Rocky is a bad stallion. He's a bully and a brute, but one day he finally crosses the line at a club where good times can be had, for a price.
The price he'll pay for his actions, however, will send his life into turmoil. Left to pick up the pieces, what can he make of himself now?
Note: The first scene (you'll know which one) has some rather... sensitive parts, but that's the extent of it all. The rest of the story covers some adult scenes, so don't show this to the little 'uns.
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I loved it. Very touching, realistic and well written :)
That made me cry.
What a beautiful story. Thank you for pointing it out to me, Midnight. Wow.
Still hope we get a 3rd chapter for this someday :)
This story is excellent.
I want to simultaneously hug you and whack you on the head for twisting my emotions like that, an excellent chapter and hope to see you come back to this in time
Well done.
Cute.
WTB update.
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Quite apart from having the dubious honour of this being my one Jossed fanfic (Caramel is straight? say it ain't so!), I only have so many hours I can write in.
This is on hiatus - not complete (though tentatively so) - and I will have to come back to it another time.
I'm glad you enjoyed it though, it's one of my older works and something I'm still relatively proud of for being somewhat off the wall and different.
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oooh, quick reply.
It was rather lovely, and with a little.. ehe, humanization, this story could be used as an inspirational tale for the LGBT youth community, especially for the poor transgirls who suffer so.
I've a transman friend who suffers less than me, because I'm homo and he's bisexual, but transgender. M2F is very frowned upon, but F2M is accepted because for the most part, not a huge difference.
This world confuses me, and I went of on a tangent. Oh dear.
Good story anyway.
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Well, I happened to be... in the area, so to speak.
If this story helped you or him (I apologize if I get the genders wrong here), then that makes me glad. I don't know if it needs humanization, though I admit pastel-coloured ponies wouldn't be the first thing to enter the minds of the generic LGBT youth. I know how bitchy things can get, anyway, so I guess it may not something that would be freely read, either, which is sad.
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) and yeah, biologically is female, but the school has to call him.. HIM. Teachers can get suspended if they don't 
and he legally changed his name to a male name, too. 
Yeah.
What? Help? No. My friend only likes Cupcakes, but otherwise hates MLP (IKR!?!?
So you got that as right as anyone has a hope of.. getting it right? I guess.
I don't need help either, really, just saying this story has huge potential for help if it gets humanized, so I might start working on that. I'll credit you with it, if you want, after I drop it off with my local LGBT youth support group. You could be famous! In Australia!
Lots of LGBT bronies, not suprisingly, but I know none besides myself.
Anyhow, I might start humanizing that story tomorrow. Hmm.
OH MY GOD.
S2 Epp17 dictates that GIRLFRIEND is the correct term, not Marefriend.
EVERY SHIPPING FIC ON THIS SITE IS WRONG. IGJWUGFY ROQ VETFQVQ
*brain explosion.*
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If he thinks he's a he, I have no problem with that.
If you want to take that story and humanize it, go ahead!
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I just might..
Hmmm. Could be interesting, and yeah. He is a he, for all non-biological intents and purposes. Not legally, yet ,but male name and teachers have to refer to him as he, as I've said, so it's a start.
Huh, there's more to this?
I thought it was a two parter.
This story is very good. It was painful to read, by design, but it was never exploitative. Every unpleasant thing was there for a reason. It has grammatical errors and stylistic problems, otherwise I'd favorite it. I didn't even understand what was going on with "begging the coffee machine" from the second floor, for instance. The two alternate endings in the second chapter really, really confused me; there's no indication that they're alternate endings. "* * *" does not mean "alternate ending"; it means "scene break".
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They're not alternate endings - it's a scene break.
I knew it was a bit awkward, but most people got what I meant. The action comes to a close... and then you see the first part of the letter being written. And then we go back to the action for what really happened.
As for the coffee machine, well - Rocky is living in a house above the pastry/sweet shop. He noticed that customers had already bought coffee, and decided to expand to get a little bit more cash. He did that by asking his hosts for their old coffee machine. It was, of course, upstairs in their living area.
