This story is a sequel to The "DASH"ing story
Lightning bolt is a unicorn, bachelor, and university student. Everything seems to be going his way but one day after meeting a mare in class with an interest in his past, they go on a investigation, one that might just bring them closer together, but will change their lives forever .
This was a rather simple story made at the advice of a certain Lord Ershwin Wholewheat. He said he was impressed with my work on my other story and wanted to see how well I could handle making this sequel to The "DASH"ing story. Unfortunately, that story gave me very little to work with, so I had to entirely re-imagine everything. I would have loved to have gotten this out earlier, but I've been so busy that this had to take a bit of a back seat.
I suppose I'm just glad there isn't a legitimate sequel to it already. That would be pretty awkward.
Beautifull.
4250134 Thank you.
I'm glad I did well with it. It wasn't the easiest thing to do. 
This was amazing.
Couple of typos here and there, but this was just a lovely read. Loved the argument Lightning had with Dash, and his line at the end referring back to the books message. You can tell he has a lot of regrets and heartache from his past.
I look forward to reading more.
4250217 Oh, I'll get to fixing those as soon as possible. I guess I missed a few things even with all that time, huh? Doesn't really shine too well on me, does it?
Also, thanks. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I'm not sure how long the rest will take, but my schedule is clearing up pretty well for the next few days, so we'll see. 
To be honest, the prequel was sickeningly descriptive to be so plotless. This is the most amazing improvement. The only thing I wish is that you had written about ALL of it before releasing it.
Cheers You Sly Bastard,
Kailasan
The fact you made this from THAT story is amazing.
Putting it on the read later list.
4250474 Well, I'm not entirely sure what you mean by writing all about it before this, but I'm glad to see I've done well with this.
4250500 Oh, I think we're all being just a little over-critical of xblade. I'm sure he tried. It was his first story, after all. I'm sure he's improved since then.
YOU! TOOK MY STORY! WITH OUT PERMISSION! WHAT WENT THREW YOUR HEAD! THEY ARE MY CHARACTERS AND MY STORY! I've already made a sequel TO MY STORY! "DASH"ing story is my story.
4250670 Actually this story was planned out about 4 days ago.
4250670 Whoa, now. I don't have nay idea what you're talking about. Ershwin Wholewheat approached me with the idea to make a sequel to your other story a few days ago. I had no idea you'd already made a sequel. I just checked two days ago to be sure before getting the finishing touches on this.
4250698 ................................point? where is you seem to be missing one. Problems :
1. plagiarism
2.I gave him no ok to do this.
3.I clearly said I was making a sequel longer than this has been around.
4.How did you get this story passed. It's a sequel to a story you don't even own.
4250725 Hey, look, I'm sorry. I wasn't aware you intended to make a sequel. I just submitted this today. I would really like to keep it though. I've poured so much of my time into making this already.
4250725
I don't see any problem here. This story doesn't look anything like yours.
they even came out at the same time, it's kind of hard to rip off a story that came out like an hour ago.
4250735 Absolutely not.
4250744 Would you mind at least linking me to the story I supposedly stole?
4250739 ....................IT IS MY STORY! NOT YOURS. MINE!What's worse you stole my title for my sequel.
4250747 fine.
4250748 The titles are completely different unless you're implying the heart is the same thing as the brain
And I'm pretty sure this story is Itake's, I was in the Gdoc as he wrote it after all.
4250751 http://www.fimfiction.net/story/169831/crystals-in-the-heart THIS IS MY STORY!
4250758 yes it is. and this one right here is Itake's.
4250751 Doesn't Matter YOU DON't Own Lightning bolt OC. HE's mine. THAT IS COPYWRIGHT! Game. set. match.
4250762 And this is my little pony, copyright of Hasbro, no one owns any of these fanfictions
4250758 Um, no offense intended, but, that story is very much unlike my intentions. The titles are similar, I'll grant, but not the same. To be honest, I'm almost tempted to say yours looks fairly rushed...
4250771 ...You guys miss the point. It's my story. my sequel. DONE. You can't make a sequel of
1.Something that is not yours.
2.that doesn't represent it in the best way possible.
Understand. Delete the story.
4250748
This story is 'Crystals of the Mind'
Yours is 'Crystals in the heart'
It's actually quite interesting how similar the two stories ended up being in title, though in terms of content of both story and even description, this one is far more intriguing and worth the time of the average reader. If anything, you should be flattered somebody took the time to read your story and construct something of this quality from it.
