Royal Family was a patriarchy, or that it's not Granny Smith's line that's descended from the King but rather whichever of Mac's parents married into the Apple family that was the old Family's descendant. That, or they just skipped over Granny Smith entirely because she's old.
Flashback to the movie, The Madness of King George III. Specifically the "WHAT? WHAT?" he always used in conversation with his ministers.... or in this case. "WUT? WUT?" There's an idea for a possible sequel. The Madness of King Macintosh I.
6803991 Passing over Granny Smith is probably a good idea. And the fact they chose Big Mac isn't so much an indication of it being a patriarchy; he is the oldest of three siblings, so by rights, he's first in line of succession.
The whole story was building up with some funny elements thrown in but the moon finished me off i just laughed so hard my throat hurts a bit now.