The Sweet Chapter
Sweetie Belle nudged Scootaloo as Silver Spoon finished moving her piece. “Come on, just say it.”
“Ugh! No. We’ve been over this. Me and Diamond don’t like each other.”
Diamond Tiara cleared her throat. “Diamond and I.”
“See? She’s freakin’ conceited! Gotta have her name in front of everything.”
Silver Spoon giggled as Apple Bloom pressed the dice popper. “Actually, it’s correct. Just like if she’d answered, she would have said Scootaloo and I.”
Apple Bloom shook her head as she moved her piece. “At least Scoots has plenty o’ games. Not too terrible excitin’, but it’s better’n nothin’.”
Scootaloo face-hoofed. “Look, bottom line, it was just a freaking kiss.”
“Two, actually,” Sweetie Belle corrected with a wide grin.
“Bite me.”
Silver Spoon chuckled. “You heard her, Diamond.”
Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara glared at Silver Spoon. “Not. Happening.”
Sweetie Belle took her turn, giggling as the dice popped around their plastic bubble. “You two really would be kinda cute together.
Another shared glare and response from the step-sisters. “I don’t even like fillies like that!”
“Y’all sure coulda fooled us.”
Scootaloo and Diamond buried their faces in their hooves, though only Scootaloo responded. “You aren’t gonna drop this are you?”
Sweetie leaned over, nuzzling Scootaloo. “We will, as soon as you two admit it was more than a kiss.”
Scootaloo groaned. “What do I have to do to convince you guys it didn’t matter? Do I have to kiss each of you?”
Sweetie Belle clapped her hooves. “Ooh! Me first! Me first!” Without another word of warning, Sweetie Belle grabbed Scootaloo with her forelegs and kissed her. While this was only barely registered by Silver Spoon and Apple Bloom, who continued with their turns before waiting on Sweetie Belle, Diamond Tiara found herself blushing and mildly irritated at the spectacle.
Scootaloo did little to respond at first, but soon resigned and returned the kiss, albeit somewhat lazily. The kiss was short, easily less than a minute, and Sweetie Belle pulled away from it visibly puzzled.
“What?”
“Not sure. I guess it just seemed like you were more in to it with DT.”
Diamond Tiara rolled her eyes. “Yeah, she was pretty into it. I could hardly contain myself,” she said with the sarcasm most ponies had come to expect from her.
Sweetie Belle shrugged and took her turn, leaving the situation be. Apple Bloom, however, took the chance to speak up. “Before ya go an’ get any weird ideas, ah don’t want ta kiss ya. Ah believe ya alright.”
Scootaloo glanced at Silver Spoon. “No no, I believe you just fine. Just two kisses, out of the blue, neither of which meant anything whatsoever.”
Scootaloo sighed in relief and looked over to Diamond Tiara, mouthing her words. “Why’d you cover for me?”
Diamond Tiara just shrugged and shook her head. Scootaloo sighed and reached for a soda. Unfortunately, it had apparently been shaken beforehand, as the moment she opened it, it spewed like a small fountain with plenty of the flying beverage finding its way to Diamond Tiara.
“What the heck? What was that for?”
“I didn’t mean to! I got covered too, ya know?”
“Ugh! Whatever, I’m cleaning up.”
Scootaloo groaned and grabbed an old blanket of hers to clean up the spill. She then draped said blanket over her back and left behind Diamond Tiara, leaving the other three alone.
Sweetie Belle sighed, resting her head on her hoof as she pressed the popper, much less enthusiastic about the dice now, something that quickly caught Apple Bloom’s attention.
“Somethin’ wrong, Sweetie?”
“I don’t know. I guess I just expected something different.”
Silver Spoon cocked her head. “Different meaning?”
“Well, I mean, I always kinda thought Scootaloo liked me. Now it really doesn’t seem like it, you know?”
Silver Spoon and Apple Bloom looked to one another, eyes wide, completely unnoticed by Sweetie Belle. Apple Bloom cleared her throat after a moment. “Uh, why ain’t ya never said nothing ‘bout it?”
“Seeing as that was technically a triple negative, I won’t say anything about it, but she’s right. You need to talk about things like that.”
