End
Chapter 21: end.
I trot back to my small room and quietly walk up the creaking steps of the bakery.
It's night and the stars shine brightly in the black, thick, velvety sky. Who knew that it would take all day to tell my story. Just look at how far we have come, I just wish that Dashie was here, to see the fact that we won.
I plop down on my bed and lay with my stomach to the ceiling, feeling rather nostalgic.
It had been quiet a while since I've reminisce, it was odd to taste the flavors of my life all over again, some parts tasted bitter, but the times with the Pegasus, those were the sweetest.
I start to think about everything, not just the time in the hospital, but the time with my friends, the time we defeated all those monsters like discord, the changelings, and nightmare moon; and we did that all with friendship.
Having close relationships with other ponies was not only important to defeat the monsters on the outside, it was also good to battle the nightmares inside you.
Without Dash, I'd probably be a whole different mare. I think back to the exact moment my entire life changed, it was all because of the rage I killed my father with, that one action changed my life for the better.
Of course, I'm not saying to act on your rage and kill ponies you hate, I'm saying that even mistakes, can change your life for the better, and, that sometimes the moments that you are the most alone and the most sad, are the ones that are the most important.
And here I was, my dream had come true, I was in ponyville and I had friends, I should be happy, I SHOULD appreciate what I have, but part of me continued to dwell on the past that continued to crawl out of my throat, like a bug that won't go down.
I think the thing that bothers me the most is the fact that we didn't get a long enough goodbye, it was like she just left out of my world and I miss her so much, I dream of her a lot and I just hope that she is happy, because I knew she loved me a lot, I knew her love for me was undying and I knew it was still here, I just didn't know where.
It's hard trying to protect Rainbow. Just trying to be around her, it hurts sometimes. When she flies away, I hop as fast as I can, trailng behind her. She finds it a bit annoying, I can tell. A lot of times, I wish I could tell her, that it was my duty to go after her, but I can't.
Suddenly, I feel cold slick scales prod on my stomach.
I look down and see Gummy, he sits nonchalantly on my puffy belly and I giggle as his eyes blink at an uneven rate.
His presence reminds me of something, I jump up and almost fling him off me, but he seems okay.
I dart to the closet and begin to search frantically for something and then, my eyes rest upon a big brown box.
I grasp it and stumble out of my closet with and unstable stance and I collapse down and fall to the floor.
I scramble for the box and open it up.
Dust and dirt flys everywhere and billows into the cool air, I look into the box and look for the little scrapbook inside of it.
I pull it out, letting the words 'pinkie promise' shimmer in the dark room like a lost treasure.
I spend all night flipping through the pages of our faded fun. I giggle and cry for each page and the dawn breaks through.
The light shines over the peaceful cottages of Ponyville and spreads it's golden rays of hope across the peaceful land.
And finally, I reach the second to last page and start to close the book.
I couldn't bring myself to look at the last page, that was where we promised to get a picture of us in Ponyville, and we never got it. My heart throbbed, tears poured out my eyes.
Gummy walks by me and looks at the book, he sticks his nuzzle into the book and flips to the last page.
I see writing.
Scribbles of black ink that are inscribed on the page. My heart skips a beat and my eyes skim over it.
I begin to read it:
'Dear, Pinkie Pie.
I'm starting to forget things and I haven't seen you since that day on the roof top. I'm afraid I won't get to say goodbye, and I dream constantly that you will come waltzing through that door with some cupcakes and a smile. I know..... I know what Doctor Helfing is doing to me. I know he wants me to forget. I want to write this all before I forget it all.
But that's okay, because I wanted to tell you, how much you mean to me. Even if I forget about you, you will always be in my heart, even if I don't say I love you everyday, I do, even if I don't tell you how beautiful, I still think you are and I always will. You will always be in my heart, you're plastered on there, your not going anywhere!
I also, wanted to tell you, that, I don't care what happens, I don't care if I can't fly forever, I don't care where we end up, as long as we end up together, because, your my dream, you are my only wish.
Love, your Dashie.'
Tears cascade from my eyes. My heart stops beating and a feeling of peace and joy washes over me, it freezes me and I'm paralyzed for a moment.
I lightly place my hoof over the writing.
"You were always my dream." I choke between sobs. Gummy walks over, and I pet him, he's my only comfort.
A knock on the door halts me from my overwhelmed state and I notice that it is late in the afternoon.
"Hey, Pinks? You in there?" I here a raspy voice call out to me.
It's Rainbow Dash.
I get up of the floor and walk to the door, I heave it open, and the pegasus's magenta eyes stare at me.
I see the spark.