Did you read chapter 2?
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I see now how that's supposed to work. I had to read that five or six times before I figured it out, though, even knowing there was a trick. I think what threw me was the murder charges. Knowing that Twilight and the Princess were agreeing to charge three ponies with murder, I assumed somepony was dead. I don't think they'd manufacture trumped-up murder charges that way. I'm not saying it's unethical, just not in character.
The coffee machine thing is probably a regional dialect issue. Where I'm from, a coffee machine is a big thing you find at a coffee house. A coffee maker is what you'd have in your house. IIRC I also couldn't find the object of the verb "beg".
Anyway, it's a really good story, but if you send it to Equestria Daily they'll bounce it back with dozens of corrections of grammar, punctuation, point-of-view changes, and technical issues that don't impact reader enjoyment very much but make you look more professional. So go over it really carefully first if you want to do that. Of course, they might just read the first scene and kick it back immediately. I don't remember if they have something like a "no gore" policy. They interpret all their policies as strictly as possible, in my experience.
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Ah, it's regional dialects at issue here with how I used "coffee machine" and "begged".
I wrote the story at least 18 months ago, so I like to think I've improved since then - at least a little. It also went up on Equestria Daily a long time ago and probably wouldn't have gone up in its current condition now. Plenty of my stories which are up on Equestria Daily wouldn't go up today if they had been written as well as they were then. Then again, the audience has also grown a thousandfold so the extra fixes are important.
I can't remember now how I had the "murder charges" thing setup. I haven't re-read this story in ages... maybe I should!
1240964 Hey, you wrote The Ambassador's Son! And... lots of good stuff!
Sorry, I thought I had found a promising new writer and was giving helpful advice.
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I always say, I'm one of the most famous completely unknown bronies
Lovely story <3
Pretty good. :)
Lets see, assumption that all people who hate gays are secretly gay themselves. Check.
Supposedly secretly gay main character suddenly decides to be gay, after balls are snipped. Check.
One gay character in story advocates willing castration as a means to escape male "faults" check.
10/10 Glory to the Rainbow!
Down with the breeders! 
Above bullshit aside, this is a horribly unrealistic tale of a male who is heterosexual, yet afraid of being seen as homosexual, magically becoming one upon losing his gonads. (b-b-but he couldn't get it up! FUCK OFF, ED gets even the best of men!) Its like some sort of bats shit insane gay tumblr user's wet revenge dream against those who don't approve of his lifestyle.
The ponies that defend this sicken me with their whole "you don't know you are gay till you try it" or "all homophobes are secretly gay" 
And that whole cut your nuts off thing will liberate you? Holy dick I thought it was a feminist who was writing this for a second! 
Overall this was a terrible read, shame my yaoifangirlness lead me to read this. I sincerely believed the author would be capable of tackling such a sensitive topic as a male losing his gonads in a realistic way, and I didn't want to believe he or she (or it, damned intergendered freaks. Make up your damned minds) would stoop to such crappy levels.
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I'm sorry you feel that way, really. I mean, I didn't mean to approach this as a "heterosexual (homophobic) male gets fixed (hurrhurrhurr)" story, but I guess it's possible to see it that way. It's not meant to be taken that way, it's not really meant to be anything other than "lifechanging event shows a character what really matters" through a rather off-the-wall extrapolation of what we do to ponies and horses translated into fantasy-space.
At least, I hope you're serious. After the "TG freaks" line, I'm not so sure. What can I say, if you're not serious you could just be displaying some rather common symptoms.
Sure, I could write an awful tragedy where this happens and the character in question spirals slowly down into despair and suicide. Or I could write one where the character in question is gelded, and then he just loses all interest in sex. Both of those would be interesting, but instead I wrote about a repressed (bi-)(homo-)sexual (not to insinuate that is always the case, honest) who is "liberated" by being outcast from his comforting delusion of superiority and shown quite literally the other side of things.
Basically, if he hadn't been latently bi/homo-sexual, it would have ended much the same, but the "silly colt" at the end of the first chapter would have left, alone.
