Hammer and Harmony

by omniblitz

Link to the Sequel

For those of you who care the sequel is up now and here's a link:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/193590/hammer-and-harmony-corruption

Comments

[omniblitz]

4516052 Well thanks for giving my story a shot. Hopefully it lives up to your expectations.

[NobleValor]

Honest critique time: Personally, I liked the concept of the story and how things developed and ended. However... what I did not like was the execution of it. Honestly, reading it was like reading a detailed summary. Example, you could've gone into greater detail about Spike and Kajiya's relationship. It has potential, but as it is I give it a 5/10.
Hope I don't discourage you. This is meant to improve your skill not dash it to pieces.

[omniblitz]

5143608 Thank you very much for your honesty. As you can see I write very little, and the stuff I have on this sight is insignificant compared to the report and analysis writing I do for my classes which is probably why it felt like reading a summary. Thanks for taking time out of your day to read and comment.