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""Whoops..." I said sheepishly as I followed spike."
"I'll just say I found a spell that did that, but the scroll was accidentally burnt up by spike."
YESSSS! I love it!!!!
Very nice, I like Rarity's reaction to Twilight's condition.
Still really enjoying this. I'm liking how even though the Blessing is basically 'all the awesome of vampirism with almost none of the shitty stuff', just the fundamental nature of the gifts she's been given still upsets Twilight, because she doesn't WANT to be an unstoppable alpha predator. It's a nice piece of characterization.
I like how this story is going.
However, I have to say that you seem to have nack for long sentences. Although they are not technically run-ons (I think), some of these could easily be split into two or three sentences. It would help a lot with the flow.
Other than that, I really enjoy how this is going. I haven't seen this approach to the vampire story anywhere else. Keep up the good work!
You know, they mention breakfast but never have it. I think it would have been better for Applejack to arrive after they have that, as she would have needed time to find the clothing & taken longer to reach the library than Twilight did.
Wow... no drama, from the drama queen? AMAZING! Good chapter though!
Seriously, blessing of the moon indeed, there's gota be SOME sorta downside... right?
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will fix those, i thought i had.
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well, none of the shitty stuff yet.
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yeah that's a bad habit of mine, comes from not giving a damn through all English classes in school
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hmm... good idea, i'll see about that.
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see above.
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At the same time, she IS enjoying it. She's found she loves leaping from rooftop to rooftop.
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it is fun, you just gotta make sure you don't miss.
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It's not the leap that hurts, it's the sudden railing!
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and the bookshelves afterwards
I'll keep reading so long as Twilight doesn't sparkle.
Did someone beat me to that joke? I haven't been following the comments very carefully.
KISS ME!!
454320 this totally this!!!!
also Rarity being a fan of Twilight (the books) works for some reason...
i like it gets better and better i give a full beard for you good sir or madame
I found a error dood .
""Hiding in case it was someone else." "
You mean *somepony* else right?
And for the chapter its was very cool! By the way are you gonna turn rarity into a vampony like twilight? That would be so awesome !!
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I was waiting for that joke to appear.
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i never mentioned that but i have ideas for that thought.
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all the way to wizard? sweet.
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that my friend would be considered a plot point, and i try not to reveal plot points.
also, thanks for catching that.
Excellent piece of work.
Cant wait to see Rainbow Dash's reaction when you get around to it.
Rarity's reaction was great, how long did it take you to think of it? She's one of those characters where both extremes would work just fine. IMO what made the reaction captivating was how AJ was the one to flip out and try to run when I kinda expected her to remember that you really cant run from Twilight, yet it was Rarity who thought that through.
Anyway, this is a really fun read.
well....that was an awesome chapter, you're getting better than you were when you wrote chapter 1 imo, i dont know how much you've edited between release of this chapter and now but i certainly couldn't find any noticeable errors, and nothing felt rushed either, not a single scene; you handled the talk with rarity really well. keep up the good work, and im looking forward to the next chapter!
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i have a "go with the flow" writing style so how I write each character is a tad on the spot, but once i start a character in the story i have ideas on what to do with them.
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well i only have edited... two someones, two spikes and changed up the wording on applejack's arrival.
Nice, refined ad-libbing I'd like to call it.
With some of these writers on this site (you included) i find my unread chapters flame increasing in number--im not making any progress, so much to read
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oh i know that feeling all too well
You lucky bastards! I ALWAYS run out of stuff to read!
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well i have my music and minecraft for when i run out of things to read. that and writing...
460242 only time I get behind on fics I am reading is when I have a new game, I got Xenoblade last week but I need to get my Wii fixed (its the lens)
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Well, if your 30 faves are all you read then that is your problem: thou needs to go see what others think is good and get into more things.
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I'm constantly adding to that list now so I don't worry about it too much, and if I know I got a lot of time on my hands, I just work out or Greco-Roman wrestle. It is fun.
When is the next chapter?
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whenever i get to it i suppose... I write whatever I'm inspired to at the time.
