Fear and Desperation does not mix very well, specially with a creature of unknown force.
In this short story, Chrysalis will learn the lesson about wishes, as they say:
"Be Careful what you wish for. You might just get it."
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It was alright and I love the idea but it was hard to stay interested. The main reason was you were so repetitive in your descriptions of the summoning and Kha'zix's feeding on the drone and fear Chrysalys's felt when he arrived. You should be decribing them but you kept using the same words over and over again most of the time. I love League of Legends and MLP:FIM so the idea is great in my opinion (Kha'Zix being my favorite assassin/jungler doesn't hurt either) so if you could be more decriptive then I could really get into this
It was okay... Needs a sequel tho.
awwww for a second i was expecting a Tyranid.
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Thank you for the comment,
It's my first time writing a story and I wanted to make that 'creeping fear' kind of style that Kha'zix is famous for, but I couldn't quite hit it.
anyways, I appreciate the advice
they real questions is...will they git rekt m8?
I already like it by the look of it
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those are some real nice rap and beats, nice