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HolyCross9


An autistic Christian who likes MLP:FiM.

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It has been several months since the Trixie and her friends in Ponyville had defeated the manipulative exploits of her cruel, older sister, Checker Monarch (aka Getting Back On Your Hooves). Since that time, Trixie had also reestablished friendly ties with a stallion she'd known since foalhood, Stage Hoof (formerly Helping Hoof), who is now a current resident of Ponyville. But now, Trixie has found herself developing powerful feelings of love for Stage Hoof. When she then realizes this, she decides to meet with the stallion at night on a hill top to find out if he feels the same for her.

Getting Back on Your Hooves and Stage are owned and created by Godzillawolf

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Comments ( 8 )

Excellent feel good romance story HolyCross. We really enjoyed your portrayal of Trixie, in our opinion it was spot on.:pinkiehappy:
Also loved the interaction between Rarity and the love struck wizard. Thumbs up all the way.

Thank you. But, just to let you know, this version of Trixie is actually from Godzillawolf's fanfictions. I just did my best to interpret it correctly.

Not bad. Though, I thought that Trixie had her own place by now. Also, is this before or after Perfect Companions?

4230656 This is after Perfect Companions and before Godzillawolf's version of Magic Duel.

That was a nice little story :twilightsmile: I have one concern though :trixieshiftright: I'm not trying to be nasty or anything; it's a sincere concern (I guess technically it could be open to the reader, but all in all, if this story is going to get a fav...it must be addressed, truthfully.) Please tell me that when you said "getting together" you weren't implying anything :applecry:

6442519 I'm not if I understand the question.

6444471 Sorry for any confusion :twilightsheepish: I was asking a question about part of the last paragraph

...When Trixie was finished, both her friends congratulated her for getting together with Stage Hoof...

I was just wondering if you were implying anything when you said "getting together". I thought the story was excellent & I'd love to give it a favorite BUT I have high standards for stories I give fav's to (if you were curious as to why I was asking).

Very nicely written, you do a really good job with descriptions to create the proper pacing and atmosphere. There were some little hiccups in grammar, notably some faulty punctuation in direct speech, but that’s just a minor thing. Can explain more if you wish to correct it though.

One thing that I think needs to be said is that you don’t need to mark flashbacks as the story makes it clear what those are. Separating them with line breaks should be enough. Also, once they are marked/separated somehow, there is no need for the italics.

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