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Octavia's Dilemma

Short story about Octavia's dilemma about speaking up.

Chapters (4)

The Invitation · 27th Feb 2014 · 1,412 words
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What to do? · 27th Feb 2014 · 1,540 words
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Finding a voice · 27th Feb 2014 · 1,364 words
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Epilouge · 27th Feb 2014 · 116 words
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nomotog #1 · Mar 2nd, 2014 · · · Epilouge ·

There! I am finally finished. That ended up taking a long time. I found the style kind of hard to read. I didn’t find any grammar errors, so i can’t blame that. I think it might have been the lack of spacing between paragraphs?

The story was OK. Not bad, but not particularly engaging. From the title and the first chapter, I was expecting it to be a story about Octavia gutting up and admitting to rarity that she was gay and that vinyl was her girlfriend. (Why yes I do have a favorite ship.) That wasn’t the story though. It was about Octavia gutting up and asking out a stallion.

One nice thing you did was keep everypony in character. Not every fic can manage that.

Keep writing and you will get better at it.

The Batmane of equestria