“Ya said somethin jes then, though.”
“Yes, I did, but only that, technically, it was grammatically correct in getting across the desired point.”
“Still said somethin’.”
Sweetie Belle sighed as she moved her piece along the board. “I don’t know. They really are cute together, you know? I mean, yeah, you and Diamond picked on us for a while and pretty much seemed to hate us, but when she isn’t trying to be mean, she and Scoots just seem really sweet together.”
Silver Spoon frowned, looking down at the board and limply pressing on the popper just enough to make it roll. “Yeah, sorry about all that, by the way.”
Sweetie Belle shrugged. “I mean, I meant it when I said they looked cute together, but I’m really sure they like each other, now.”
“An’ why’s that?”
“You can tell when somepony is kissing lazy, AB. I can tell. She wasn’t lazy when she kissed Diamond. I’m as sure of it as I am that I don’t wanna break a Pinkie Promise.”
Apple Bloom offered a smile and wrapped a foreleg around Sweetie Belle. “Well, if it helps any, ah think yer downright adorable.”
Silver Spoon rolled her eyes, smiling, before scooting closer and half-hugging Sweetie from the other side. “Yeah, you are pretty cute, especially when you squeak.”
Sweetie Belle’s cheeks lit up. “I do not squeak… much.”
Both fillies beside her shook their heads and leaned in, nuzzling Sweetie Belle until…
“I’m not sure what we missed, but if it’s as mushy as it looks, I don’t wanna find out.”
The small group looked over to see Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara just inside the room, Diamond Tiara’s mane hanging freely, completely unstyled with her tiara missing.
“Ah’m not quite sure what we missed either, how long was you two gone?”
Scootaloo looked to Diamond, who shrugged. “Not sure, had ta be at least and hour, though.”
Apple Bloom blinked. “Ah don’t even wanna know.”
“Good, then we’re agreed. This past hour never happened.”
Every pony in the room gave a nod. Sweetie Belle broke the following silence by popping the dice and giggling.
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A lot of implies but nothing that warrants a sex tag. But, yeah, if you're shipping then that still technically counts for romantic comedy.
But yeah, not 100% on it since all it has are implies and no one knows what happens. Mainly just assumptions. So I'll stick by the no sex tag needed. Just Teen, Romance, Comedy.
It certainly is pretty shippy.
3830695 Teen Romance Comedy? Got it. Edit going up, then. And to think I was hoping for an "E" story... Ah well.
Too much of "every single mare and filly in Equestria is a lesbian", but otherwise cute and funny.
3830707 My convention is that pansexuality is the main sexuality. It's what most assume, much like us and heterosexuality. It's a convention I stand by in all of my stories. Obviously, like here, there are other sexualities, but monosexuals are more rare. So, yeah, none of these fillies are lesbian. Just so that's clear.
3830718 Shitty excuse is shitty.
3830725 Excuse? If you see it as such. Maybe I prefer a world like that, and so write it. Maybe I just have no idea what I'm writing or how to create logical backgrounds and reasoning for anything. Not like you can be certain. You'll believe what you convince yourself, or allow your mind to convince you, of, just as we all shall.
That said, take what I say with a grain of salt, or a whole salt lick. I don't mind. If you seek explanation, I'll give you what I have. If you don't like it, that's your prerogative. At the end of the day, either you enjoyed the content or you didn't. So, ye.
Hope you enjoyed the story, my apparently bad explanation aside.
3830718 That would make sense in a world like Equestria. Love comes not from the gender you were born with, but how deep the connection you make with another.
I supposed Vinyl is a perfect example of that given she left Octavia after a time, and now remarried to Filthy Rich. That stuff happens.
3830757 Oh, the story is cute. I'm just venting about one of my oldest pet peeves in fanfiction--so old it predates the existence of MLP by decades.
3830762 As far as I'm concerned, it just makes sense period. Maybe it's just cause I'm somewhat "gender-blind". Maybe I'm just not too old-fashioned. Bottom line, I like it, it works for my stories, and it's consistent throughout my works. As far as I'm concerned, it suits its purpose.
