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When you're all alone, when there is no pony around to help you, who can you rely on to make things better? Who can you trust? Who can you talk to?

For Trixie, after certain events have made her a wanted mare, she faces these questions everyday, going from town to town and staying out of the spotlight and hiding in the shadows. From a showmare who lived for the audiences, she now finds herself blending into them, avoiding other's gazes and sights.

One night, when she is being chased down by pursuers, her questions are soon brought out to the light and are answered by an unexpected source. After all, the thing about help is that no matter what it is or where it comes from, it will always come when you least expect it.
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This is my entry for the EFNW 2014 Writing Contest. I thank you for taking a look this and hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it.

*Also, the cover image belongs to Jeatz-Axl

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Comments ( 9 )

Also, while this story may be considered 'complete', Trixie's story is far from over.

I would hope not. Trixie is wanted for what she did in Ponyville? That is harsh. I hope to see this story continue.

YOU'D BETTER CONTINUE IT!!!!!!! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:
THIS STORY IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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Don't worry, I will. Let's just consider this to the 'Prologue' to what I have planned.

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“Sir, you should probably step away from her,” this time, it was a mare’s voice that spoke.

Who's saying this? I'm very confused by this part of the story.

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It was another one of the police ponies. The group consisted of several ponies, not just the two that argued with each other.

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Author Interviewer

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So the filly is the sister of one of the police ponies? I'd make that a little clearer, then. I thought it was either the filly's actual sister in her house, or else Trixie pretending to be her sister, in which case the police would probably be challenging her assertion that she's alone.

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Actually the police pony isn't related to the filly. She just looked at the filly and thought that her coughing matched her own sister's illness, which is why she advised the leader of the group to stand back. The pony's actual sister is the one that was hospitalized, thus isn't in the story.

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OH

Even less clear. Yeah, to repeat myself, make that clearer in the text, I got absolutely none of that by reading.

D'awww, that was sweet, to an extent. Though performing a magic show under the condition probably won't end well...

Still though, interesting story.

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