This is the beginning of something awesome I can tell already. Let's hope that by the end equestria will be one self entitled gryphon twat less. I'm betting that its shining armor in the room with cadence at the end, any takers.
4752222 Hey the Mad Wizard! You've never heard of these stories before. Of course not. They're really good though, but you have to read all the other ones first.
I remember the first part of this chapter from another live writing thing Dusk Quill did. Still holds up in excitement.
Perfect… he thought with chagrin.
Did that need to be italicized?
Your eye is messed up pretty bad, but it’s only a shallow laceration on your neck, Captain…
Shining's eye is injured. Like he'll need an eyepatch perhaps. Didn't one of the jailers in the prologue mention that the prisoner they brought in had a "patch"? As in eyepatch. So, it must be Shining Armor then.
We’ll let the RIS sort it out.
RIS. Are we going to see Bentgrass again?
He owed Fleethoof an apology.
Seems like that's going to be over pretty quickly. I thought Shining was going to spend the rest of the story hating Fleethoof's guts over what happened.
“But that isn’t you,” Midnight replied. “That’s Alaric’s cross.”
Cross? What could that possibly refer to in Equestria?
“Do you love her?”
That's the question all your regular, loyal readers want answered. Like right now!
I am still of the opinion that Fleethoof should end up with Midnight, but he should at least get the chance to sleep with Cadance like once. See you can have your cake and eat it too.
Well, that was a great set of opening chapters. I understand from like the last time you said anything about it, the posts will be fairly regular. I look forward to the next installment(s) when they come. Keep up the spectacular work.
I'll have you know I'm still waiting for someone to get the bright idea of mounting 2 helicopter engines sideways, hooking them up to a pair of treads, and putting the whole assembly inside a 10 mm steel box with a gun turret.
So wonderful. I didn't get to see this for the "grand opening" due to work, but I finally had some free time to sit down and read. So worth it and so awesome!
As you might imagine I'm super excited! Really looking forward to the next update! And congratulations on the feature! After all your hard work you really deserve it!
That’s Alaric’s cross
...this made me wonder: Do ponies have a pony Jesus? Oh, and will you continue your "Operation: Black Wraith" thing or is that done now that you've started the release?
4754633 At this point Alaric's claim to the Kingdom's throne is moot and his supporters are considered enemies of the current reigning power. Though I doubt we'll see any of the Kingdom's politics in this story. At this point Alaric is pretty much running around on his own with a small army of supporters. Though as DQ has shown, Alaric has gotten pretty good at using minimal resources to cause pain for the Equestrians. I'm really looking forward to seeing what DQ brings to us next!
4754855 That's fine. I wasn't as clear as I could have been. You're totally right about the Black Wraith stuff, and whatnot. It's just the Kingdom itself that doesn't recognize Alaric, but he still has a bunch of supporters....ALL TRAITORS! EVERY LAST ONE OF THEM! E'hem.
Though I guess we should say "is writing House Divided" since I've yet to post the next bit. (WHICH IS NEARLY THERE DQ PROMISE!) -hopefully before BronyCon
And it is cruel, that DQs goal is jusr out of reach. But hopefully he'll get another one during Retribution.
4754896 If you support Alaric's claim to the throne over the current ruler...yes dat does make you a traitor. To the current government at least, to Alaric that likely makes you a patriot.
Though we'll just have to see what DQ throws at us. Alaric is an interesting bad guy to say the least.
4754962 Yeah...that would be super unexpected. Fleet and his soldiers storm into the griffion's hide out...only to find Candance and the griffins sining songs and having s'mores.
I can not express to you how much I want this story to have Candence/ Fleeethoof for some reason Midnight/Fleethoof doesn't sit right with me. Is it wrong of me to want Fleethoof to win Cadences heart.
I find the scene with the cabin in the woods familiar, I'm pretty sure that's what you were writing during the last live stream, right? Also you should do another live stream. They're tons o' fun!
