A Little Comfort
One Cold Night
A SpikeBelle fanfiction.
By: DiamondBurritos
The sky was covered with dark storm clouds as the rain poured heavily onto Spike's body, the cold water joining his tears that were flowing down his face. His feet was covered in mud, but he didn't care. He had many other things on his mind. He had just been rejected by Rarity, again.. he expected that to happen, but after hearing her explanations about them being two different species, not to mention age difference. Spike had it, and here he was, sitting all alone in the rain.
And. that's when he heard hoof-steps from behind, a filly's voice calling out: "Spike?"
Spike turned around to see Sweetie Belle, wrapped in her green raincoat.
"What're you doing in the rain?" She asked the crying dragon.
His tears continued to flow down his face as he wiped them away, trying to look like nothing is wrong, but, she noticed anyway.
"Hey, are you okay?"
He got up, and walked away from her, and spoke. "I-I'm fine, Sweetie Belle.."
But, those words didn't come to her as 'fine', except it was 'not fine'.
"...Spike? What's wrong?"
It took Spike a few moments to speak, and after walking a few feet away from the concerned filly, he sat back down on the cold, damp grass, and tears formed again.
"...Sweetie Belle? Why does Rarity seek other stallions? ...And get 'bedazzled' so easily? ...Yet, she never sees my love for her.."
Sweetie Belle walked slowly to the depressed dragon and replied to him in a soft yet annoyed voice. "To be fair to you Spike, I don't think my sister is ever going to find a stallion 'bedazzling' enough for her,"
Then, she got an idea. Using her magic, Sweetie levitated her scissors from one of her coat pockets and put the blade near the rubbery cloth as Spike continued to cry. His cries suddenly stopped as he felt a wet yet warm piece of her coat fall on top of him.
Spike was confused, why was she helping him? Was it because she felt bad for his forbidden love for Rarity? Or was it something else?
"Sweetie Belle," He said, sniffling and rubbing his tears off his face. "What're you doing?"
He watched the now drenched foal go under the large piece of cloth and sat next to him, concern in her eyes.
"I-I didn't want you to catch a cold..." She said.
The two suddenly blush in unison as Spike's tears soon stopped and looked at the unicorn filly next to him, her cheeks flushed a bright pink.
"Thanks Sweetie..."
The tears soon appeared once again, blurring Spike's vision as he looked away from Sweetie Belle, both of them still blushing.
He heard the filly sigh and she turned her head to his, her blush expanding on her face as she heard him say a question he would never hear from her.. ever..
"S-Spike? Would you feel better if I.... kissed you?"
He gasped loudly as his own blush flushed all over his face, surprised by the sudden question she had asked. Ever since he moved to Ponyville, and after meeting Rarity for the first time, he had always wanted her to kiss him, and after giving her that fire ruby, he thought he would actually get the mare of his dreams.
But now, it turned out that the true answer was right in front of him the whole time... Sweetie Belle.
"You would do that... for me?" He asked the filly, smiling with hope in his eyes.
He waited for a response, instead, he felt her hooves touch his cheek, her eyes filled with happiness and love. She leaned in slowly and whispered to him softly.
"Oh, come on, Spikey Wikey." Sweetie said as she leaned into him and pressed her soft lips against his.
It took Spike a while to get used to it. He received kisses before, from Rarity, but only on the cheek, on the day of his ugly growth spurt. But, he never had an actual kiss on the lips, and he had always dreamed of having it with Rarity, but he was wrong. He was experiencing it with a filly who truly loved him.
He suddenly felt himself off the ground as he felt Sweetie Belle lift him off the ground with her hooves and put more love into the kiss, and her eyes were closed, while Spike's eye began to close slowly. He never wanted this moment to end. Ever.
Then, just like the moment she came to comfort him, their lips parted, but they were still intertwined in each other's arms, and Spike slowly brushed Sweetie'e mane softly, his claws getting tangled in her pink and purple curly mane. He could hear the rain dripping down the green raincoat as they kissed again, but a much quicker one.
"Spike," The blushing unicorn foal said as she put Spike back onto the ground, her arms still around him.
"Yeah, Sweetie Belle?" The young dragon replied, his blush fading slowly, and put one of his hands on her soft, warm cheek. He felt Sweetie's left hoof touch it her eyes sparkling with love.
