Thanks for update seven. Its good to see an update of one of my favorites. Even if it has things that crush me like what he did to dee. I pray that nothing like that happens to me as I transition. Any ways I love ya friend. Yes seven I publicly said I love you. You a good friend. Same goes for all my friends. Now I sleep.
I mean, i enjoyed this very much! Well done! I expected that guy to come after Dee that way, and i do enjoy the way your brought it all around. Very realistic.
That was a pretty good chapter. I was starting to think it was going to be a rape scene till he discovered his dick wasn't pressing on no pussy. Which would lead to more rage as he realizes he was putting his dick to against Dee's tucked balls till they popped out. I was expecting Sweetie or a surprise intervention with Diamond and Silver videotaping the guy and blackmailing the douchebag, either way saving Buttons from actually getting raped, but you shouldn't feel like one scene with rape should somehow ruin this story. Dee, like the guy said, didn't have to take things so far.
To face humiliation like that to a point you get labeled a loser and no one wants to be around you when all he tried to do was hit on a girl and said something stupid out of jealousy, yeah, that can lead to trouble for Dee. Seems Dee is still thinking like a colt and doesn't know how fragile some people's hearts are. My question is how and why did he come back? Sure, likely one of those "Fuck it, this is stupid. I came here to win a tournament anyways." and get saddled with some pweeb who just got too lost staring at Dee's evil strat of wearing something distracting around horny hormone driven guys.
Dee got lucky. Totally been pampered by Di and Silvy way too much it seems. This is twice it's been escalating to how guys harass Dee. But speaking of Di and Silvy, they going to show up again? It's been quite some time since we've heard what they been up to. Seems odd they'd be nice enough to pay for Dee's pills and bring his (her) backpack with such a nice note, only to have Snips and Snails find out he's not under their protection anymore. Has DT and Sweetie Belle done it together? Or does Di just use Sweetie as her money maker in the porn thing she ran? Nice subplot thought. Anyhow, I forgot if that was mentioned.
Anyhow, great chapter. One minor nitpick:
For Dee and Sweetie Belle, the opening round was a complete cakewalk. She never would have admitted it as a boy, but she greatly enjoyed the game, and being unable to take it a step further because of personal compunction was a painful choice she had to live with.
Might want to use Dee instead seeing how you opened up with BOTH characters on that first line and not leave things for the reader to just decipher when they get to the obvious part. It'll sound and look better.
I'm really happy with the way that things are turning out in this story!! I mean seriously, this doesn't even need the big sexual content it's had to make this story great! NOW WHEN DO WE GET MOAR?!
4681037 To answer your question, I'm taking a [hopefully] short break in order to go back and finish another story that I've been dearly neglecting for the last 'little' while.
Jeez! I came here for some simple futa goodness, and then you spring this whole "Complex story dealing with emotions and real life concerns" shit on me!
Seriously though I understand, though it doesn't mean I have to be happy about it =P
Still as long as you continue the great work in writing this fanfic and write more chapters in a timely fashion it's okay. Also I like your cover art ^_^
I really like this story and want to share it with one of my trans friends but the clop beginning kinda makes me reluctant. Still hoping for some though.
I love this story I'm cheering for button mash/ Dee pad (totally saw how they both relate to gaming) to have a happy ending (perhaps more involved with sweetie bell perhaps?) In this story! My rating 4 of 5 mustaches
I hate you, I really do, why? with how well this story was put together. I usually hate messed up stories like this (if it wasn't so well put together I wouldn't say anything the description gave me fair warning sometimes I feel adventurous) there usually so scatter brained and only exist to make ppl sick to there stomach BUT THIS! this is,.... so,....so,...
TASTEFULL! how did you do it?? the emotion feels so genuine and the situations are so outlandish but this story is written so well they seem very plausible in the eye of the reader. there are only two things I want out of fan fictions, effort, and good taste.
and I rarely see both
so in short great story you son of a bit*h and if you don't continue I will find you. (JK about the hate it exists as and expression of my surprise at how well crafted this story is)
So, I started reading this thinking it would just be some stupid clop fic, but it actually turned out to be more then that, and I'm quite enjoying it. Question though did it have to be futa Sweetie Belle?
Late reader here (In more ways than one: it's 1 AM as I'm writing this -.-) but just... wow, so far. This story really hits home. I find myself seriously sympathizing with Dee and being proud of her at the same time. Haven't gotten to experience it yet myself, but from all the people I know, transition is a long, hard, and painful process. And I know by doing it she (And all the trans people outside the internet that are going through it / will be going through it like I will be) is setting herself up for lots and lots of hell. I commend you, Seven Fates, for providing this excellent read so far, and I know as I read through the rest of the published chapters I will grow to like this story more and more.
*Rendered speechless.*
Looking forward to the next chapter! Love your writing and the story is going so far ^^
Please, do continue. I am most enthralled by this riveting story.
that was terrifying... I empathize with fictional characters too much(in general)
Thanks for update seven. Its good to see an update of one of my favorites. Even if it has things that crush me like what he did to dee. I pray that nothing like that happens to me as I transition. Any ways I love ya friend. Yes seven I publicly said I love you. You a good friend. Same goes for all my friends. Now I sleep.
UPDATE!! YEEEAAAHHHH!!!