It's obviously Cupcake in the room with Cadance. No arguments.
4760227 Argument. It's Shining because of the patch. Remember that thing about getting his eye messed up? Yeah, that's the reason he get the patch and gets intentionally captured.
4765429 Every now and then, I'll do a Let's Write sort of livestream thing, where I'll work on a bit of a chapter, get to chat and hang out with all of you, and we have a mutual learning thing back and forth with each other. It's apparently much more popular than I realized!
4766024 I put up a blog with a link to the channel a week or two before the actual event so people have time to prepare and whatnot. Right now, I'm in the process of transitioning from the old Live Stream system to the new one, so the new channel isn't up yet.
One question that has been in the back of my mind is do they use like some kind of custom firearms with modified triggers to accommodate hooves, or do the use their lack of fingers for the triggers?
4814255 You would be correct. The firearms basically have a lack of a trigger guard or wider guards and slightly elongated triggers to allow all sorts of races to use them, but otherwise similar functions and mechanics to ours.
"What kind of leader are you that you put your new recruits on the front-bucking-lines?!”
Uh, aren't you supposed to send new recruits to the front? How else are you supposed to get hardened veterans?
You send the recruits to the front to harden them and to conserve your already existing veteran pool. If you sent in your veterans first, they would do well, but if they get wiped out, all you have left are recruits with no experienced veterans left for you to rely on when shit hits the fan.
You might need those experienced troops later so send in the fresh troops first and expand your veteran pool.
So the Captain of the Royal Guard doesn't have the brain to do something very basic and scout the surrounding area before attacking?
Shining Armor, you hopeless clown. I have no sympathy for you.
4866921 You would send new recruits with a handful of veterans so you have somebody competent when shit goes south for the recruits or they inevitably fuck up, but for the most part that is how a veteran is made. ;O
That struck him in the heart. Fleethoof opened his mouth, but no words came out. He could feel his jaw hanging open, his eyes wide. Midnight flicked her mane back behind her ear and shook her head.
“I’m not trying to pry. I’m just trying to figure out the whole broken and upset thing you’re going through. I mean, if you did, it would make sense…”
“I’m upset because I failed, Midnight,” Fleethoof sighed. “I haven’t failed like this before… I failed Cadance, I failed Shining, I failed you—all of you… That’s why I’m upset.”
MIdnight: I'm not trying to pry, I'm just asking you this very personal question.
Fleethoof: Of course, I love her. And I love Shining Armor, and you, and Skyfall...I love everypony!
Interesting to note that he won't admit it given that he was about to kiss Cadance when the shit hit the fan. He'd probably stop Midnight from showering him with flirtations if he did. He's not leading her on, is he? Keeping a backup in case things don't work out? That would be pretty coldblooded.
I’m surprised that Shining Armor’s soldiers didn’t have small drones to check out the cabin windows nor military-grade infrared cameras on their rifles. He should have had a Pegasus scout drop a flash bang grenade down the cabin chimney. Shining Armor should have had at least two, two pony sniper teams using enhanced sniper rifles (ESR) laying on a low cloud, taking out the Griffon soldiers. For your information, sniper rifles are considered crew-served weapons, with a sniper who handles the sniper rifle and spotter who supports the sniper. Sometimes, the shooter and a spotter will exchange places in order to avoid eye fatigue.
Aye! Congrats on your feature!
(man, I been doing this a lot lately.)
Ive been waiting for this!!! and you gave us 3 chapters right off the bat! Thanks Dusk!
I really wonder who fleets going to go for in the end?
4751735 oh ya I remember that good times good times
A great start to a great story. Strap in, folks. This is gonna be one Hell of a ride...
4751795 oh now thats a good question, I feel it might be fleet,shinning,mid or maybe cadence but im probably nowhere close.
Yes! It's finally here!! Onwards into the depths of text!
