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Astral Star and Company


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Vel'Koz, eye of the void, is on a mission to collect knowledge by any means necessary.

It was his self-imposed, and only purpose. His pursuit of intelligence has brought him off the League of Legends, and landed him in a new land, filled with new things to learn. His methods of collecting knowledge are destructive, and near-always fatal to the subject. Pity the fool that stands in his way. Pity even more the unlucky life form that knows something he doesn't.

(Rated Teen for: A wealth of death and harm upon some of your favourite, and least favourite characters)

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 72 )

Fascinating rendition of Vel'Koz's personality. Good so far. Not many authors have the guts to kill off a side-character so early in the story.
I hope this keeps updating; I'm eager to read more.

Well as a Vel'Koz mainer, this intrigues me. I'll watch the story for now.

So Vel knew he was a video game character

Have all my thumbs and stars!

I was readying by life form disintegration ray before another thought struck me.

Misspelled word, should be my.

Fear is confusion pain is clarity

You portrayed velkoz as slightly sadistic with that scene with twilight.in my opinion he is brutally efificient.Scaring her does not serve a purpose other than unnerving her and that would make other ponies notice since in your story ponies have a pseudo social psychic link thus countermanding his efforts.

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Quite right. However,.Vel'koz cannot simply kill Twilight Sparkle since she's a big part of Ponyville's social structure, or let her wander freely with knowledge of his existence. The threat was necessary to maintain a low level of suspicion. Not being suspicious at all is impossible at this time.

How ironic. I kept getting farmed by Vel just a few minutes ago.

Comment posted by ShadowFall deleted Apr 15th, 2014

Annie...

Yay! Tibbers!

I am really enjoying this so far...

WARNING. SPOILERS.




Oh my, yet another crossover about some mythical creature (not human this time, thank god), comes to Equestia and learns about its inhabitants to pursue whatever their agenda is. But this is a much more unique take, if not for slowing down in this part. The beginning was much more enjoyable, but now, it's kinda becoming a gradual and typical, meet and greet with all of the show cast, which is inevitable. But for learning things in a foreign world, in this fiction, the ponies don't explain everything in a one paragraph montage, instead:

IMA FIRIN' MY LIFE FORM DISINTEGRATION RAY.

BLARRRRRRRGH.

And then he gains all the memories in this way, a rather unique take on Vel's signature move, and highly, if not overly convenient. But that's what makes Vel so enjoyable. Though I am getting bored with the pacing now, this should head in the right direction. Numerous questions float in my head.

Will Vel either choose to conquer and harvest this world, or will the threat come that only he can stop because he's developed attachment and bonding with ponies and he's got the Life Form Disintegration Ray, an instant win in my opinion.

...

Oh who am I kidding, of course the first option.

What if the summoners, realizing that one of their greatest weapons has escaped, come to Equestria, and summon the other champions to take him back, turning the once peaceful land into a 5v5 three lane map with group matchmaking?

In otherwords, boom, fizzle, explosions.

I really want to see this continue, and hope this gets into the "Popular Stories" box. And 20 likes and no dislikes? Good start.

I'll be reading. And summoning up Brand to defeat the giant one eyes tentacle hentai enfolding monster.

See you on Summoner's Rift.

-ShadowFall

A dislike? No! My life is ruined! :raritydespair:
Oh well, it was bound to happen eventually.
~Astral Star

Are Annie and Vel one and the same, or two different entities at this point?

Comment posted by Deemo deleted Apr 16th, 2014

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Oh! I get it! It's Vel's eye!

I looked to them in surprise. What a strange response for being credited for a kill. The fool summoners often bicker over the issue of ‘kill-stealing’.

That was great.

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4237979 Annie is a "summoned one" if you like, she is bound to vel, but vel can take control his/her body at any time

For future clarification:

'Annie' as she is referred, is essentially my flesh and blood, but with a mind of her own. She is her own pony as much as she is a part of me. Two beings in one entity, yet remaining apart. Annie however, is the puppet and I, her master. I am my mind, she is my body. She owes her whole existence to me.

