new german writer. Feel free to contact me with you opinions and or grammatical or spelling mistakes
After her plan to rule over Equestria failed. Queen Chrysalis resides in the royal chambers of the currently under construction Hive. As there is nothing else to do, she decides to watch one of her spies, who managed to infiltrate the royal castle.
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Nice! especially since this is your first story! only mistake i see is.
"I had my peasants rebuild our hive somewhere save,"
i believe the word your looking for is safe? other then that it was awesome!
Keep up the good work!
One problem I had was:
Changelings in their true form have wings, and are able to use them.
That's about it. Pretty good story.