(I will be replying to your message shortly)
I saw the word 'Skyfall' and immediately thought this was a James Bond crossover.
4751898
Anything is possible.
4752222
It is not, sorry.
4751898 hahaha ya but instead of them all holding hands and singing together its just fleet with Alarics head on a pole singing
also great song!!! xD
This is the beginning of something awesome I can tell already. Let's hope that by the end equestria will be one self entitled gryphon twat less. I'm betting that its shining armor in the room with cadence at the end, any takers.
4752222 Hey the Mad Wizard! You've never heard of these stories before. Of course not. They're really good though, but you have to read all the other ones first.
I remember the first part of this chapter from another live writing thing Dusk Quill did. Still holds up in excitement.
Did that need to be italicized?
Shining's eye is injured. Like he'll need an eyepatch perhaps. Didn't one of the jailers in the prologue mention that the prisoner they brought in had a "patch"? As in eyepatch. So, it must be Shining Armor then.
RIS. Are we going to see Bentgrass again?
Seems like that's going to be over pretty quickly. I thought Shining was going to spend the rest of the story hating Fleethoof's guts over what happened.
Cross? What could that possibly refer to in Equestria?
That's the question all your regular, loyal readers want answered. Like right now!
I am still of the opinion that Fleethoof should end up with Midnight, but he should at least get the chance to sleep with Cadance like once. See you can have your cake and eat it too.
Well, that was a great set of opening chapters. I understand from like the last time you said anything about it, the posts will be fairly regular. I look forward to the next installment(s) when they come. Keep up the spectacular work.
There's part of me that suspects that Retribution will end like this.
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congrats on the feature!
I'll have you know I'm still waiting for someone to get the bright idea of mounting 2 helicopter engines sideways, hooking them up to a pair of treads, and putting the whole assembly inside a 10 mm steel box with a gun turret.
So wonderful. I didn't get to see this for the "grand opening" due to work, but I finally had some free time to sit down and read. So worth it and so awesome!
As you might imagine I'm super excited! Really looking forward to the next update! And congratulations on the feature! After all your hard work you really deserve it!
...this made me wonder: Do ponies have a pony Jesus?
Oh, and will you continue your "Operation: Black Wraith" thing or is that done now that you've started the release?
4752222 DQ was using the word "Skyfall" before it was cool
...though it does have that "Secret Agent Pony" thing going with it.
4754633 At this point Alaric's claim to the Kingdom's throne is moot and his supporters are considered enemies of the current reigning power. Though I doubt we'll see any of the Kingdom's politics in this story. At this point Alaric is pretty much running around on his own with a small army of supporters. Though as DQ has shown, Alaric has gotten pretty good at using minimal resources to cause pain for the Equestrians. I'm really looking forward to seeing what DQ brings to us next!
4754855 That's fine. I wasn't as clear as I could have been.
You're totally right about the Black Wraith stuff, and whatnot. It's just the Kingdom itself that doesn't recognize Alaric, but he still has a bunch of supporters....ALL TRAITORS! EVERY LAST ONE OF THEM! E'hem.
Though I guess we should say "is writing House Divided" since I've yet to post the next bit.
(WHICH IS NEARLY THERE DQ PROMISE!) -hopefully before BronyCon
And it is cruel, that DQs goal is jusr out of reach. But hopefully he'll get another one during Retribution.
4754896 If you support Alaric's claim to the throne over the current ruler...yes dat does make you a traitor. To the current government at least, to Alaric that likely makes you a patriot.
Though we'll just have to see what DQ throws at us. Alaric is an interesting bad guy to say the least.
4754931 With DQ I wouldn't be too surprised to see Alaric a couple of times. I'm really looking forward to seeing those moments!
4754962 Yeah...that would be super unexpected. Fleet and his soldiers storm into the griffion's hide out...only to find Candance and the griffins sining songs and having s'mores.