-{>(|)<}-

4242049 I want more please of this story

While the ride was a bit fun from the start, I'm afraid this is getting rather dull for me.:applejackunsure:

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If you like graphic autopsies and lots of gory magic, the next chapter is for you. I can't have the whole story be full of fighting and killing, or it will get boring anyway. Hint, if you haven't already guessed, this is set just before "A Canterlot Wedding" and will continue through it. Keep it in mind.

~Honour Bound

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It's not really the killing that was keeping me in. Frankly, I was just reading for Vel'Koz's reaction to Equestria, but he's literally treating it like some sort of book. Violently and without mercy. Then it kinda hits me that Vel'Koz is definitely not a character that I would be interested in reading a story about. Sure he's awesome, but utterly his only goal is to gain knowledge, and we really don't see any motive behind that. That's it. He doesn't hope, nor does he have any dreams. Only an insatiable hunger for information with no cause.
If we look at Twilight, we can see that same thing in her, but that's not the ONLY aspect we discover about her. We know that she is a flawed character as she starts out anti-social to others, and then we see her grow as a person who learns about the wonders of making merry with others and becoming happy by being friends with another.
We see that she has fears, hopes, emotions, and makes mistakes. Because of all that, we don't see her as just another 2-Dimensional bookworm. We see her as a unique pony, and on top of that, one of the many reasons why we [the bronies] exist and stick around.
Which brings me back to the Vel'Koz in your story. We're already 5 chapters in and so far, he has not made a single mistake that gave setbacks from immediate to major levels. He intimidates Twilight into not telling the truth about his presence in Equestria with ease, covers his tracks by reconstructing the damages he caused [Zecora and her house] with powers that are obviously not canon, and can make his way to Canterlot City - undetected - simple with the information that he viciously seized from the mind of a Guard that stood no chance against an all-powerful being that collects information with brutal mental force.
He does not feel, we already know he is a being not capable of dreams as he is a Void Being seemingly with only one goal: knowledge. For what purpose, it is unknown and probably nonexistent. If it's to become the most knowledgeable being in the entire universe, then to me that's cliche and boring.
And ultimately, it was bland and dull for me to read all that. That's my bite with this story. It was just nothing but Vel'Koz succeeding and succeeding over and over again. With no consequences.
I know you love this story. I know you care for it, but honestly up to this point, I don't think this is a story for me.

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No worries, I didn't expect everyone to like it. It's a big world out there. You've pretty much nailed it on the head in regards to his character. For all we know, he could've been at this for thousands upon thousands of years. He cannot die, only be defeated. His powers extend beyond his mediocre arsenal in the actual game. If he is to collect knowledge, he must also know how to use it.

"Kill to learn, learn to kill,"-Vel'koz

He is pretty much, a machine. Collecting knowledge is his only purpose, and he's pretty damn good at it too.

A character that may interest you would be an 'Assassin' who kills, is good at it, has feelings, hopes, dreams, but is far from perfect. I recommend looking for characters like that around fimfiction.

I understand where you're coming from. I don't expect everyone to like this story. in fact, I thought more people would hate it. Any feedback is welcome, because this is a learning experience for me too. Now go, no hard feelings between us :twilightsmile:

~Astral Star

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Those are possibilities with Vel'Koz. Not much is known about Void beings other than their similar traits in hunger.

I don't particularly like to play assassin characters. I'm actually partial to mages, and I do have Vel as one of my Champs.

But aside from that, I am sorta interested in assassin characters with dreams and such.

Hah. To be honest, I absolutly love how you portrayed the Summoners as the actual League of Legends players.

I wonder how Vel would react if he found out that 14 year olds who can only say every word that's associated with "homosexual" to their own Summoner allies were the ones that are actually directing him on Summoner's Rift?

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Hah! That would be hilarious :derpytongue2:

I just don't know how I'm going to fit that in, it'll probably come later (if at all) once everything start's to go downhill...

