Thought to be dead for over a year, Equestria is stunned when Rainbow Dash returns, having been made the slave of a sadistic griffon for the past year. Her friends are understandably overjoyed, but can they handle the nearly broken pegasus?
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I see dead people...
5069127 Doctor Stable is an actually character in the show if I recall correctly. The episode where RD is in the hospital.
What the hell was his horn made out of?Glass?There's no way a pony mouth(especially an Equestrian pony) can generate the required Newtons in its bite to sever such a sizable appendage as a horn without muzzle damage.Unless the horn is hollow or something.And why did you describe a herbivore's teeth as sharp?Is she sharpening them or something?
5069415
It was mentioned earlier that Pegasi have sharpened teeth so they can properly eat fish.
Are Stable, AJ, and Redheart OK?! Why are these jerks doing this, why are they after the foal (and are they all working together)? What happened to the foal and Dust?! Sorry I didn't comment earlier, I was away from my computer, but I saw Rainbow Rocks!
5069415 I'm actually horns ARE hollow, and are... not FRAGILE, but not super-hard either. And she snapped it more by the momentum of her body and the twisting movement she did. And yes, in this canon I have pegasi (and some unicorns) who eat fish in order to supplement their diet with added proteins.
Way ta go, Lightning! I know Rainbow will be grateful (We need a Lightning Dust emoticon, stat!). Hey, now that you updated this, will you be updating "Beats of Life'?
Woohoo its back! Also I have once again come to the conclusion that Lightning Dust needs to be a part of Rainbows herd!
Glad to see this has updated! Cant wait for more of this and BoL!
-Muzzle_luvr
SO MUCH HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG!
Well, that one act of Lighting Dust's has fully redeemed her in my eyes. Even better, my ipod started the vocals of Survivor's "Eye of the Tiger" at her part and finished just at the end of the chapter, perfect timing and super appropriate for her actions. If she doesn't join Rainbow's herd then she should be honorary auntie to the chick with Scootaloo. I do have to wonder if the unicorn would have preferred getting bucked in the nuts by AJ, magic bitch smacked by Twilight or one of the other princesses, or magically castrated like Lighting Dust did by ripping off his horn. Oh, and have Luna rip the guy's mind to shreds to find out who he is working with so they can come down on them with Divine Wrath.
As for Fleetfoot vs the Griffon sperm donor and Spitfire vs the Minotaur...
Evidently that stupid Minotaur ambassador didn't deliver the message that his kind were effectively banned/barred/forbidden from stepping hoof in Equestria by Princess Celestia on pain of death (hopefully, a slow and very painful death). And the same goes for those low-life, dirtbag griffons.
These two idiots are both staring at an effective death sentence, I'm thinking, and yet they were both stupid enough to step in a country whose citizens (and especially the Pegasi (and even more especially Spitfire and Fleetfoot)) will kill them on sight. Yeah, real smart, geniuses.
I cannot wait to see what happens when the Princesses get physically involved with the little "duel" outside.
Oh, yeah, they're both dead.
And the same goes for the stupid stallion that Dust just dehorned. Go, Dust!
Dang dog, you gonna leave us with that ending? I want more, let them creative writing juices flow and pump that next chapter out!
5071276 I agree. We need to know more.
Also, god that griffon was a dick. Yeah, the foal may be of griffon blood, but it is also of pony blood and as the mother, dash has every right to keep her foal and, since he isn't the father, he has no claim.
I have to ask, where exactly do you want to go with this story? Not to mention, what kind of story is it you want to write?
Because, as I see it, this story is about Rainbow getting back into society after having been a sex slave for over a year, and tortured in the same period of time as well. What this chapter suggests, however, is that you want a story about a Pony vs Minotaur/Gryphon War, with Rainbow and her foal being the centre of it all. Quite frankly, those two do not mix.
What you seem to be doing right now is falling into a trap that a lot of new authors/writers have fallen prey to: Changing an entire story on a whim based on what you think would be cool, as opposed to writing what would fit in the story.
So, that being said, I urge you to stick to the story you laid out for us in the beginning, and not turn this into a war-fic.
5073653
Thank you so much for the concern, but don't worry. If I do a war-fic, it will be a separate story, not Rekindling.
This story is going to be about Rainbow and her herd. There will be action, and allude to a conflict, but it won't be covered in story form in Rekindling.
5074086
I'm glad. Still, don't make this whole fight too long, firstly because it would otherwise overshadow the birth of Rainbow's foal, and secondly because Celestia and Luna would beat the everliving snot out of the minotaur and gryphon, not to mention Twilight.
Also, I don't know if you read my comment in an earlier chapter about how Rainbow willingly having sex with Fleetfoot and Spitfire was unnatural and wouldn't happen realistically. At any rate, I just thought I'd bring it to your attention again, as I suggest you simply delete that part. Someone who has been raped will not, under any circumstances, just let others have sex with them again, regardless of who they are. Rainbow is far too scarred to allow them that close to her, even if she's likely to do the whole herd thing, using it as a sort of anchor; something to cling to, and support her.
5074136
I may add a little bit more to that particular chapter so that it implies more... cuddling, than full on sex. When Rainbow does have sex, it likely will be one of the very few clop chapters, and I hope to make it more... emotional. It has to be emotional.
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No. Trust me, just no.
If there are to be sex/clop chapters, save them for when ½-1 year has passed, and even the e careful about it. Rape isn't something you just get past like that. Her cuddling with them, holding them and being held in turn, however, is something I find much more plausible, seeing as it only lends to the idea of them being something she leans on so as to not fall into despair and whatnot.
I'm sorry if I seem forceful, but when what happens in a story is so blatantly unrealistic, it turns off a lot of readers. I'm doing it both to help you, as well as make the story better.
5074515
Oh, I completely understand, and thank you!
5074557
No problem... and sorry if I came off as harsh or rude, I sometimes do that when I really want to get a message throuh
5074617 Oh no, it's totally fine. Sometimes I can miss subtle things. I need a kick in the butt every now and again.
Awesome story!
i do have some art in store for you but
my deviantart account wouldn't open!
5083190 WELL TELL IT TO OPEN!!!
Okay, kid napping, torturing, raping and/or impregnating Rainbow Dash for over a year is one thing, but holding a minutes-old, defenseless foal at gunpoint?
Words can’t describe how much I want to strangle the whole griffon race to death right now.
5072873
Too true.
8660165
Well it was a pony that held the foal at gunpoint. My theory is. A. He knows why the foal is important to the griffins and doesn't want them to get it or B. He is racist against the Griffins and hates half Griffins.
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