"That's a good gir,

I knew that wehn i saw

just some problems with a few words

Bolero told her as he used his magic to force

This sentences made no sences.

"(This is so wrong, but why am I doing it!? Why am I giving into him?)"
"(Yes, she's seeing it as well, that we were made for eachother, but she requires more training!)"

you kept using () marks ever where/
Still very fun story to read I give it a thumbs up.

You need an editor. Who won't tell you that you need to rewrite the whole thing

4365822 agreed

Where is Dusk Shine?????

Breath in BOI