4755011 Silence...I wonder what DQ has in store for us. I know he's got something up his sleeve...but what!? Maybe it is da Cage
4755086 DQ's dropped a few hints here and there, but nothing solid. So we'll just have to wait I guess
4755123 True enough.
These speculations take us no where! ...DQ please don't make us wait too much longer! We're waiting for moar!
I can not express to you how much I want this story to have Candence/ Fleeethoof for some reason Midnight/Fleethoof doesn't sit right with me. Is it wrong of me to want Fleethoof to win Cadences heart.
I find the scene with the cabin in the woods familiar, I'm pretty sure that's what you were writing during the last live stream, right? Also you should do another live stream. They're tons o' fun!
It's obviously Cupcake in the room with Cadance. No arguments.
4758835
Is it wrong? Nah. I assure you, dozens of other readers want the exact same thing you do.
4760227 Argument. It's Shining because of the patch. Remember that thing about getting his eye messed up? Yeah, that's the reason he get the patch and gets intentionally captured.
4760227 what livestream???
4760965 welp, no pressure then
4765429
Every now and then, I'll do a Let's Write sort of livestream thing, where I'll work on a bit of a chapter, get to chat and hang out with all of you, and we have a mutual learning thing back and forth with each other. It's apparently much more popular than I realized!
4765842 so where do I find this livestream?
4766024
I put up a blog with a link to the channel a week or two before the actual event so people have time to prepare and whatnot. Right now, I'm in the process of transitioning from the old Live Stream system to the new one, so the new channel isn't up yet.
4766035 okay
Congrats on making a half-OC love parallelogram and having it rock.
Hm... I am still on Treason, but was glancing around at the others. Can't help but wonder -- for whom is the romance tag there?
One question that has been in the back of my mind is do they use like some kind of custom firearms with modified triggers to accommodate hooves, or do the use their lack of fingers for the triggers?
4814255
You would be correct. The firearms basically have a lack of a trigger guard or wider guards and slightly elongated triggers to allow all sorts of races to use them, but otherwise similar functions and mechanics to ours.
4814938 Thank you for feeding my OCD. :P
"What kind of leader are you that you put your new recruits on the front-bucking-lines?!”
Uh, aren't you supposed to send new recruits to the front? How else are you supposed to get hardened veterans?
You send the recruits to the front to harden them and to conserve your already existing veteran pool. If you sent in your veterans first, they would do well, but if they get wiped out, all you have left are recruits with no experienced veterans left for you to rely on when shit hits the fan.
You might need those experienced troops later so send in the fresh troops first and expand your veteran pool.
So the Captain of the Royal Guard doesn't have the brain to do something very basic and scout the surrounding area before attacking?
Shining Armor, you hopeless clown. I have no sympathy for you.
4866921 You would send new recruits with a handful of veterans so you have somebody competent when shit goes south for the recruits or they inevitably fuck up, but for the most part that is how a veteran is made. ;O
MIdnight: I'm not trying to pry, I'm just asking you this very personal question.
Fleethoof: Of course, I love her. And I love Shining Armor, and you, and Skyfall...I love everypony!
Interesting to note that he won't admit it given that he was about to kiss Cadance when the shit hit the fan. He'd probably stop Midnight from showering him with flirtations if he did. He's not leading her on, is he? Keeping a backup in case things don't work out? That would be pretty coldblooded.
I’m surprised that Shining Armor’s soldiers didn’t have small drones to check out the cabin windows nor military-grade infrared cameras on their rifles. He should have had a Pegasus scout drop a flash bang grenade down the cabin chimney. Shining Armor should have had at least two, two pony sniper teams using enhanced sniper rifles (ESR) laying on a low cloud, taking out the Griffon soldiers. For your information, sniper rifles are considered crew-served weapons, with a sniper who handles the sniper rifle and spotter who supports the sniper. Sometimes, the shooter and a spotter will exchange places in order to avoid eye fatigue.