Wizard101 crossover
Hello there, Name's Joshua Starflame. Yeah I know stupid name. When I get my hands on the person who gave me it I'll sic a Heck Hound on them. I'm a student in Ravenwood(dunno why I haven't been expelled yet. I set the record for most detentions in the first year. Partly my fault, kept forgetting to call the Wizard's Circle). I was sent to Equestria by my headmaster to hopefully(Key word there is hopefully) help with some of the problems that had been cropping up. Namely a few wars, I think some guy named Sombra or Discord. Can't remember. But wouldn't you know it, I got a bit out of hand(about twenty-seven house fires, two forest fires and one that I really don't know how it happened. Seriously it was his worst idea.) and in the process of attempting to run away, I ran into a creature with petrification abilities.
I'd have gone home long before that but there wasn't a world door in Equestria. I know I have to make one but finding the materials, especially when on the run, is a pain in the rear. You'd think after 1500 years they would've forgotten the whole thing right? Well bit of advice, if you really wanna make amends.. Try to remember that some of your spells don't like listening to you.
Edit: This story has been slated for a major rewrite. As such, it will remain on hiatus until I actually get around to said rewrite and can do it to a point where not only am I pleased with it, but any pre-readers I find are pleased as well. To those who enjoyed it in its current state, thank you and I hope when I get around to rewriting it, that you enjoy it as well.
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Oh, well that certainly isn't very nice is it?
He is new, is he not? So give him a chance, even a little one. Okay?
Good day.
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Mm. Perhaps I was a little harsh.
Still... calling his OC Joshua Starflame...
It hurts, man.
It hurts my soul.
4391538 Understandable, I know it lacks subtlety and makes his character seem like a gary stu from the offset, however he is brand new and fresh to the website, and he seems to be lacking a pre-reader or editor to make him aware of his mistakes. I know someone who is a renown author on this website must look upon the other plebeians as nothing more as jockeys attempting to follow in your footsteps, but not everyone can be as good as thee 'Parasprite' So go a little easy on him. Even just a small amount, maybe give constructive criticism instead of something that made me bawl my eyes out when I was in youth (The burning monk)
Good day.
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I know that I will never understand your pain, because of my privilege, but please, accept as heartfelt an apology as my white self can possibly put forth for unknowingly posting one of your triggers. I'm literally crying as I type this message. There are tears actually sliding down my cheeks. It's like a perfect storm of tears. I'm going to drown in it. Like I'm drowning in my guilt. My personal darkness. My suffering. It is my cross to bear.
Anyway, to the author: I'm sorry that I let my 1000+ follower privilege get in the way of your success. I'm going to go cut myself now.
Liking the story so far, looking forward for the next chapter
4391497 actually i've never heard of that story. it's actually the name i gave my wizard on the game wizard101 a few years ago. and as for the plot... honestly I seriously have no idea of the story you're talking about. If you could link me to it that'd be nice because it would help me see where I could fix things.
4391538 To be very honest, I didn't know the name had any sort of repute. As it is, I started playing wizard101 back when I was younger and I gave my wizard that name(this is long before I joined the brony fandom or started reading any sort of novels.). The character in the story is based off of the wizard I created then but with a bit more personality(least I attempted to give him one.). After all, the wizards in the actual game are pretty much mary sue's or gary stu's. I kid you not. I'll work on going back and making things a bit more readable once I get more experience though.
4391633 Not exactly what I was hoping for. Regardless, vain apology is still an apology, and therefore shall constitute as something akin to 'success'. You are a talented author, that much needs to be said. But is it not a waste of your valuable time to parade around the fics of such (And I mean no offence to the author of this *Ahem* fiction.) lesser authors? Hmm? I have intel from several reliable sources that you allow these thoughts of yours about the latest fictions to wander free in a Skype chat where many wholeheartedly agree with you. But why? Why do such things? Does insecurity plague your thoughts? You'd never expect the author of such deep and moving works such as 'Gloomy every day' to be like… this. I'm wrought with both surprise disappointment, something which I most certainly didn't want to feel when talking about such an author. Shame.
