Not sure what to do about a story now, I am trying to figure something out to do with my current stories, but it seems not to be working, im sure i will figure something out.
When Fluttershy discovers her feelings, she is afraid of how to go about them, at first she is ashamed, but she soon finds that she has been super dense about it, telling herself to tell how she felt, she discovers that the feeling isn't mutual, but soon finds that somepony else is following her. Shy doesn't know what to do about the follower, and tries to escape the watchful eyes of this mare that has been watching her.
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First chapter done, going to include the last character in the second chapter and further on
Well 2 chapters down on my very first Fan fic, i hope it isn't too bad for all of you, I have some idea of how Chapter 3 is going to go already, but not entirely certain, I also plan it to be at least 10 chapters, maybe less, maybe more, but yea, if you like what i have written so far, then im sure you will like the end result.
By the way, if you guys have any thoughts or ideas about this, i would like to hear them, i am also thinking about making an alternate ending after i finish the current story.
Well if you have read all the way through to chapter 4, please let me know what you think, i would much appreciate some feedback, I also want you to predict what in general will happen and whether or not my story has a predictable ending. i hope to see comments soon, but for now, I need to nap, and i am halfway done with chapter 5, just need to fix a few quirks here and there, and piece together what i am wanting to cover. and please, if you dont like it, and its because of how the content is put together, please help me out and comment on what i need to fix to make it better, thanks!
Well everypony, I'm off to bed, been putting ideas together on how to work with chapter 6, I still have no feedback from the readers, and would still like some, so yea, anyway, good night all.
8095 words with 7 chapters. awesome!
You still working on the this story right. Anyway their was a couple of capitalization errors Jere and there but other then that good story
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Yes I am still working on this, I am just trying to figure out a few little things here and there, having a temporary writer's block moment. and thanks for the feedback.
Finally got chapter 8! hope you all enjoy it :)
Chapter 9, Bad Kitty is now in progress, I should have it done within the next 18 hours. maybe a bit longer depending on whether or not the story comes easy to me.
i am thinking of writing a continuing book-fiction following this one, however, i want to make it like a twidash or something like that, so yea, i need some input, what you think of this and whether or not i should do what i am thinking
I feel no shame in admitting that I read the first and last chapter, as well as some in the middle, but only skimming
I'm going to be brief, as it is late and I am busy, but I will also be as detailed as possible.
I saw absolutely no improvement between the first and last chapters in terms of writing skill, which is... surprisingly considering that this was 11 thousand words and the point you started at.
So, let's talk about the actual writing.
It was.... bad. It really was. The pacing was out of this world and the characters feel like cheep imitations and you use their nicknames (Twi and Shy) outside of speech which is bad and annoying and Twilight has never once called Fluttershy Shy so it feels out of place coming from her. The word choice is lacking and get repetitive there are virtually no descriptions and the dialogue feels robotic and not at all in-character. About the only thing I can give you a plus on is an original plot and an interesting ship choice for Fluttershy. Aside from that... I'm sorry but I truly cannot say anything positive about this.
Best of luck with whatever else you write, and I hope you improve as a writer.
I admit that i did terrible on this story, i however am still proud of myself for it was my first story ever written. I am attempting to improve my writing skills by writing during the day when i am actually awake, and not writing while angry or anything else altering my inhibition. or whatever the word is