Sub-Par author with a somewhat light-hearted and silly writing style.
After seeing what Tirek did to her Daddy Discord and his friends, Screwball had decided that Tartarus just wasn't bad enough punishment for him. So with permission from the Princesses and Discord, she heads down there with a single objective...
Tick Tirek off as much as possible.
And knowing Screwball, that won't be hard.
First fic involving Tirek. Second One-shot I've ever done.
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Everything just went by too quickly. Just about every detail in this should have had more time spent on it. Also, I don't like Screwball. She's what Discord would be if Discord wasn't amazing. Only slightly insane instead of completely unhinged, and shifts into serious mode far too easily.
Tartarus selfie is a good kind of mindfuck. Bravo.
4375031 it's a one shot with a pony who moves at her own irritating pace. What did you expect?
LOL
Good one! Love it! 
And I love how you characterize Screwball, I don't like when she's put as a dramatic character, if she's Discord spawn she has to be wicked crazy, just as you wrote her here.
Great job!
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thanks. I try to mix t up a little when I write Screwball. 
Oh- Oh god, you can make this into a series, a chapter for each week. PLEASE!
I bet you can get more ideas from the ____ ways to tick off lord voldemort series
Buy tirek a stress ball.
Now what do we have here? A story with Screwball that doesn't make her an overdramatic, unsympathetic mess of a character. Opting instead to make her a bit of a pony Discord. You know, I would call it a stroke of genius, had it not been for the fact that making Screwball more like her father should be a no-brainer.
Then again, I suppose it's true what they say that: "Amongst the blind, the cyclops is king."
For my sake, I hope this story will serve as an inspiration for future Screwball fans -- such as myself -- and a bit of a template on how to write her character.
Tirek was also a lot of fun, having him lose his temper like that did earn a chuckle out of me once or twice.
All in all, a very good read. Extremely amusing and a very good example of how Screwball should be characterized -- at least from my perspective.
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You dun good, have a thumbs up.
4498013 Thanks for your input.
I really enjoy writing Screwball with this identity (as shown by my other Screwball stories). Making her severely over-dramatic and sad like most people seem to portray her just seems a little boring for a chaos-fueled pony, at least if it isn't done right.
So I chose to go the route that SHOULD be obvious but for some reason to most people is not...
That being making her badshit insane.
this is soo funny and a good story plz make chapter 2
A few grammatical mistakes. Otherwise, for a one-shot, good. My one-shot is really horrible.... I was mostly bored and had to get the idea out of my mind....
Liked it. Simply because I like Screw Ball. In fact, I have a similar idea just like this one, except Discord accompanies ScrewBall and ScrewBall is more certifiably insane than "in your face".
I wish I could make a one-shot story. But every time I try, it ends up longer.
4375031 "Everything just went by too quickly. Just about every detail in this should have had more time spent on it. Also, I don't like Screwball. She's what Discord would be if Discord wasn't amazing. Only slightly insane instead of completely unhinged, and shifts into serious mode far too easily."
I agree. Still, it was a one-shot thing written just so the author could unload it out of his/her mind. The potential for improvement still remains though.
Possible errors:
1. She took one look at how huge it was and gagged
- No period in the end.
2. Tirek asked, with that shit-eating smile still present on her face.
- Her as in Screw Ball or Tirek?
Screwy has a mouth on her, doesn't she?
5921510 In nearly every fic I have her in, I make Screwball basically, a bratty, overconfident teenager with too much power. That's why she curses so much.
I just thought it was funny!
5921712 Glad you did. Thank you.
I honestly don't know why this one one shot got so much praise though. It's just Screwball getting on Tirek's nerves.
That's why it's funny!
Ya take that you overgrown love child of a horse and a man.
Er, that's 12 eyes, where does he keep them all?
6514713 Whoops, fixed.
6514832 What can I say, Math Sucks!
SCREWBALL IS BEST PONY
Sombra and her would not get along.
Ok, I'm giving her all the hugs and candy I can. Too cute, very effective on the jerk, and given how Fluttershy makes her dad happy.....super protective on a two way street. Hmmm, after Changeling thing with Discord, Trixie, Thorax, and Starlight she probably calls them aunt and uncle respectively.
Sequel please.
This absolutely NEEDS a sequel
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Considering recent events in the show, including Tartarus' new resident...maybe, who knows lol