The Misfortune of a Salient Tuesday

Concerts are a big deal for Octavia, especially concerts in which she should place second chair in the highest symphony in Equestria.
Of course, things should be going smoothly; Tavi has gotten her music nearly memorized, brand new strings installed and tuned, and a nice, gleaming polish on the top plate of her cello. Everything should be just fine.

ーOr not.

Cover art a screenshot from A Tropical Octav3 Animation
Vocals by Coconeru, animation by AnimatedJames on YouTube

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nomotog

nomotog #1 · Feb 23rd, 2014 · · ·

Cute story. i don't know who taught you about In medias res, but I want to punch them. You used it masterfully.

The Narrator gag you pulled worked. I have seen others do it better, but you did it well.

You made Vinyl and Octavia cousins! How can I ship them now?!

Did you have an editor for this story? I noticed some odd flow issues and maybe a few grammar hiccups that an editor would have picked up.

I kind of think you could have used more story. I appreciate how you didn't waste time. You where quite brisk in your writing and I like that, but I think you could have had more things happening. More gags, more jokes, some light shipping with Vinyl. See that is why you don't make them cousins. :P

Lastly, i guess I should ask why this story is listed as incomplete? Are you planing on adding more?

Nineveh

Nineveh #2 · Feb 23rd, 2014 · · ·

3988263 Thank you for the feedback! Well, firstly, thanks so much for the grammar tip, and I'll get right on it on finding an editor (the story was thrown together rather hastily). Secondly, I don't really consider writing homosexual shippings (I don't really mind them too much; I don't not support them, but I wouldn't say I'm a fan of them).
Also, I missed marking it as complete, so thanks for reminding me

To be honest, the reason why this is marked as a slice of life is because it was partially based off of some personal events. About three days before a major concert, the bridge for my cello had slipped off, and my tuning pegs went absolutely whack. I then got the idea of making it into a story, threw in some fiction, added ponies, then BAM.
I also got the narrative writing idea from a book I read recentlyー and I think you should be familiar with itー called The Hobbit by J.R.R. Tolkein.

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