3830777 I'm going to take a shot in the dark and guess you mean lazy reasoning and explanation for choices made in the works? If so, I agree, it's annoying, and something I work to avoid whenever possible. Thus, why I'm currently trying to get used to writing outside of anthro. I was using it as a crutch at first on here, and I need to stop, so I'm easing back on anthro where I can, save for the anthro stories I'd already begun work on and made plans for.
I understand any frustration, believe me. I just have weird conventions for my stories sometimes.
3830799 No, I mean "every single character is gay".
3830725 It's not so much an excuse if you read chapter one. Ponies just go with whoever they connect with. She went from a fine loving relationship with Octavia, to divorcing and remarrying with a stallion. So unless Rich is a mare, he doesn't appear to be making excuses.
I'll admit though, that implied 3 way sharing was a bit "How was this intended for E? lol" moment. On technicalities alone, it could be E, but that stopped being E once tongue got involved for however short that was.
Not enough colts up in this universe! D:
Clearly, it is up to you to write 10 solid hetero E and up one shots with the mane 6 and the res of the cast!
Well, at least someone needs to start it :p
3830811 Oh! That. Well, I don't know what to really say except that, though it may not be so clear in the story, that's a problem you shouldn't ever need worry over from me. I keep things like that rather consistent where I can.
3830779 I'm talking more about the show canon and how we see things like various ponies that look to be on dates with a mare but then seen with a stallion the next being lovey dovey.
Our world is not pansexually ready. Too many labels and stereotypes and both genders are always at each others throats more and more these days.
Let's just say I relate to Vinyl.
3830851 Have you read my story involving her? Ya know, other than this one? You should. Its sequel will be very interesting now.
3830866 Last Vinyl story I read was her being a futa and Octavia and her have a fight because Octi saw her penis and "It's none of your business!" attitude. Aside from that, I don't think I've ever read any Vinyl stories aside from her one short fic by someone I can't remember that she visits her father who suffers from alzheimer's. Sad touching piece.
Eh, Vinyl has gotten to a point where you see idiots say "She's out of character" for her. It's like someone decided one night she's not allowed to be in anything that doesn't have her tied with Octavia. lol Supposedly the guy's fic was rejected for that OOC Vinyl. The level of stupid on that is astounding if such a thing really happened. I'd like to find out what kind of story it was. I'll have to ask.
I guess Vinyl with anything not Octavia is worth checking out.
Mind you, I don't hate Octavia. Love the mare. Just hate bandwagon stories that don't do anything with the characters.
RD and Vinyl? I'll give it a shot. I have a load of a read later list. If they don't have DT in it, they tend to go on my "Thank Celestia, it's Sunday!" list.
3830986 Welp, as far as I'm concerned, OOC for Scratchie would be if she wasn't awesome in some way. She has to be, for me, cause she is best pony. That aside, I've never run into this problem with stories because anyone writing her seems to get that she is meant to be like RD, just with less bragging. Idk, that's what I think. I'm weird, so just ignore me and let me talk with Derrick, the box outside my cell.
Well, I enjoyed this third chapter quite a bit. Though as for answering you question, I will say that what needed to be said was said in the comments bellow. -- Referring to the tags statement. --
Mr. Flare
3896420 Aye. It seems to be an issue. I'm not sure how well I can do going back and cleaning up what's been written, but I'll definitely do better at cleaning that up in the chapters to come, and yes, though slowly it may be going, there is more to come. I'm just not great at focusing on things.
I think that the tags are okay. I'm still trying to decide if this is going to end up in an orgy or something!
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That's how I'd write it.
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You mean have an orgy at the end?
4037697 pretending there's nothing dirty that statement.
To be honest, I was hoping for more pranks between these two.
4501678 To be perfectly honest with you, I'm not a funny person, and I shouldn't have tried writing comedy, but I really don't get pranks, so I figured it best to just not attempt what I know nothing about.
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Its alright. Not everyone can be funny.
4503245 If they could, then funny would lose its meaning. Or am I thinking other stuff? I dunno anymore...
Would REALLY love to see more of this.
Class M, please. I would greatly appreciate the favor. Thank you.
my advice is go ahead and write drunk but proofread sober. I could not tell at all who was talking half the time. Otherwise I enjoyed the story.
Put it under completed. It's ready, and it can end right here