The Making of a Changeling Queen

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What made Chrysalis into the power hungry monarch that she turned out to be? A look into how she was brought up, and how her mother tried to put her on the right track, without success.

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Birth · 26th Mar 2014 · 1,051 words
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Teen · 26th Mar 2014 · 1,307 words
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Death · 26th Mar 2014 · 1,014 words
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Dark Avenger

Dark Avenger #1 · Mar 26th, 2014 · · · Death ·

Not bad, but... the first chapter started off so well. Why did it suddenly shift after that, and look as if it received no editing at all?

Diamond Sparkle

Diamond Sparkle #2 · Mar 26th, 2014 · · · Death ·

4137242 I don't have a beta. And the first chapter, my idea of how a new Changeling Queen would be born, was perfectly planned. I might have got more yes votes if I'd just posted that chapter. The other chapters, not so much.

GIGA-XISBASS

GIGA-XISBASS #3 · Mar 27th, 2014 · 1 · · Death ·

That was a good story and it's sad that Chrysalis' mother died when there was a possibility of the princesses prolonging her life some. Shining Armor's an idiot here attacking a messenger unprovoked, especially one requesting an audience with the rulers of his nation for help. If a war broke out later on after the invasion it'd be on his head and hands/hooves the blood spilt and potential lifes lost because of his actions that day.

Kinda reminds me of the How I learned to stop worrying and love the Changeling story when Chrysalis mentioned how her mother was murdered by a pony on Celestia's court or something like that ignoring her orders to stand down and leave the "insect creatures" later known as changelings he found alone til she checks things out. Obviously by his actions and Celestia never knowing what actually happened that day til Chrysalis mentioned it later on the invasion happened as a revenge and feeding plan.

Looking forward to our RP sequel on this story. HEART is gonna hit the roof like a commissioner angry at a bunch of police members nearly ruining an ongoing investigation that's been in the works for years when she finds out the cause of this version of invasion.

nioniosbbbb

nioniosbbbb #4 · Mar 28th, 2014 · · · Death ·

SHIIIIINING!!!!!!!!!!!!! IIIIIIIIIIIIIIII HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wubadubdub

Wubadubdub #5 · Mar 29th, 2014 · 1 · · Death ·

Shining sucks, always had, always will...... iv never liked him at all really. To me he was just every ones least favorite background pony. But thanks to your story i now think less of him. ohh well :P

SpiderDungeon

SpiderDungeon #6 · Apr 1st, 2014 · · · Teen ·

A few grammar issues, too many words in some dialogue, and a couple out of place knickknacks, but other than that, I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. I really like how you entwined this with the show itself by indirectly referencing the episode's main song. I smiled at that.

Bravo.