A small filly caught in between a war of societies, ideals, morals... And the value of life.
Feel free to delete this later.
Nights thoughts.
Shouldn't this be possessive?
confine s
One word.
definite Slow
Why capitalize this?
small Blue haired
You've actually got quite a few extra capitals right after this.
she heard a scrambling a hushed whisper.
Not a mistake but maybe that second "A" should be something else?(suggestion)
If I find anymore today, I'll edit this. If not I'll just leave another comment with my opinions. Sorry though, I like pointing out things like this.
A nice and sweet chapter. Where is this going again? I've kind of forgotten.
4384021
Ooops.. My writing can get a bit sloppy sometimes.. Thanks! I'll fix those when I can.
4384066
Good! Makes things more dramatic and interesting if you have no clue!
Well, I'm hooked.
Feel free to delete this later.
Shouldn't this be possessive?
One word.
Why capitalize this?
You've actually got quite a few extra capitals right after this.
Not a mistake but maybe that second "A" should be something else?(suggestion)
If I find anymore today, I'll edit this. If not I'll just leave another comment with my opinions. Sorry though, I like pointing out things like this.
A nice and sweet chapter.
Where is this going again? I've kind of forgotten.
4384021
Ooops.. My writing can get a bit sloppy sometimes.. Thanks! I'll fix those when I can.
4384066
Good! Makes things more dramatic and interesting if you have no clue!
Well, I'm hooked.