Not All Bad

by Tessa

The Hospital

Not All Bad: Chapter 3: The Hospital

"Ok Amy your going to need to change now." Rarity said. Then Amethyst changed in to her pegasus form. Soon the six friends and Amy where going to the hospital.

"Well Amethyst you are healthy and so are your foals. Congratulations your having twins! Would you like to know the gender?" The doctor said.

"Yes." Amy said.

"You will be having twin girls." The doctor said.

"Thank you doctor." Amy said. Soon Amy was with the others. "I'm having twin girls." Amy told the others.

"How exciting!" Rarity said.

"Ooooooooooooo! We should throw you a foal shower!" Pinkie Pie said getting excited.

"Pinkie are you sure that is a good idea?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"I have a plan!" Pinkie said. "So what do you think Amy? Do you want to have a foal party?" Pinkie asked.

"Yes. I'd like that." Amy said.

Author's Note:

Ok so before you all start to comment on how Amethyst didn't do thisss with her sssesss let me explain. Amy is a normal pony right now ok. Did you hear Chrysalis's voice sounding like her actual voice when she was Cadence? No? Didn't think so. Also when Amy changed the foals did too. (They are changelings too! Duh!) Hope you like my story please comment your thoughts! Thank you! :3

Comments

[Unbridled Dolly]

Good story but it feels a bit rushed and OOC. I don't think the Mane Six would help without even hesitating. I mean, Rainbow Dash was suspicious of Twilight because Twilight knew about Nightmare Moon. I think she would protest against a changeling.

[CarnivalImpmon]

Well, I'm not going to say it's bad, but it does feel rushed and i think it would benefit a lot of you watched a few episodes to get the character's voice in mind, then rewrite it to fit them. And I think the changeling herself could stand for a bit more wariness. I mean, she's surrounded by creatures her fellow changelings and her would consider their "enemies", she seems a bit too trusting. Or maybe if her trusting nature could be fleshed out through backstory. If you do that later, then well done. If not, then I would suggest that, or rewrite the changeling's personality. Hope I've helped, and it's an otherwise good story!

[Kage no Brony]

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What these two said. After the wedding Changelings and Ponies would have strained relations at best, and be actively hostile at worst. I doubt a Changeling would be that forthcoming with requests for help; granted, for their offspring they may allow their perceived enemies to help them, but only because they'd (hopefully) get proper medical and maternal care.

It would almost seem to me that being named for a changeling is like a cutiecenara for a pony: It's a major, celebratory change in their life and status. I would have expected resistance for her perceived enemies slighting her culture like that, however unintentionally.

These chapters seem drastically short to me. Adding more detail, moving among multiple events in a single chapter, or merging some of the chapters that already exist would extend word counts.

With that said, this is a promising premise, and I am interested in where you're going with this.