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The past few weeks have not been kind to Rarity. Ashamed at how much of a fool she made of herself over Trenderhoof, she slips into a depression. She begins to abuse medication, combining it with alcohol; creating a vile elixir that may just rob her of what she holds most dear.

Rarity is remorseful. She feels as if she is all alone and unloved, but is she really?


Special thanks to MrCbleck for allowing me to use their art I Know It Hurts... as the cover art of my story.


I would also like to thank Sadie for her help on the first half of chapter one.

Thank you Amneiger, for your editing assistance.

Please point out any mistakes on my part to me in the comments. If you would like to be an editor for the duration of this fanfiction please PM me, thank you.


Rated Teen for drug abuse, some adult themes, and the occasional swear.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 12 )

I love it! Haven't read a good Rarishy in a while. Thanks! Excited for more!

Lovely story. Its always good to find a nice bleak fic. *thumbs up'd*

Though a few things I should point out, because I'm anal:
You switch tenses at the start a few times, which is a tad confusing.
"but she was a bit mythed by Rarity’s recent behavior" Do you 'miffed' as in angry or 'mystified' as in confused?
"were Icy to the touch" Icy should be lowercase there.

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Thank you for telling me and for the up vote.

When I said 'mythed,' I meant it in terms of Fluttershy's confusion over Rarity's actions. I realize this word may not be used often, but I thought it would fit best when I was writing this chapter.

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I'm glad you enjoy it!

I can only hope you'll be just as excited by the future chapters of this story.

I always wondered if Rarity might take an occasional sip -- for medicinal purposes only, darling. :raritywink:

And maybe you telegraphed the ending just a little with one of those tags, but I've been wrong -- extraordinarily wrong -- before. Sign me up for the duration.

Rarity wishes she could pursue a romantic relationship free of all of the drama that seems to follow her around. It almost seems that she is cursed.

This part is in present tense, while the rest is in the past tense.

when her feelings and thoughts are dark, she cannot help but to slip back into her old self destructive ways.

Same here.

Rarity was one of the first ponies she met after she was laughed out of cloudsdale.

Capitalise "Cloudsdale"

She returned a few moments later with a chilled bottle of her favorite Marelot. Biting her lip, she poured herself a glass of the claret liquid.

Way to go, Rares...

Now i feel shit bad for saying rarity is worse pony! I'm sorry!!! :fluttercry::fluttercry:

The tense issues, along with a few other things in Chapter One have been corrected, thanks to some help from my editor, Amneiger.

Is this gonna continue?? It's amazong, well done

Why is this cancelled? I really liked this and want to know what would happen. Please continue this story.

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