4250791 I Will NOT accept this story as a sequel. Because I worked really hard on mine. I spent alot of my time on something they stole and think that its ok to pass it off for their own.
4250785 B-but...
I see people writing sequels to other people's stories all the time on here. Also, I'm sorry I didn't represent it well. 
I tried my best to make this well, I swear. I'm sorry.
4250801
There's an easy way to fix this
4250804
Add a Alternate Universe tag.
4250801
That's the way the cookie crumbles, kid.
4250804 They asked permission first. Then they wrote it. You never thought to ask me.Did you? I mean really? Here is all you had to do.Pm: hey xblade can I write a sequel for DASHing story. Then, IF!!! i said yes then I could! have given you idea to help resent him better. This is sad.Delete it Please.
Wait, I thought this was the official sequel of that other fic. I got my hopes up for nothing...
4250820 FINE! I TRIED TO BE REASONABLE! I'll report it. I tried. Now it's the admins decision on what happens to you.
4250801 They didn't steal it.
Stealing a sequel would mean he copy pasted your story and published it as his. Which he didn't. Itake appears to have put more work behinds this version than you did with yours. His is of much higher quality and is actually longer than yours.
You should be grateful he made such a beautiful story out of your prequel.
4250835 Well, unless 4250830 will let me try 4250820 's suggestion, I guess I'll have to take this down. I'm really sorry. I really tried to write this well.
4250835 The author in the original put the link to his official sequel in the comments below.
4250830
You have no ground for demanding anything. The story is BASED on your stuff, but as the disclaimer states in the summary:
No different than how most of pony fanfiction is reimaginings of the show's characters and canon. I don't recall ANY of us asking Faust or Hasbro or Studio B or anybody if we could do these kinds of things. But here we are anyway.
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4250846 No one ever asks the creator of the original Cupcakes to do a sequel.
4250856 Well that's the thing. I was impressed with this sequel...I'm less inclined with giving DASHing a chance of a better continuation, now...
4250847 Smh....He made a sequel to a story that's no his. It's mine. I typed it and my editor edited it and same thing for the sequel.No this not the sequel I wanted. It represents me. And this hurt. ALOT!
4250801
4250804
I see no plagiarism here. We have no rules against "unofficial" sequels, so Itake is allowed to do this. You may not like it, xblade, but it's not against the rules in any way.
4250862 I didn't think he would make one. If I even thought he would've, I wouldn't have even tried writing this. It wasn't easy finding time to write this that well, and even then it's not up to standards, apparently.
4250830 Dude, your story sucked ass, this guy made it amazing.
Check your ego off at the bank and take some damn pointers.
Because you NEED them.
4250850
Dude, don't take it down, you haven't broken any rules. And you have written it well, it's significantly better than the original story AND the 'official sequel'.
If nothing else, change the names so they're new OC's, since that's the ONLY real connection he can complain about in that you write his OC's better than he does.
4250883 Nah man, this story is awesome you keep doing what you're doing and don't let a noob tell you what you can't and can to
4250858 It's a sequel of "DASH"ing story which is MIne and Oh look it also stars the OC from MY story. hmhm I've got grounds.
4250893 According to the mods, you don't.
I actually don't see any submission rules being violated. The closest is the "don't plagiarize," but taking a set list of items (in this case OCs) and creating your own world from that isn't plagiarism. At worst, it is a fanfic of a fanfic.
The "don't be a dick" rule (seriously check the site rules) is being massively beaten in the comments here though.
Honestly XBlade, take it as a mark of honor that someone created a fanfic of your fanfic and bow out gracefully. All you are doing with your lashing out is making people side against you.
Take a breather and come back in a more rational state of mind with a logical argument on why you would like Itake to pull the story and you *might* get better results. Personally, after all this I'd keep it up until someone apologized publicly. But that is just me.
By definition, nothing was plagiarized because it was properly credited.
pla·gia·rism
ˈplājəˌrizəm/Submit
noun
noun: plagiarism; plural noun: plagiarisms
1.
the practice of taking someone else's work or ideas and passing them off as one's own.
synonyms: copying, infringement of copyright, piracy, theft, stealing
4250870 I don't care it's mine and I say no. Delete it.Please. It would make me feel better.No offense to you this could have been good given that (A) A sequel had already been written. (B) my ides were in it. Delete it.
4250905 No.