MLP X Fairy Tail crossover
After a failed attempt to get rid of the Fairy Tail wizard guild some of its members have gone missing.
Now Natsu Dragneel, Gray Fullbuster, Lucy Heartfilia and Erza Scarlet are trapped in the also magical world of Equestria as well as trapped in the bodies of pony's.
Can they master there new forms, new magic and new friends to help both their world and Equestria before a ancient magic brings both worlds to an end.
(I will try to cater it for thous who haven't seen the anime but will be writing from the Edolas story ark).
Chapters (4)
Oooooooh, I like it! You need to check through it for capital letters and spelling though. It is a really nice story so make more chapters please! Heh, a like and a fav
if natsu has wings make them dragon wings
It's LuCy, not LuSy
And I can already see this is gonna be EPIC!!!
There is no nice way to say this, but... Your spelling and grammar is terrible. Just terrible. I'm surprised the admins let it through.
Noted on the spelling the admins don't normally check for that, will try harder, cheers for the advice
poor nastu
4580937 I'm surprised I didn't notice any of the things you just said, but then again I ain't no spelling/grammar nazi
Could you put a Flashlight romance in your story?
I love the ending of this chapter. Its so funny AND true. Keep up the good work. Gotta love fairy tail.
please post more of this story. can't wait until the next one.
If you want some inspiration listen to this.
you could also get some ideas by reading this story link.
This isnt going to end well. I just know it.
Flailing limb
the Pinkie sense
Natsu stared
I'm starting to see why you have the dislikes you do. You seem to let anything go through so long as spell-checker doesn't catch you on it. I also noticed plenty of points where you should have used semi-colons or colons. (It's bad if I notice something like that.)
I checked this out because I'm writing my own anime Xover with Toriko. Since grammar doesn't bother me, I'll read on.
As Twilight and her friends helped the four strange ponies to their hoofs, something became clear. Whatever or whoever they were, they certainly were not from this world.
I've ran into an issue I have with story flow that kills it for me; I am done.
crap. there's no romance tag. well that sucks.
I read again. I love again.
Its... so... beautiful... *wipes a tear from eyes*
Needs something to separate the scene transitions. When read as is you suddenly change locations without any notice. Also, few errors.
Two cloaked figures
grabbed
Discord should be capitalized since it's a name. You wouldn't type twilight sparkle if addressing the pony
just ponies. you use 'pony's' if you are referring to an object held by or owned by said pony
stirred
hit
This was a trick. A trick with magic. A horse could not talk, he must still be hearing things.
few issues with that last one, so I just rewrote the whole thing.
Misplaced comma: he went to rub eye but when he looked his hand was gone, replaced by a orange hoof,
Overall, just take a breather from the writing and look it over once you're done. It also helps if you read it aloud to yourself. If something doesn't make sense, you can pick it up pretty easy that way.
he had wings, large feathered wings,
Again, pony's is possessive, referring to an object rather than a person. Ponies would be what you need here
We'll, as in we will
Just a bit of confusing writing here. Not really clear
guard. Also, should start a new sentence after 'drive the hydra out.' otherwise it's a run-on sentence.
Just gonna rewrite it. Turning back, Natsu gave Twilight a goofy smile.
damn
think you mean marveled
Much as we enjoy the horse puns, it would be "Hey"
Just one. huge. run on. sentence
halt
again, damn.
Happy
can you make it to Twilight
flew
flew again
just reel here
whole. hole is a gap in the ground
Hopefully this helps spruce up your story a bit. If not for the grammar and spelling errors, it is quite an enjoyable read.
in a huff
ma'am
their world*
anywhere with this pen allowing
those
they're
flew
lose
requiping
5027724 Wrong!
KO please you'll continue this story it's an awesome combination of both shows.
Ko please say the next chapter is coming soon cause I like this story and it's awesomeness.
4581192 KO is the next chapter coming hopefully to see some actions.
Ok first I did not expect this to be this popular it really was just a past time but I am getting back to it, so to all you who want the next chapter its coming I promise.
I can practically see Juvia saying to herself "I sense a rival for my beloveds affection!" in a creepy tone. If Juvia finds her way to Equestria, Rarity is going to have some very rainy days ahead.
6497175 KO PLEASE say the next chapter is coming soon.
Natsu x Rainbow dash top couple. Hope new chapter comes soon.
6497175 Natsu/Dash kids name Pyro Spectrum, if its a boy. Aurora Dragneel if its a girl.
Can't wait to read more!
I love it and can't wait for more
Awesome! Loving this so far, and the Unison Raideith Rainbow and Natsu ruled! Juvia will not be happy with Rarity trying to get her Gray-sama!
I absolutely love it! And I love the ships that are starting to form Gray x Rarity and Natsu x Rainbow Dash.
Please come out with more!