"If you ever need... a little love, I-I'm here for you.." She said softly as she pecked Spike's cheek repeatedly, with Spike blushing madly.
"T-T-Thank you, Sweetie Belle, I apprechiate that. A lot." Spike said, smiling as he kissed Sweetie's cheek back in response.
He couldn't believe it, out of all of his friends, Sweetie Belle came to see him, but in one of the worst ways, but he was so glad that she came. He needed the love, he needed the comfort.
And, he finally found it.
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You've really gave live to that comic with the fic, very good!
Like and fav.
I always wondered if anyone would do a story version of this comic.
Is there a sequel?
And my friend IMShadow007 made a comic dub of that comic... Here...
cam? to to?
SO CUTE!!! I
IT!!! 
UUUNGH, mah feeeels
!
Through the darkest of clouds a single spark of hope can shine brighter then the sun and be a guide through the darkest of forests...... After reading this fic I thought of that sentence..... Thank you for making this fic
Darn. I want to enjoy it, but this goes against my main ship. But hey, just slap Button instead of Spike on there, and u got one heckofa cute fic.
Gotta go fast! Gotta go fast!!! FAST!!!
This story was going faster than Sonic on crack ^^
Great stort though, I just feel like you could've included more of a build up, and crud. Have a like and favorite anyway :3
I wanna rate you 10/10 but its missing lack of originalness, since its someone elses fanfic. Anyway, nice story 9.49/10
....I love it!
cute very cute
originality: 7/10
grammar: 8/10
spelling:7/10
characteristics:9/10
score: 31/40
prize:
panther tank
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4301220 the music really sets the tone... and those voices
*gak*... feels...overload...*cough* why am i such a sucker for romance?
the *choke* feels.... THERE TOO MUCH *Thunk*
Discord: oh, great... now i have to revive him... wheres the EMP? this is going to be a long day...
4660018 I know, I'm just a real sucker for romance.
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I can't help but agree. This fic went by super fast. They were blushing at each other before I could even blink!
Still, this fic has its heart in the right place, and 'tis certainly cute! So despite its speed, I'd say it was worth the read. Good job.
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I hate Button Mash.
4864387 :l Well, that's your opinion, not mine. Good day.
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Sorry for upsetting you, I just don't like him being paired with Sweetie Belle.
4865456 it's you choice, not mine. Goody day, and due to events, this is the last time I'll be able to respond for about... 4 weeks.
not bad , not perfect but not bad. you definitely have some have some potential
Honestly, this story dosen't really have anything special going for it. Now that dosen't mean I think it's bad ; it's a short scene, based on a comic, that's there for the gooey feels; and it is kinda sweet! But, the problem is their's nothing seperating it from all the other SpikeBelle stoires out there.
Not to mention, it has a few problems in general. It's very quick for a start; WAY too quick in fact. Now again, I know it's based on a comic - and that in itself was very brief and too point - but I think that might have been the problem. The comic should have been your STARTING point; not the whole point. I think if you maybe had a chapter - or heck even a paragraph or two - dedicated to the moments before or after this scene, it would have given it a bit more character and really improved it! Then comes the problem that it's a little poorly structured. Too many times you have a sentence, a gap, a sentence etc. This is quite distracting I think and can make it difficult to get engaged; it just dosen't flow well. I appreciate that alot of times, it's because theirs back and forth dialogue; but I think if you took a minute and looked at different ways to convey this, it would have been IMMENSLY improved.
I'm not sure how long ago you wrote this - and I'm sure you've improved in that time - I just thought I'd express what I got from this story. I acknowledge you were tied to the comic, and I'm suire you wanted to make a great story whilst staying respectful to the source, but I think if you crafted it into something unique to you, it would have been better received. Still, I do appreciate the effort so have an upvote anyway. Hope your writings going well.
Finally someone puts a spikebelle fic on sweetie library, come on there are so many adorable spikebelle fics in the spikebelle grope, you would think more would be featured on this group to. Might I suggest first date http://www.fimfiction.net/story/158807/first-date and the amethyst and the emerald http://www.fimfiction.net/story/240073/the-amethyst-and-the-emerald those are really cute ones.
this needs a sequel
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That’s what WE said. 😉😉😉