Cricket Chirper is in trouble. He's a bit of a coward, you see: after getting his buggy rump kicked by six certain mares in Canterlot, he wasn't too keen on having to face them again. Well, when an order came down to attack Ponyville some time after the failed invasion of Canterlot, Cricket wasn't too keen on getting the tar beat out of him again.
So, he ran and hid in Manehatten. In other words, he disobeyed a direct order from his Queen.
Naturally, Chrysalis has a nicely evil, wonderfully sadistic punishment in mind for him...
(Has some references to the IDW comics, but reading them isn't necessary to understand this fic.)
Cover image is my own work.
Chapters (3)
I have no idea where this story is going, but I'm curious. Liked.
You might want to mention in the description that this spins off from the comics. I only know the comics from the MLP wiki, so I was a bit confused as to what was going on.
Other than that, I don't have much criticism for this one. It could do with another pass for errors (like removing the ' after "Protege"), but it's basically fine so far.
4065533 Don't worry about the reference to the comics--reading them isn't necessary to understand what's going on.
And thanks, I'll be sure to keep it coming!
This is originsl
Hmm, pretty good. I can't wait to read what happens to Cricket!
4065815 Thanks! I'll do my best.
Yes, Twilight... the most rational explanation is that Pinkie somehow got her hooves on a shrunken Changeling and decided to feed it to Rarity...
...
... Why is that the first thing your mind jumped to, Twilight?!
4065922 Even by the standards of Ponyville, a tiny love-eating bug-monster suddenly showing up on a baked good is wired as all hell. Twilight was just trying to rationalize the oddness, and strung together an explanation from what she had seen so far.
That, and I thought it would be a funny line. :P
I've read enough fan fiction to not know where this is going
4067113 notice that it's rated "Everyone"...
4067275 i am reading fanfiction about colorful talking horses for 6 year old girls, does it look like I pay attention to what things are intended for?
4067570 Touché.
So... when does the screaming start?
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It could be like those cake-toppers that are used on wedding cakes; an inedible decoration that is removed before the confection is consumed.
4067999 Soon.
4068449 Except those are plastic figures, and Rares found an actual Changeling.
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You never know with Pinkie involved.
4069301 Got me there....
Thanks for sharing the link to this, I'll be keeping an eye on it.
4069588 You're welcome. :)
I love this story!
MOAR! I want MOAAAAAAAAAAAR!
Hmmm... This has captured my interest.
4071440 Excellent...
If you keep the chapters up, this story will become a hit in no time!
Sorry to be a buzzkill, that was just bothering me. Anyways, I absolutely loved the story, and can't wait to see more of little Cricket!
4072450 Thanks, there's more to come!
I'll fix that caps error soon, don't worry. ;)
The one time I'm tempted into reading a fanfic for the first time in... a long time, or something? And I find something interesting, to boot! This definitely looks like it has some potential, though there's not really much in the way of criticism possible due to the low length. There are some minor spelling and grammatical errors, but the writing itself is fine and dandy.
Looking forward to whatever you've got in store next!
And then the Breezies arrived, and the Changling discovered a new untapped source of love that keep him away from the hive forever.
Accidental fave, haven't read it yet. I will soon, and may re-fave it if I like what I read.
First off, I have to say I do not read the comics, nor do I intend to. I do not consider the comics canon in any way. That said, I guess this changeling is living his worst fear...being squashed like a bug. I will keep an eye on this.
4082218 Glad to know I have your attention! :) And as for Cricket...well, no spoilers, but Twi and Company may be more merciful than he thinks.
4082221 I know that and you know that...he does not. I just hope he can avoid some of the ponies *cough*Rainbow*cough* initial reaction to squashing him.
I can't access it. You need to change permissions so anyone with the link can view it.
...Wut?
I think something went wrong, man.
4082717 Fixed.
4082721 Now it's fixed. I thought importing from GoogleDocs would just post the text, but it's just a link. Have to copy-paste, it seems...and then add all my italics and such back in, because that doesn't carry over for some reason.
Okay, that was hilarious!
4082748 Thanks! Not much happened, but I DO have a plot for this, and the ball WILL get rolling soon!
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The import function should —even if it tends to be rather finicky— save most of your formatting just fine. I've used it since my first fic and although the formatting tends to need fixing, it usually at least applies in roughly the right place.
4082759 What am I doing wrong, then? Whenever I tried to import, it always just posted a link...
Really quite good. Keep up the good work.
"...the what comics?"
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That can still be made to work. Just change the document share settings so that anyone with the link can view.
4082796 Thanks!
4082798 Hmm.....I'll give that a shot some time.
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That way, even if importing only makes a link, we can read it on Google docs and then comment here.
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Roughly from scratch (and memory).
1, Make a new chapter. Naming it at this stage is not mandatory, but you might as well, right?
2. Enter edit.
3. Look for a button furthest to the left that looks like a green arrow, but don't click it quite yet.
4. Go to the Gdoc, and make sure you've shared the document. Fimfic needs this to actually get a hold of the info, but it is rather easy to forget.
5. In the same window you set what type of access you're allowing, there is a bar at the top with an url. Copy this.
6. Go back to Fimfic in your browser and click that green button. A text-box asking for that url should pop up.
7. Just give that info, hit enter and the rest should be automated.
8. Go trough the chapter an extra time. Not only is the formatting importing slightly wonky, but has a tendency to 'eat' spaces between paragraphs. Not only that, but your browsers built in spell-checker might just pick up things the one in Gdocs have missed.
9. Don't forget to hit that disc shaped button and save all that work.
Hope that wall of text helped without sounding condescending, but better too much info than too little, right?
4082856 Thanks, that's a big help!
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Glad to have helped.
I feel bad for this tiny changeling. I have a question though. If the CMC were kidnapped and Chrysalis was trapped somewhere with a singing suit by Pinkie, why didn't Twilight mention that when she talked about what the changelings have done?
4082928 Ah, fair point. I'll edit the bit about kidnapping the CMCs later.
"Diamond Rump"?
Hah!