"Pinkie- are you okay? You've been crying!" She shouts. She sits next to me, and helps me on my bed.
"I- it's okay, it's all okay now."
I see Dash breathe in like she was about to argue, but then I see her eyes trail down to the scrap book resting on the floor, the page where she wrote her note.
I think I see something. I think I see her remember, or at least I hope I do.
"W-what's that?" She says calmly and she continues to stare at it.
I smile sadly and look down,"It doesn't matter anymore."
Silence fills the gap in between us and she shakes her head and wipes away her dazed state.
"Anyways I came over here to ask if you wanted to uh- hang out?" She blushes slightly and the magenta contrasts her cyan coat.
I grin excitedly,"Of course Dashie!"
I walk beside her and wipe away the last of my tears. I feel her warm wing rap around me lovingly and we both blush as we trot outside, only to be greeted but the sunny Ponyville day.
A sweet smile crosses my lips, a smile I had missed, a genuine smile, the most ligament smile I've ever smiled, all because,
I wasn't alone anymore.
I was finally happy.
THE END
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To be honest... this story still needs an epilogue... And it should at least twice as long as this last chapter. The story cannot be settled inour hearts until it's not complete.
The future based on a lie... is futile.
4333362
i ended it the way i did because i want the reader to make up a happy ending, i left things untied because if they want Rainbow to remember they can, if they don't, they can. you see, i wanted it to be the kind of cliffhanger, where life goes on and the reader can decide what happens next.
4333538 That's one of the things I was afraid of, to be honest. You see, whatever the reader makes up... It's a different story. They can as well just go ahead and write what they've made up. It would be their story, not yours.
Your story is still incomplete. It doesn't feel right to end it the way you did. It doesn't feel... finished. It feels forsaken instead. You leave the reader with the feeling of a forsaken story. The story which will never have the ending. The epilogue. That is exactly the part which is missing....
Especially after the final part being TOO short.
4333617
but the story never dose end, thats the point, the show will go on, it wont end, that was the whole message, that life will carry on and the ending will never be complete
4334390 You misunderstand me. Or does the only way to write a complete story for you means describing the events to the VERY DEATH of the main characters? Obviously, it's not like that.
The life may be continuing as much as it wants, but the story as nice as yours is simply not allowed to leave that many questions without answer.
4334418
what do you want the ending to be? what did you have in mind?
4334556 I loved it this truly my number 1 story I've read
Nothing I repeat NOTHING can replace this
4334556 One of the sweetest parts of the story would be Rainbow discovering the truth. And that fact alone is great enough to be an epilogue. Epilogue, however, should be longer, at least twice as big as the last chapter. (since the last chapter happened to be so short)
It would be nice to focus on Rainbow's feelings as she happens to look through that book page by page, making Pinkie tell her the truth. It would be nice to see her reaction when she finally understands why Pinkie has always been there for her and have been following her everywhere. It would be nice to see that even her memory was erased, the feelings in her heart indeed remained. And those feelings help her take in all the information Pinkie gives her, along with all shocking facts. Maybe those feelings could be strong enough for Rainbow to start remembering stuff on her own as Pinkie continues with her story.
And, to be honest, it could be either epiloue, or you could just rewrite this last chapter, replacing the moment where Rainbow offers to "hang out" with the moment where Rainbow gets really curious about that discarded book on the floor.
Also, I guess you've simply forgotten about that, but this site still marks your story as "Incomplete". Ironic... don't you think? Or maybe it's a sign from above that your work on that story isn't over yet ^^
4336377
you see, i don't want Rainbow to remember. i ended it the way i did because it shows how Pinkie moved on, how she said "it doesn't matter anymore" signifies that she grew up and learned a lot from the experience, but that she has moved on and can continue her life. It also shows that there is not always a happy ending. If i ended it by rainbow dash "remembering" then i feel like it would take away from the significance of pinkies struggle, and that, this is all from pinkies point of view,
also, this story was based on a true story, in this instance, i am pinkie and one of my friends is represented as rainbow dash, and we didn't necessarily have a happy ending. this story was mostly therapeutic to help me get over her and move on with my life, much like Pinkie did in the story
But if you wish to write an alternate ending, your welcome to if you want
4335382
Thank you so much!! that means a lot!! i feel honored that you like it so much! keep being awesome!!
4337341 There's just one problem: I don't see the REASON why Pinkie has to suffer when Rainbow Dash is her friend and is right in front of her eyes. All she has to do is to reveal the truth.
4337527
i see your point, but what if someone told you your entire childhood was a lie and told you the truth of the awful things your father did to you and the horrible things you endured, it would break dashies already mentally ill mind, and destroy her, minds don't cope well with reality.