~Honour Bound

4231553 That sounds to much like 1984 for me to feel comfortable that book scares me.

4341620 Everything is going to go downhill? That means that Vel will have to plow through guards using his Q W E and R, right?

Don't forget his passive.

I have to wonder.

Will you be writing about Vel'koz completely going apesh!t on everything with his abilities?

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Vel'koz is far to intelligent to go about killing in such a fashion. That sounds like something nocturne would do (spoilers). No, but in time, you'll see...

On a side note, I'll be taking some licence for some of his abilities. After all, there's got to be more to his power than the 4 skills he is limited to in the fields.

4413433 Exactly. But in my opinion, I believe that the Summoners purposely hindered his abilities to balance him out on the field, so he wouldn't grow too powerful to come out of all of our computers and disintegrate us.

For example, I would think Plasma Fission would fire out in a massive flash, a sphere of energy being hurled at the target. But when it impacts on the target, killing it, it would split off and home into two others, then they would split off until multiple spheres would be flying around, smashing into everything they wished to destroy.

Void Rift would tear open the ground, purple fire spewing out from the void as enemies fell down to their dooms, the gap would close in the ground, crushing them, and those who thought themselves lucky of not falling in would be blasted to pieces by the secondary explosion as the tear seals itself.

Tectonic Disruption would be a dual Plasma Fission shot that would aim for the ground, but the shot would burrow through until they hit a tectonic plate down below. They would gather up and store up energy, then dash back up to the surface and smash above the ground, sending enemies flying in multiple directions, screaming and disintegrating in mid-air. All of this would happen in one second for the bolt to travel down, then back up.

For the Life-Form Disintegration Ray, I believe that may have been the one thing that the Summoners had to have nerfed at least five times, but it still wasn't enough.

PENTAKILL

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Blind.

Vel'koz's worst nightmare.

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He is anything but a support, especially in this story. Also, please tone down the obscene language.

~Charlene Embermane

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I can't believe that you'd go on THIS website and ask someone to tone down the innapropriate language. C'mon. :unsuresweetie:

Also, I was simply complaining about the recent massive influx of crappy vel'koz supports in NA ranked games. Played 5 placemznts, 3 had support vel:fluttershysad:

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While I can sympathize with you on the amount of support Vel'kozs (and jungle Jinxs, bot Darius and ADC Janna etc...), the comment you posted is highly irrelevant to the story. Also, people of all ages visit this site. I don't like to hear swear words thrown around so casually. It's common courtesy. Come on, you just swore in front of a group of bronies, some of which are children under 10. We're not called '...and Company' for no reason.

If you don't have a constructive comment to make (good or bad) regarding this story, then I recommend you to vent your frustration else where.

~Charlene Embermane

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This is a site with erotic fanfiction and M-rated stories, whether you like it or not. A ten-year-old on this site, quite frankly, won't give a shit.

Now stop being the Democracy Police and continue writing your story. It's quite good.

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Said erotic and M rated stories CAN BE FILTERED. I do appreciate the compliment but I dismiss the insult. I will reiterate, people of all ages come here. Because such fiction exists, it does not mean it is seen and read by every body.

Here in our stories, we have a certain expectation. It's the same expectations in speech in the real world. Would you go up to all of us here IRL and say what you just said?

We will continue this story, but we want none of this language. Again, vent your frustrations elsewhere and post only relevant commentary.

~Charlene Embermane

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I would go up in front of "all of you" and assert that you are allowed to use swear words on a My Little Pony fanfiction site, yes.

However, that is my opinion, and I'm fine with you telling me not to use lingo on your comment thread. What I have a problem with is you implying that it applies everywhere on the site.

P.S. As for "relevant commentary", it is my belief that every story should be commented upon by all who read it. If I have no relevant criticism, I simply try and put something interesting or funny for the author to read.

Yes! Vel's abilities were showcased!

Accept that he used barrier as a summoner skill? Noob! Ignite and Flash is the way to go.

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Hah! Any old mage can cast a shield. I doubt he'll want any help from the summoners.

4426603 But he is unaware that one is currently writing his fate in this story...

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