I am a young ametur author. I love to write and I like mlp fim so before I could stop myself I came up with ideas.
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When Luna discovers the art of pranking, the sisters can't help but keep exchanging them. Let's just hope it doesn't get out of control.
The cover is from http://loceri.deviantart.com/art/MLP-Scooore-302883333 and while cadence does not appear in the story it was just to awesome not to use.
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A good one-shot, but it cuts off at the end.
other than that, just a few grammatical errors that I can over look 
I hope that you can fix the cut off at the end
unless that was your intention all along!!! 
its gets a like from me!
Love the photo!
All powerful alicorn princesses with unmatched powers,tatical knowledge,politcal influence,and funding + pranks? Dear celistia help u- ooooohhhhh noo
", she got up and put"
Put what?
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Sorry I just realized I left the last paragraph off on accident. I have fixed it now though. Thank you for posting this comment because I had no clue until i went to check what you were talking about.
Oh what's this? A very fine story. 100/10. Would read again.
seriously, twas pretty fun writing this with ya. Hope to do it again sometime.
That was a nice story. I'd advice to leave the link in the authors note or embed the image into the story. Either way, I think people have enough imagination to picture Luna in hot pink in a girly frue frue dress with frills and a tutu. Basically. :P
Have a like and a fav ^^
Seriously though, you should fix this:
Pranks for Any Occasion and Any Victim? Discord's autobiography?
reminds me of something from DA
Good story, I enjoyed it.
Now this was a great story. Like and fave.
I loved this story!!!
This is a fairly entertaining comedy, and I can honestly say I have never seen an artist collaboration on a written piece, so it's novel too. It seems like most of your comments are either generic praise or complaining about some upload issue you had, so I'm going to try to say something helpful here instead.
Since this is a collaboration, I Have no idea who to blame any grammatical errors on - I'll just say there are quite a few. The idea of the story is good, but it seems like you were trying a bit too hard to stitch references together. The donut fight scene was clearly there because of the picture you used for the title slide, and the in-line link was obviously inspiration for Luna's bath.
It's perfectly fine to have images to go along with your stories. Heck, the one story I uploaded has three pictures to go with it that you can only see on my deviantArt page because of this: In-line links break continuity. If your reader has to stop, copy a link, open another page, paste the link, and wait for it to load - they are going to have a different experience than someone who sees the link embedded in the story, or simply doesn't see it at all.
There is one other thing that bothers me in this piece - the passage of time. It's not that important in a comedy piece, but at a few points I was asking myself things like "Why is Celestia getting ready for work if Luna just woke up? Does that mean they both sleep through the night?" or "If Celestia just did that, how does she have time to go to the library for over an hour before Luna catches her?"
PS: I don't know how to embed images, so if you find out tell me :)
PPS: I try to only read finished stories, mostly because of my terrible memory. If you'd ever like my opinion on something or just some grammatical assistance just send me a message and I'll make some time.
4532203 Sorry for getting back to ya late. I'm the other guy who wrote this.
1. The grammatical errors are pretty simple. If it is a Celestia part , it's Novalis. If it's an Luna part, I probably derped up. A little more editing would have did us some good. Those were sark times.
2. Time progression . I see what ya mean, but they're alicorns. They do what they want. I suppose a little more thought could have gone in the small pieces. But, as long as someone got a chuckle...I'm satisfied.
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A chuckle was indeed had.
Any comment on the images?
4949986 If I remember right, I mentioned the picture, but the scene came before that...I think. Now the Luna dress part. The link was actually meant to be just between us. Just to show the idea. So that sorta falls under editing which is our fault.
Personally, I never use images in a story because it is too dang hard to describe. I rather describe an idea in my head than a picture which an artist spent his/her time on. (Though, Luna did look cute in the dress. No words could have captured that.) With a quick reread, I see Novalis embedded the pic into the words. This story was his idea of the 2 collabs we did, so whatever he does after he posts is to his liberty.
And that is how the Equestrian Pranklympic Games started, and why we celebrate it in the Everfree Forest.