Writing a comedy fic can be hard. That's why you make bad FCs!
After Rainbow Dash is asked by Fluttershy to take care of her cottage while she is away, she gladly accepts, and goes to house-sit for her friend. The blue pegasus stumbles across her friend's diary, though, and although she tries to resist reading it, she ends up reading all of her friend's personal secrets.
EDIT: I've lost interest in writing more of these by the second one, so the sequels to this story are cancelled. Sorry!
Thanks to Spyro4287 on deviantART for the cover art!
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Fluttershy has a banned visitors list? Wow, damn, how bad is it, 'Shy?
I think there could be a sequel where Rainbow reads another diary.
Nah.
Oh my god, FOUR favorites RIGHT after I submit this? I thought this story was gonna suck! Thanks, guys!
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Very bad. Do you realize how much grimdark stuff she has next to Pinkie Pie?
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Twilight's diary.
...Naaah! TWILIGHT'S DIARY IS GONNA BE A NOVEL.
4462648 She could take them all and be all like, 'Yay or Nay' And Twilights would be like, Hellz yesh... In another dimension. Then you could make one called Rainbow's Journal. Because she can't have a diary. A journal is totally different.
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So you're suggesting I could make this a series or something? I'LL START NOW!
4462680 Make it! Yes!
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Okay, which pony's diary should Rainbow Dash read next? Also I might even make a story with a compilation of chapters, where Rainbow Dash reads a background pony's diary in each one. Hopefully I'm not copying that "Secrets Shine Brighter" story.
4463076
That's nice. Laugh even more because this is going to turn into a series. Thank Slendermare below for giving me the idea.
4463086 I wonder if it will be payback on Rainbow?
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Maybe. Thanks for the idea, it could appear in the series.
4463142 you're welcome
Not bad, but I have a major problem with the idea of Fluttershy using vulgarities at all. You may want to consider finding another way to have Fluttershy express how hurt and betrayed she felt. It's just a suggestion, though. Anyway, nice work. Save for the uncharacterisitc swearing of Fluttershy, I rather enjoyed this fic.
This fic was pretty good but I did notice you had a tiny bit of a problem with the lavender unicorn syndrome
I liked it.
4464297 yeah, I can't see fluttering cussing at all
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Sorry. But I'd imagine she'd get mad to the point where she cusses since her best friend sort of betrayed her. You're right though, I went a little overboard.
4464559
Lavender unicorn syndrome? Do you mean I was really repetitive with describing the ponies in a different way, like "the blue mare", "the yellow mare", "the red stallion", etc? Yeah, I feel like saying their names too much is bad, but I don't really know another way to describe them other than using their personalities, like how I used "the animal lover" for FS, "the farmer" for Big Mac, and "the Wonderbolt fan" for RD. My repetitiveness when it comes to writing makes me so angry.
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Yeah, I guess I went overboard while writing the story. Sorry for making FS a little bit OOC!
4467200 it was just disturbing know in how flutter shy is but it's cool
4467294
oh, okay. but should I change it or remove the cussing?
4467298 make it pony like, like you bucking ass and stuff
4467304
oh, okay. thanks for the corrections. I should really get some proofreaders or something.
It sounds silly, but I've seen people do it, and it fits pretty well
4467311 I could be one, but I'm not that good at writing so maybe you can help me with my writing ideas
4467330
okay, how about we be proofreaders for each other? but I could still be your proofreader if you can't be one.
4467334 thanks, I can be one I just have trouble with coming up with my own ideas so I can help you too
4467362
okay. I might give you some ideas if I come up with ones I don't really want to write about.
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4467193 ha ya just something I noticed but it isn't nearly as bad as some of the other fanfics I've read like some it seemed like they went through the entire story and only said there real name once
Well I'm surprised that Mac didn't buck Dash's face off
Well this isn't my cup of tea, but it was kind of interesting.
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lel. FS was in there and RD was her friend but I'm sure she was furious too, but Big Mac wouldn't harm her friend, now would he?
well the asertive leasons payed off.
and rainbow you should know better
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They certainly did.
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She can't help it!
good job a vary good story and funny to
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Thanks!
your welcome
That was really good, I do feel Rainbow was a little to selfish for lack of a better word. Still enjoyed it, thanks for writing it.
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Thanks. It's a little bit hard for me to correctly write about Rainbow Dash because of her personality, though.
4462647 I'm surprised she doesn't have a Banned from Equestria list...
After all of of Spike's shenanigans with helping Applejack he should be their too.
I hate FlutterMac, and I sort of skipped the parts where romantic stuff between them happened, but other than that, I liked it!
This was really funny! I just love how you used "the wonder lot fans house" and "the animal lover." Luckily I knew who you were talking about
geez Rainbow you have any respect for other people's(pony's) privacy?
Nice little short read before bed, have a mustache and a like 
My opinion go away haters.