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Writing guide
Editor's group
Writer's group
Thesaurus
Mary Sue litmus test
There's a lot of useful stuff in those links.
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Thanks, both of you, for those links. They should come in handy for getting this story better. As it is I fully admit it needs fixing in its current state and any help towards that goal is appreciated.
HAHAHA I love it. I have a question what lvl fire wizard is he?
4874990 When last I left off on W101, I was level 64. He's based primarily off of my wizard in the game so that's what he is. He probably gained a couple levels during the first few days in Equestria what with having to catch and get rid of his own creatures though.
4875018 ok nice he's strong is that your only wizard in game? me i have a death wizard he's lvl 70 and his name is wolfnighthunter.
Seems pretty good. I know a bit about wizard 101, but not much. My brother played it and I watched a bit.
4875399 I have a death wizard who won't be appearing in this story, mainly because he's only in wizard city still because I'm focusing on my fire one.
4877372 ok well if you need help on wizard101 just message me and lets see what i can do
Definitely... an intriguing turn of events... It's as if your story is stress-testing the fourth wall... All I can really say is tread carefully.
4884868 I won't spoil everything here. But there is a reason as to why Spellbook knows this stuff and it does tie to his original home.
4885106 and I believe you, it's just an info-bomb like that tends to be like walking in a minefield that doesn't have any visible triggers.
4885275 Now the question is who's gonna be the first to detonate it... I won't deny it needs work and I am going to be going back to edit it some more.
yay its back!
I LOVE IT! i wonder who lucky wizards get pick!? XD any ways keep up the good work!
4885834 Well to be honest I'm expecting very few to even try. I'm not a notable author and this is a minor story compared to what really gets noticed out there. Plus the genre this is a part of generally has a bad rep :/ But hey if people actually apply I'll be happy. Thanks and I hope you'll enjoy chapter 3 whenever I get off my lazy ass and write it.
4885877 lol ok and one more thin. WELL COME TO THE LAZY CLUB! the only way you can get in this club is 1. you need to sit around alot 2. i'm to lazy to tell ya the rest XD
I thought it was going to say "on fire".
Why doesn't he just teleport?
4899916 Hmmm... Good question and I shall work on answering that in my next chapter. Thanks for bringin it up!
Fix your wording and punctuation.
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4902765 Can you provide me some examples of the faulty grammar and punctuation? If I missed it once before it's probable that I'll miss it again without assistance.
Aww...
Thought this might have been a Spellcasting 101: Sorcerers get all the girls crossover by somebody that miss-remembered the title. (Like I did.)
Damn shame that trilogy seems to be all but forgotten. Among the funniest darn games I've ever played.
I'm sadly not much for even playing MMO's, so I sadly don't think this story is for me.
Still, good luck with it!
I like the idea but I was kind of upset right away with it when I read that there wouldn't be any magic circles.
4908970 There won't be any... yet. There's a current reason as to why he can't use them at the beginning of this. But don't worry there will be some present in this story
4904107 why don't you get an official proofreader? That should help.
4912820 Already looking for some now. Thanks for the advice!
4913577 no problem! I can see this becoming a great story! Definitely something I can get behind. Good Luck!
4916134 Thank you sir. I've also uncovered a possible second and third question to answer later on as well within the first chapter. I hope you will enjoy it when I can get the time to write the next chapter and I hope I can improve upon the 2 flaws you've found this far
4916151 I'll be waiting!
4934867 Hey man just wanted to give a heads-up. I've revised this chapter quite a bit to hide some items that weren't exactly necessary as well as removing the fourth wall break. Take a look and see what you think. The question you posed earlier will actually be answered in the chapter I'm currently working on.
Will there be more this is good
5801251 Right now it's on hiatus while I work on other stories. Unfortunately I don't know how long it'll be until I return to this. It will happen eventually though