All the bits of my stories and discards that, for one reason or another, just didn't work out. Stuff that went nowhere, deleted scenes, ideas I started to write out but abandoned, and deleted chapters from Entanglement.
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ArguingPizza
And then there's this asshole.
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Too bad, the story looked so promising.
From the point of view, it feels the story is almost concluded. The humans take over the city as described in the intro, with ponies & humans dead. The two princesses captured, followed by interrogations. Only to reveal all was a horrible misunderstanding initiated by a good act of compassion when one soldier saved the lives of those three fillies & the destruction of that airliner was just a horrible & horrendous accident.
There is no happy ending, the damage is done & now the two people will look at each other with distrust & hurt because of all the needless meaningless death. A chance for them to open a cordial relation gone to hell for the time being. With all that hurt, it will take a long time for the hurt to go away.
In a side note: The only one that would have been entertained would be Discord. Watching very amused the disaster unfolding before him while eating popcorn.
Thinking more, think of the repercussion of that fiasco. All those American dead, no way the government can keep it hidden. If the Soviets couldn't keep secret that they were losing a lot of young men in the Afghan war, despite they were brutal keeping secrets, to their public & much less the parents. Doubt the US government will.
Now the international repercussion the US will face. What will that say about our country. A boon for any US organization as boon for anti-US activists or country. That will be proof that the US isn't about democracy but in reality a conquering empire. Plus what will tell about the human race, 1st contact with a none human intelligence & the 1st thing we do is promptly do war against them for "our" benefit. the chaos that would bring to the US.
While Discord is watching eating popcorn, enjoying the chaotic drama unfolding before him.
This could be a whole story unto itself.
Well it seems pretty cut and dry here.
The ponies hounded something that they did not know of and then captured and stripped the troopers of their equipment and left them shackled whilst they waited for the rest of the creatures to try and get the prisoners out of bonds.
Seems like a baiting tactic that went wrong and the ponies will most likely blame everything they possibly can on the "monsters".
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I have to agree with that sadly, as they already covered the airplane incident up and couldn't fall back to the "we did this and freed our people who were wrongfully imprisoned and shackled like animals and you kill civilians in retaliation to bringing them home?"
It's a catch 22 in which they would have to acknowledge that they covered it up and that they were hiding the existence for years, or basically state that they found them and they reacted violently towards us and killed a few dozen soldiers which sparked us practically annihilating their capital and a few thousand troops?
Neither would go well when the language is finally deciphered.
7297321 Hi!
Had to read the story again, & again I have to say: Too bad the story ended, it looked promising. Catch 22 indeed!
I have thought in my free time about what would have happened if the US have revealed to the world that it had constructed a portal & are now exploring a rich lush world full of resources & rich minerals. The pressure other governments, say like China & Russia, would put on the US to "share" their discovery. There will be government that will not be so benign to those "animals". Unfortunately history has shown, humans have treat other humans as less then humans, how will humanity treat these "animals"?
The Catch 22 is that keeping it secret bring other dangers, as it was shown in the story. In this story the US kept a hands-off approach, obviously to observe & learn for an eventual contact with the ponies. So it was kept secret to the public in general, to the international community to avoid the above, & as well keeping themselves hidden in secret form the ponies, so to learn (if I dare use that word) about the pony's culture & possibly even decipher their language to at least have some rudimentary method to communicate. But keeping secrets also bring the dangers of misunderstanding once the secret is revealed. Eventually that hands-off approach was violated by one of the soldiers when he saw the three trouble making fillies ambushed by timber wolves. He felt obligated to do something, mostly to mitigate a guilt of what he witnessed in his last deployment. Interfering would unto itself would be a subject of discussion, & as I have been told by US veterans that served in Iraq & Afghanistan, that is a quandary US soldier face in real life. And the distrust, being spied on will not help at all opening peaceful & cordial contact between nations. It could even spark a war.
But we will never find out how the author was going to end the story, there was many possibilities but I think the author saw each & every possible ending too complicated.
I should've come back & proofread my last comment, I always make a mistake here & there when commenting, especially when moving sentences around. I had to reread it to understand myself what I was trying to convey, & the major mistake: Now the international repercussion the US will face. What will that say about our country. A boon for any US organization as boon for anti-US activists or country. it should've have been written: A boon for any anti-US activist in & out of the US (I also remember wanting to add anti- US foreign powers). But I goofed...
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Indeed. It is a troubling scenario and one I'd greatly enjoy seeing get put to the word.
If I'm not mistaken, this story is undergoing a massive rewrite so there is hope as the author isn't dead and the chapters are being rewritten.
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The Americans are both trespassing (with armed personnel) on an alien world and being nontransparent about it. The Ponies aren't in the wrong here, they didn't want to further engage the aliens. But the Americans mounted a rescue mission, and through the poor decisions already made in this operation, it's agitating the locals even further. Do you know how simple it would have been for the Americans to find somepony in the Equestrian government, and attempt to start contact? A contact beyond observation by armed personnel- Anyways. They can't know that the Ponies could work to translate their language, or the true extent of magic, but anyways.