4337849 A future based on a lie is futile. Sooner or later it would get back to Rainbow and smash her straight in the face in a way much worse than getting to know the truth from Pinkie.
Moreover, it's not like the truth about her past would take away her currect friends from her or something.
4337860
i guess your right. nut the whole premise of this fanfic was moving on and loving the past, but looking forward to the future. if rainbow remembered, not only would it hurt her, but it would being and odd realism to the whole thing, and make it more of a "slice of life" i wanted this to be more eerie in a kind of way. besides, the way Dash blushed while asking her to "hang out" and the way she wrapped her wing around Pinkie should imply that they would go out in the future. Giving pinkie a new start, because i honestly believe that pinkie wanted to forget herself, and start again, give herself a new beginning and not dwell on the past, and she wanted to give Dashie a new start.
she wouldn't ever want to hurt Rainbow by giving her the crappy life she had originally, she would rather suffer herself than let rainbow suffer to. it shows her immense love and compassion.
4337894 Only remembering your past you can trully start a new life. If you choose to forget it like this instead, you might just as well go and kill yourself, because it wouldn't really be you after such a... purification.
In order to start the new life, you need to remember what made you desire to end your previous one. So you would not let something like that happen again in your new life.
And, would it really be right to leave that pathetic doctor with at least A BIT of triumph? He wanted Rainbow to forget her life, and so... he succeed? That would not be right. He should not prevail at ANYTHING in his pathetic life, even if it's already ended the way he deserved it.
And you don't seem to understand why it's so important to tell Rainbow about her past. You see, if she somehow manages to remember things on her own or find out the truth, it would hurt her an eternity more, because it would mean that Pinkie lied to her all that time. And that fact along can cause her enough pain to commit suicide, don't you think?
4337929
but she wont, you see, she wont find out, because this fits in with the cannon show, you already know that pinkie is happy and that rainbow wont remember.
the doctor did not "triumph" because pinkie is happy, which is the very emotion he wished to destroy.
The ending is simply that life will carry on< pinkie is happy and at peace, and rainbow has the life she always wanted thanks to her guardian. if eel that if rainbow remembered, it would ruin the fan fic, it would ruin the main tragedy and the mane problem.
4337999 To be honest, the thing that ruins the fanfic for me is exactly the fact Rainbow doesn't remember her past. The tragedy cannot be ruined because it has already happened. The tragedy of Pinkie's past. The tragedy of Rainbow's past. Those are the tragedies that cannot be removed. They are already there and that's where they shall remain.
As for fitting the canon, the situation where Pinkie tells Rainbow the truth can take place in the future, ahead of the point where the show is now.
But anyway, it seems that I'll have to write the epilogue part to this story myself. I'll simply not be able to sleep well until that last pain that is still going on in your story is extinguished. I feel bad that you've declined the words of you apparently №1 commentator.
4338172
i am sorry. go ahead and write your epolouge, but id rather leave mine unchanged.
sorry
4338228 That makes me truly sad...
4338228 Here is a question for you. When I finish the epilogue, would you read it? And would you consider adding a link to it in your story? Just for those who are as not satisfied with the ending as I am.
4338309
course
4338324 Well, that's really heart warming to hear. Thank you, sweet one.
4338327
no problem!
4337356 no prob and honestly more people should read this u they'd love this
All I'm saying is...KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!!!
4333538 plz read my new story and first story called the soul inside a flame it was inspired by you
4337356 and u should feel honored its that good
4351516 aww why thank you x3
Da-a-a-am, man, make a freakin sequel!
I want Rainbow to REMBER.
Do it.
Now.
Start.
I said start.
START!
Stop reading this motherbucking comment and start!
STAAAAARRRRRT!
Srsly? Still here?
Start.
Now.
Dangit, can't be bothered. Make a sequel, okay?
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Oh, I forgot you can't talk to writing or text!
4358889
lol thanks!
but i regret to inform you that there will be no squeal, and rainbow wont remember. Sorry!
4358889
if you want a epilogue, my friend wrote one, it is amazing in every way and i highly recommend it
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/190532/pinkie-promise-epilogue
Brilliant story. I want to express my reaction to finishing this but I can only explain that it left me speachless. The best I can do is extend a thank you for writing something that made me feel. I know im asking for too much but I could see a great sequel to be written for this. Please?
Oh my God. I'm following you now. I can't help it. The whole reason I stumbled across this was because I made a story with the same title about Rainbow and Pinks. But you obviously did it better! Buck yeah!
Excuse my language...