Twilight's characterization seems a little odd at times, but so far it has been a pleasant read. Most of the spelling or grammar errors my mind corrected without me noticing.
After re-reading the story I really can't wait to see how Celestia will react when she finds out. If it happens soon I can see Twilight breaking down and Celestia comforting her reguardless of what she thinks about the Blessing (though I imagine she will far from happy at the news).
Tracking over 150 stories, hopefully one of them will update soon to tide me over until the next chapter.
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Chapter's over!?
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However, this story is getting good.
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i hope Ceres isn't getting to impatient waiting for Twi to return for some training...
One small problem, early on in this chapter, you have one that that abruptly shifts into third person
"So how was the sleepover?" Spike asked chuckling as he pulled out some leftover pancakes and reheated them with a blast of fire.
"Well..." Twilight started.
that should probably be "I started"
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Dammit i thought i had caught all of those. I accidentally started writing in third person one sitting.
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Impatient, darling she's been stuck in a rock for a few millenia. I think a few days wouldn't matter.
but then again it could, you'll have to wait and see
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Next one should be up this week, it's in the works right now and at about 3000 words.
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it's tricky keeping the personality of a well established character. I'm trying though. And as for the spelling and grammar, well i ran one percent above failing in all my english classes throughout high school so I can assure you it's not my strong point.
492533
well, there is that anticipation when you meet someone new that you like, that you can't wait to see them again...
492539
True, true. Well you'll just have to wait and see.
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Is it wrong that I picture your avatar talking every time I read one of your comments?
492533 Good...good...
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foxinshadow did do a good job.
here is the full
i actually like this now cant wait for the next chapter. how long ya think? till then? and i thought rarity would've gone squeee as twilight told her? and she actually thought befor acting for once>? sry these are my opinions if the offend i apologise.
After rereading this (I never do that), is has once again been confirmed that Twilight has only been in the town for 5 days. Little confused as to how she knew about Berry Punch's drinking habits (I know there was the welcome party, but Twilight tried to sleep through it). And yes, I do have a habit of being that jackhole that picks things apart, if only so I can get a better sense of the timeline.
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Well, for starters stuff like that is only mentioned if it's something significant i've found, as well as people gossip so she picked up on it at the party. least that's how my headcannon plays it out.
518311
Maybe she has run into her during a time gap, or before the beginning of this story?
ok i have 3words for you man
MUST HAVE MORE
there i said it, this is a really really good and interesting read , especially the chapter with the timber wolf, although why do i have a feeling celestia is going to find out sooner or later. and if she does will she be simp-athetic or want to kill twilight. also i cant wait to see what you rgoing to do with timid fluttershy , she would probably either bolt, feignt, or just freeze up if she knew. pinkie on the ther hand being her random self would seriolly want to throw a congradulations twilight your a vampony party. rainbow however i have no idea, she would either bolt, be happy for twilight and yes want to race her or just freak out entiely.
either way its going to be good story so please please DONT YOU ABANDON THIS AWSOME STORY OR I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN AND RIP OUT YOUR THROUGH , MUHAHAHAHAHAHA
on a side note automatic favoriting of this story is in order.
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I for one would like to see what SteamPunkBrony comes up with if Celestia finds out Luna gave someone the Blessing of the Moon but doesn't know who. Then consequently attempts the give the Blessing of the Sun as a counter to the moon blessed one. I don't know why, but I like seeing Twilight get unintentionally screwed over then watching the awkwardness that shortly ensues.
One single note of issue: Your timeline is set in Omni-time. Obviously, it's set immediately after the opening episodes, but at the same time, set far later. The CMC trio hadn't yet really established themselves, let alone Twilight actually seriously befriend the rest of the Mane 6. Elements of Harmony burst and party not withstanding... That and the Zapp Apple and Timberwolf mention was season 2.
Still, I do love the fic, even if Twilight is becoming yet more OP than before.
Been going through this for the last few hours, and the off-canon alternate-universe aside, it has been a thoroughly enjoyable experience thus far. I just wanted to gift you your 400th upvote, and congratulate you on an interesting story.