I mean, i enjoyed this very much! Well done!
I expected that guy to come after Dee that way, and i do enjoy the way your brought it all around. Very realistic.
...I thought I came to the wrong neighborhood before, now I walked into the neighborhood that's in the middle of a gang war. That was brutal man.
This sentence ends abruptly.
4675268 what he said.
Acceptance! Yay!
Wandering about in this world of illusion,
such are the common folk.
Dream no longer,
and so you will find mutual bliss.
Awaiting further releases.
4676453 Oh look. Fimfiction is truncating lines on import again. Thanks for that.
That was a pretty good chapter. I was starting to think it was going to be a rape scene till he discovered his dick wasn't pressing on no pussy. Which would lead to more rage as he realizes he was putting his dick to against Dee's tucked balls till they popped out. I was expecting Sweetie or a surprise intervention with Diamond and Silver videotaping the guy and blackmailing the douchebag, either way saving Buttons from actually getting raped, but you shouldn't feel like one scene with rape should somehow ruin this story. Dee, like the guy said, didn't have to take things so far.
To face humiliation like that to a point you get labeled a loser and no one wants to be around you when all he tried to do was hit on a girl and said something stupid out of jealousy, yeah, that can lead to trouble for Dee. Seems Dee is still thinking like a colt and doesn't know how fragile some people's hearts are. My question is how and why did he come back? Sure, likely one of those "Fuck it, this is stupid. I came here to win a tournament anyways." and get saddled with some pweeb who just got too lost staring at Dee's evil strat of wearing something distracting around horny hormone driven guys.
Dee got lucky. Totally been pampered by Di and Silvy way too much it seems. This is twice it's been escalating to how guys harass Dee. But speaking of Di and Silvy, they going to show up again? It's been quite some time since we've heard what they been up to. Seems odd they'd be nice enough to pay for Dee's pills and bring his (her) backpack with such a nice note, only to have Snips and Snails find out he's not under their protection anymore. Has DT and Sweetie Belle done it together? Or does Di just use Sweetie as her money maker in the porn thing she ran? Nice subplot thought. Anyhow, I forgot if that was mentioned.
Anyhow, great chapter. One minor nitpick:
Might want to use Dee instead seeing how you opened up with BOTH characters on that first line and not leave things for the reader to just decipher when they get to the obvious part. It'll sound and look better.
Splash one "supreme gentleman".
I'm really happy with the way that things are turning out in this story!! I mean seriously, this doesn't even need the big sexual content it's had to make this story great! NOW WHEN DO WE GET MOAR?!
4681037 To answer your question, I'm taking a [hopefully] short break in order to go back and finish another story that I've been dearly neglecting for the last 'little' while.
Jeez! I came here for some simple futa goodness, and then you spring this whole "Complex story dealing with emotions and real life concerns" shit on me!
This story is awesome. You are awesome.
4682129 My response: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WWaLxFIVX1s
Seriously though I understand, though it doesn't mean I have to be happy about it =P
Still as long as you continue the great work in writing this fanfic and write more chapters in a timely fashion it's okay. Also I like your cover art ^_^
I really like this story and want to share it with one of my trans friends but the clop beginning kinda makes me reluctant.
Still hoping for some though.
Sweeeeeet.
4722931 I think you'll actually find later on that once she committed to the idea herself, the pronouns change.
4697158
Everypony loves a !
Although, to be honest, Twist has only ever had eyes for Applebloom.
4800122 A link to what?
I love this story I'm cheering for button mash/ Dee pad (totally saw how they both relate to gaming) to have a happy ending (perhaps more involved with sweetie bell perhaps?) In this story!
My rating
4 of 5 mustaches
I hate you, I really do, why? with how well this story was put together.
I usually hate messed up stories like this (if it wasn't so well put together I wouldn't say anything the description gave me fair warning sometimes I feel adventurous) there usually so scatter brained and only exist to make ppl sick to there stomach BUT THIS!
this is,....
so,....so,...
TASTEFULL!
how did you do it?? the emotion feels so genuine and the situations are so outlandish but this story is written so well they seem very plausible in the eye of the reader. there are only two things I want out of fan fictions,
effort,
and good taste.
and I rarely see both
so in short great story you son of a bit*h and if you don't continue I will find you.
(JK about the hate it exists as and expression of my surprise at how well crafted this story is)
Amazing story, I really enjoyed it!!
So, I started reading this thinking it would just be some stupid clop fic, but it actually turned out to be more then that, and I'm quite enjoying it. Question though did it have to be futa Sweetie Belle?
5120600 futa pone is best pone
This is possibly one of my favourite stories of all time.
Good job!
Late reader here (In more ways than one: it's 1 AM as I'm writing this -.-) but just... wow, so far. This story really hits home. I find myself seriously sympathizing with Dee and being proud of her at the same time. Haven't gotten to experience it yet myself, but from all the people I know, transition is a long, hard, and painful process. And I know by doing it she (And all the trans people outside the internet that are going through it / will be going through it like I will be) is setting herself up for lots and lots of hell. I commend you, Seven Fates, for providing this excellent read so far, and I know as I read through the rest of the published chapters I will grow to like this story more and more.
Nice gender swap story...
But I still can't decide if I like it or not.
(As in to give a thumbs up, I mean the gender swap is well done but the sex..)