You can thank Goldfur for starting me down this path and a video on youtube for inspiration https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jW5n3k2VgZE Princess Luna goes on a task and discovers a legacy she left behind.
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Admiral Q Ponyform
After seeing huge bursts of power from one universe a Q decides to investigate
Admiral Q Ponyform
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Great start keep it up :)
I've been waiting for more fanfics from that song!!
Now produce MOAR!! <3 <3
This isn;t my first story. just first MLP thus first on here. and there will be more but it's on a rotation with others
This is a good story but you may want to proof read it a bit better. (Reading it aloud is a good way) Someone told me to separate my paragraphs with an extra space to make them easier to read on a computer. Just a thought. Keep at it. it is a good story so far.
Good potential but you really need and editor, Badly.
4546304 i have tried that in the past an ALWAYS got burned. They took forever if they did ANYTHING at all. so I gave up on that ages ago. i don't mind someone copy pasting my story and make corrections for their own archive but i am just done with editors. All I can assure you is i try my best.
Yeah a lot of misspelled words and others that are just plain wrong.
The story looks good but the errors affect it readability. And some are just funny.
4546892 i point to my last comment. feel free to copy paste and edit the story for you archive. but again I am tired of getting burned by no show editors so I'm done with them. As long as you get what I'm trying to say their does it really matter in the long run.
I Do like this chapter, HOWEVER I feel the ending feels...rushed ^^;
4561586 A bit i admit but already working on the next
Pretty good, but it doesn't feel quite as nice as the other chapters. I think part of that is due to the fight sequence being 1 giant paragraph, which should have been several smaller ones. Plus there were some obvious spelling/grammar errors. I'd suggest writing this in Open Office (100% Free), or Microsoft Word. That should help take care of the minor errors.
Though I am curious to see if this is the end of the threat from the North, and what the future holds for our new apprentice.
4574866 I am using office. And that threat in the north is done but that's not to say there isn't a new one.
4574928 or if you will let me: I will take all the chapters, edit them, code them (ie italic), PM them back to you, and all you have to do is to paste them. I would do all the 'leg' work.
Would you allow me to do that?
4581480 I have no problem with that. My proofreading burns was waiting for the fixes so i can post them. If you don't mind seeing it posted then proofread i will glading repost the edit.
Ooh. Interesting!
4784707 keep reading
Lovely.
4784771 Altered Destiny and Nightmare in the Lunar republic are sequels to this.
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That's fine. I myself am not a good grammar writer, you can see that clearly on my stories. But I just cannot help but point that out for you. Your writing has improved loads though.
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Are they? I'll see to them.