It's a sad state of affairs, though, if you truly believe that love is entirely eros.
Sorry you didn't like it, what did you want it to be about? I can write some m/m stallion on gelding clop if you really want...
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I had a quick look at the info available on that study you're quoting and it says nothing about how many of the homophobic men were aroused by male homosexual porn. All it says for sure is that of all the claimed heterosexuals in the study, the only ones finding themselves aroused during the test were from the homophobic group.
The sample size used in this study is also appallingly small, to the degree where it's results could mean practically anything.
Furthermore you're assuming that arousal from viewing male homosexual porn means the viewer is a repressed homosexual/bi-sexual, and not merely aroused by a sense of forbidden depravity in what they're viewing... or any other number of possibilities.
In other words, you're assuming one hell of a lot from very, very little.
"Sure, I could write an awful tragedy where this happens and the character in question spirals slowly down into despair and suicide."
Or you could write a more realistic reaction for a sentient main character who gets sexually mutilated by "social justice warriors"... Lust for revenge perhaps? Disgust? But yeah, despair and suicide seems fine too.
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You may want to give this bit of text a read:
http://www.skepdic.com/penilep.html
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From what I gather in the study (and it's not the only like this done), the sexual response is entirely due to sexual excitation. I think the real paper addresses the cause of that arousal better than the pop culture version I linked to, but (from what I understand), the physiological response is not only clear, but certain.
I think it's pretty fascinating that our society seems to have this bizarre idea that certain acts are "wrong", without any real justification, and that this is so well reinforced that it can cause this sort of psychological response.
I am not, however, a psychologist.
Anyway, regarding the alternatives... I'm not actually convinced that a gelding going on a rampage and brutally murdering his molesters is much more realistic. Batman, so far at least, only really exists in comic books. It's definitely an idea, though. Physiologically speaking, I'm not sure that a gelding - bereft of the majority of the testosterone produced - would remain angry enough to go through with it. What would society say, for starters?
You know what, it's interesting. I'll think about it. Probably nothing will come of it, got a lot on my plate as it is, but you never know.
Also, where are you all coming from? This is a relatively obscure story published a long, long time ago and quite frankly I think it shows my inexperience as much as the plot stands out for being strange.
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I'm a bisexual female.
that teensy stab at being a homophobe is powerless against me 
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eh. What can I say? Sorry you don't like it. Allow me to refund the purchase price :D
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A hug would be great as monetary compensation.
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bah I don't need this hug. You can have it back. *hug*.
honestly, though, I had a weird idea and ran with it. My muse is fickle. And may need therapy.
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What they used for the study was a penile plethismograph, which as described in the article linked in my second response to you, has no way of telling what is causing the penis of the subject to swell.
The article in fact directly talks about the study that you are basing your beliefs on.
And I never said anything about society seeing homosexual sex acts as "wrong", but the homophobic test subjects probably would see it as such.
I also never said anything about going on a rampage or murdering people.
I believe I put forth the notion that anger, disgust, despair, vengefulness and suicide seemed like reasonably realistic reactions to this kind of bodily harm being wrought upon a person... but nothing about murder.
Perhaps you have some personal issues with regards to testosterone that need to be worked out... but then again, I'm no psychologist either.
I was told about this fic by my close friend Steel Thunder, so that's where I'm coming from.
Hey, Mids :
"Twilight turned around and blinked, and immediately dropped to her knees to renew her efforts. Rocky’s eyes flickered open, and focused on first Twilight, and then on Rocky, where they stayed. He smiled."
Happy birthday, and have a proofreading note on a two year old story. ;P
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hah, thanks for the birthday wishes. man, is that error there again? I fixed it at one point, so I guess I fixed it in fimfic, then re-uploaded from gdocs...
I always have loved a good gelding story. Actually taking the steps to become a self made eunuch.
So...
Why did Big Mac geld him and then never cop to it?
And why was he a mare but still a stallion?
Your horse words are confusing, middy. :(
Old story I guess but I liked it.
I don't get all that much from the worldbuiding though.