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Long ago, in the magical land of Equestria, there lived three sisters. The youngest sister controlled the moon, rising and setting it each night. The middle sister controlled the sun, doing the same in the day. But the Eldest had the most powerful of all. She controlled the earth. For centuries, all was calm in Equestria.
Then, a seed was planted. A seed that could bring destruction to all of Equestria.
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>>Evedawalrus
I'm totally gonna read THIS STORY!
My only complaints are:
1. why the massive spacing in between words and paragraphs?
2. Why put pictures in the middle of a sentence? And
3. If this is a one-shot, how come your story says it's incomplete?
Aside from those I quite enjoyed it. That was a nice story my friend.
3767629 Not sure why the pictures are like that.
And the spacing? I actually typed it out without the spaces, but for some reason they're al spread apart. Whenever I try to edit it, it goes back to normal. 
Anyway, thanks!
My my what a good tail, could i use this in my story? it would go so well with it.
3767883 Hmm...... May I see your story? Post a link, please.
here's the link. but its in the early stages and i want to use this in later areas of the story.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131848/the-dragon-and-the-reaper
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/131848/the-dragon-and-the-reaper
3768010 Aw, I can't say no! Yes, you can use it.
Thanks! it might take about a year to get to the part where i use it but i already have a vision of it. be sure to check once every two months. and tell your brony friends!
Are you gonna make a sequel?
I must have MORE!
Dude...this story idea is epic! Another royal pony sister!? High five!
3768322 Don't you mean Brohoof?
And thank you; I never expected this story to get so much positive reception!
3768179 I don't really think so, sadly. I'm not ready to write a whole story; but if someone wanted to make a sequel, I would love it.
I liked this story! The heavy use of pics was a nifty idea, but it did put a heavy lag on my phone when loading the page. Good job, however
I enjoyed it, I find it more as an intro then a actual story, with the lack of detail, so my vote would be to make a story with this headcannon.... Thats just me though, I am giving it an upvote because it does deserve it.
Very intriguing headcanon. I say make a story further expanding on this idea. You have my upvote.
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I appreciate the attempt at world building and such, but the pictures really killed the theme of a "myth being told" rather than supplemented it. If you had taken the time to format all of the pictures into similar sizes/scale, I'd have given it more of a pass. The fact that the antagonist has the body of a large black pony and the head of dragon's...body? What?
And
For a oneshot that just manages to make the minimum word count, errors like these are simply bad form.
I understand that there's a nifty idea that you're putting out here, but it just fails to jump at me as "interesting." It more remains more in the "good" range since it's not at all a bad use of exposition. The use of parenthetical comments breaks you away from the illusion, but not as much as the assortment of pics at the beginning that are dropped halfway. I mean, they take up about half of the story's real estate.
All in all there's a lot of missed potential.
3828989 I sort of empathized that the antagonist was Tirek. He's a centaur, but I didn't really know how to describe his torso, as the ponies have never seen a human. So I thought about Spike, and how he was sorta like a human, as he had arms, torso, etc.
3829906
If you say they've never seen a centaur before (what's really stopping you?) for your headcanon, you could've described him as a Minotaur with a horse body, I guess? And do you mean "inferred" rather than "empathized"?
3830355 I see your point. And yes, I meant that. (I've been working quite hard for the past 4 hours, so pardon my mistakes.)
3830404
NEVER!
j/k, it's all cool.
I dunno about one-shot, but this would definitely be a great intro to a story. If you expanded this, I would
read it.follow you forever.The darkness of the earth rises!
so that's why she's QUEEN Chrysalis, and they're PRINCESS Celestia and Luna...
... now i know...
I really feel that this story has a lot of potential. How come this is just a one-shot? :(
3890534 :( It was actually sorta hard for me to get it past the word requirement! I have a lot of ideas, but I'm not very good at putting them down.
Yo! If you're still around and you don't mind, may i ask what the name for the eldest would be?