4682347

No thanks, I'm good.

4682371 Whatever

4682379

Do you have anything that could help me make it better? because that would be much more helpful than telling me to throw in the towel.

4682388 Well, the first thing is - it's better show the story to someone before publishing, so that you could deal with the mistakes beforehand, rather than trying to change something when the story has already been published.

Secondly, the story doesn't need a huge description. 3 - 5 sentences will do just fine.

Thirdly, don't rush. A good description of the emotion/situation/action/etc wouldn't hurt.

And, that's about it really.

4682428 Thank you. That is very helpful and I shall take your words into consideration.

4682437 No problem.

I'm downvoting at the description words: Fetus-Eating. That's as bad as 'Newborn Porn" in A Serbian Film.

I know that it isn't right to downvote without reading the fic, but those words make me deeply disturbed.

4683503 Yeah. I went to a very dark place when I thought up this story. I may have gone a little over board on the dark stuff. Then again, no one likes my lighter creations so I guess we all had it coming.

However, if you guys turn away from this due to the description, I should point out that the stuff doesn't show up until later on in the story. As of now, all I have to show for my little atrocity(See what I did there) is a crappily written mess that just so happens to have zombie changelings in it.

4683760 You. Only. Have. One Story!

4683789 I'm not talking about just my story. My artwork in general. I've come up with a lot of story ideas for RP's and such. And no one ever wants to do my lighter ideas. On top of that, the same goes for my artwort. They always pic the dark and strange stuff over my elegant and expressive. So, I give up on lighter art entirely.

4683818 Don't give up on lighter stuff just because some people don't like it, I can guarantee that there are plenty of people who do and if you DO make dark stuff.... please don't include infant eating... because it's fucking AWFUL

4683833 I know. Maybe after I am done with this one, I'll try to give it a go. And yeah, I know. Its awful stuff. Then again, this is an awful story written by an awful person.

4683842 Fine,,, and you aren't awful.

4683879 Says you. You don't have a story where (SPOILER ALERT) Fluttershy is kept in a minotaur breeding dungeon force to birth new soldiers or food for the griffins for the last three years.

4683883 Are you trying to get me to dislike you? Is this some kind of self-destructive confession? Is this fic a sort of way to convince yourself of that? Cause it isn't working.

4683897 No, nothing of the sort. I'm not really all that confident in myself or my work. This fic was supposed to be just a story I made after a very vivid nightmare. I am not a self destructive person, I'm just not an optimistic person.

4683897 I have ideas to share, but I'm afraid of rejection. This story was supposed to be something for me to not be afraid of such things. Something for me to just not care for once of what others thought. In retrospect, I do wish it was a bit lighter. But this is just how it turned out.

4683910 Be confident in your work, but know the limits to how dark you can go and try to practice controlling your dreams, because those must be some seriously fucked-up nightmares.

4683921 You have no idea. Compared to the other stuff, fetus consumption is at the bottom of the fucked up list of things that go through my head.

4683926 Then watch the show more and find ways to banish your demons.

4683931 I do watch it. In fact, I've memorized the good ones. But this story wasn't my first idea. In fact, my real first idea was where Twilight accidently summoned a human at her exam for Celestia's school when she hatched Spike. In which, the human became her younger brother.

4683944 Why not do that? You can make it different from the others, you can make it good, I'm sure of it.

4683975 I tried to be honest. Yet, I failed to find the right words for it. I'm not good with light hearted stuff. I know that. I'm like Stanley Kubrick without the talent. I'm good at the dark stuff, but I want to do something whimsical and fun.

4684000 Then pull a Tim Burton.

4684004 You mean make a story that has dark elements but a fun atmosphere in which I reuse the same actor over and over? I dunno, maybe in another story.

4684011 Yes to all of them.

4684055 Okay, I've been thinking about it and... maybe you're right. I over stepped on the dark stuff and I should take it back a bit. However, I could use some assistance with this story, maybe see how far I should go with the dark stuff and how far I should take it back. So, can you help me please?

4684078 I have many things, but I'll try to help when I can

4684089 I just need your help filtering my ideas. I'm not asking you to help me build it from the ground up. I have my own ideas that I'd like to share through this story.

4684102 Alright.

4684108 Cool. Is it okay if I PM you?

4684121 Of course

4684397 Yes he's still naked. No, he will not be naked the entire time because that attracts too much attention. I was planning on having AJ give him some of Big Mac's old clothes.

4684401 Good to know. On a too large side note, if you want to make something different from the common HIE, the first step is to pick somewhere other then Canterlot or Ponyville for the main character to live in, like Manehattan. You said in the comments below that your good at making dark stories... so try something like: (Ex. : A human named '____' tries to make his living in Manehattan, with minor success due to the populace seeing him as a monster. A Manehattan mob boss seeks this human out to work for him to put psychological fear into those whom threaten him or his 'business'.) What do you think of it? Was that a good example, or did it suck?

4684560 You do know that he was summoned to Equestria by Twilight because a book says that he was supposed to be part of the most dangerous thing in existence so she could stop the god king, Tirek and save her friends from horrid fates... right?

4684560 Though, that mob boss thing does sound interesting. I may try to think of something with that.

4684570 Your free to use that Idea If you want. Im not really an author myself so it will go to waste unless you want to use it.

4684598 Sure. I think I can make use of it.

I'm getting a lot more positive attention than I thought. But, that's cool. You guys can like the story... even though I don't know why.

Ugh. Hate being sick.

And now we play the waiting game.

NOOOO DURPYYYYYYY