It is finished!

Thanks everyone for reading, especially Eustatian Wings. I guess my "Take That, You!" story was something that you ended up really liking, so...

There's a broken Youtube link in the middle of the page.

I thought the story would go on for longer, but, eh, not complaining. Great work.

brilliant peice of work as always swiper

D'aw. Sweet but the fight scene was a bit too short for my tastes.

Hellz yea.

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so hawt

Thanks for all of the great comments!

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I'm tempted to go through and volunteer an edit. I think word choice can be improved - some of your connotations are way off in the clop scene, but

Yes. I did enjoy this very much. It's, well...

A nice clopfic.

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Scootaderp has gone through it already, and I'll tweak it soon. Anyways, I guess your inspiration was a success.

This story is amazing, I love it. Just check out your spelling and grammar. There are a few errors that could do with fixing. But I have to say this was one beautiful story... A longer story based off of this as a prequel seems to have some potential. Life living with Derpy...

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Thanks!

I have seriously thought about making sequels to this... maybe something that involves Dinky getting a new little sister?

I'll let my mind percolate those ideas...

I noticed a 'few' grammatical and spelling mistakes...other than that great story (Derpy is my favourite character in the show, by the way, which makes me love this even more)

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I'm glad that you like it! I really think that Derpy is totally beautiful!

And, yeah, I've been meaning to proofread this for a long time. Just never really wanted to spot writing new fics to go back and do that.

Grammer problems throughout. Nothing a read through wouldnt fix.

The story was amazing. It could easily be expanded on but I honestly feel it doesn't need to, so..... pointless opinion stated.

A lovely little fiction, I really enjoyed the introverted aspects, many of us out here can relate very well

Last chapter was... unnecessary? Cute at the beginning, but then turned out to be pointless-- then just got confusing. I still don't really know what happened in the fight, and then a few weeks later twilight sparkle is there and someone is afraid of someone going to canterlot with fluttershy and you nod at twilight and she just knows, you know?
And, I think the sex was unnecessary and weird. It was fast. It was hasty. I'm not the foremost authority on this type of relationship, but does this kind of meeting usually result in sex?

idk. I think it ends better where Chapter 3 ends. It's strong.
Everything after is...

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Perhaps some of my wording is messy, but I liked the ending myself, especially with the sort of sense that the relationship has already blossomed into something more.

Anyways, I'm glad that you liked it.

I definitely should go back and revise it to get rid of the many errors and such...

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Don't care about the errors, can gloss over the errors, if the writing is good to begin with.

If I am interested and driven I will not feel the need to nitpick. I only have to nitpick when "you didn't even get the spelling right," not when "however you didn't get the spelling right."

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I see.

I enjoyed this. Mainly cause it has a good storyline of people who are quite alike and meet under real world circumstances. Plus I like derpy and her eyes too XD

Sweet stuff.
Is this in continuity with other fics? Because Luna having a daughter kind of came out of nowhere, not to mention what does Colgate have to do with anything.