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When a freak and powerful storm rolls in from the Everfree, strange events are set in motion. Reports of bizarre creatures, odd ponies and wild magic abound.

The Bearers of the Elements of Harmony must face down their enemies, fight for their world and face their fears. Some of the bearers must face even more than that, and face them alone. Read now as ancient secrets are unveiled, powers thought lost are unearthed and powerful despots seek to rule with an iron hoof.

First Published
17th Oct 2011
Last Modified
4th Jun 2012
#1 · 165w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Man, I like your lighter stuff a whole lot more than this...  I just can't imagine Equestrian ponies actually killing anypony, even evil doppelgangers from a twisted dimension.  That face alone really jerks me out of the story.  I'm not sure what it is about the prose, maybe it's just the subject matter, but compared to something like Calling the Shots, its feels stilted and unnatural.

I did really enjoy the Bright-Eyes and Trixie parts though.

#2 · 165w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

And is this really supposed to be categorized under slice of life?  Unless its a play on Slice 'n Dice...

#3 · 164w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>15003

Well man, what can I say? This is a bit of a darker world than your average My Little Pony story. There are strange ponies from an alternate universe ruled over by an iron-hoofed queen, set out to conquer and enslave. It's really hard to write a convincing "and then they had cupcakes and tea" story if you want to do something like that.

I've kept the violence to a minimum, really - there's a lot some find "objectionable" but it all really happens off-screen and so it's in reality an adventure fic first and foremost.

It's not grimdark, I really disagree there. If you want grimdark, read cupcakes or the cough. That is grimdark. This? This is adventure.

It's not intended to read like an episode, it's not intended to hobble itself to a Universal rating. I wanted there to be excitement and swordfights and explosions and danger and intrigue, so I took our favourite characters and let them run freer than the show would in hopefully agreeably similar ways.

It's not going to be for everypony, but more than 9/10 readers have thoroughly enjoyed themselves.

#4 · 164w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Yay, half a year of waiting pays off :3

#5 · 163w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Finally checked this off my "To Read" list. ...NOW what am I going to do?:twilightsheepish:

#6 · 159w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

That. Was amazing :pinkiesmile:

#7 · 153w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

By any chance is chapter 12 being written?

#8 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

If there's a fake Apple Jack and  a fake Big Macintosh around these parts, then what of Apple Bloom. would she be fooled by these impostures of her older siblings ? :rainbowhuh:

Nice update to the tale as I wish to encourage you upon such a great storyline like this one. :ajsmug:

#9 · 146w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Well, of course Crash is going to help them. He's the Element of Treason.

#10 · 145w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Yay your starting it again:pinkiehappy:

#11 · 145w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>280948

I am indeed.

Expect it to go down a day or so before it goes back up.

In that time, I will edit, recombine and then re-post. This story on fimfiction doesn't have that many comments, so it won't matter too much for the comments, but the ones made will like be on the wrong numbered chapters, as I plan to combine the first three and then shift the rest down/up (according to how you want to treat that), and post the new chapters at the end.

Chapters 9, 10, 11 will be all new, and chapter 12 may be the epilogue, depending how long things go on for.

It may, when it goes back up, be complete.

Watch this space.

#12 · 145w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Yeah, violence between ponies and dopplegangers...FUCK YEAH!

#13 · 145w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>281117

Ah yes, the infamus "Complete Rewrite". Thankfully, this story has taken so long that I will NEED to reread the whole thing ANYWAY. I honestly can't remember ANYTHING before the big fight in Equestria Prime. I'll keep an eye open for when this revised story goes Live.

#14 · 143w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

This was the first fanfic I ever read, back in its first iteration in June 2011. Didn't know it had been rewritten, have to give it another go I guess! Hope it still remains as awesome as it did then!

#15 · 139w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

any progress on that rewrite, or would it just be better to finish the current version? I want to know what happens!

#17 · 137w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Uh oh. Them be a lotta tags, man.

This gets my thumb-up.

EDIT: WHAT THE...... do all of your fanfics on this site have their own headers!? (That header there, it be EPIC. This is being tracked now.)

#18 · 137w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

I am confuzzled. What just happened?

...Twi became the next Nightmare in a way that involves the spirits that caused the orignal? BUCK YES!

Edit: Oh yes, and the obligatory "ITS A TRAP!"

#19 · 137w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

I'm going to be forthright here; I've been burned too many times before by starting a story that's been inactive for a while and then it switching over to hiatus only to never be completed. So I need to know if this story is actually going to be completed before I start reading it, cuz I do find this intriguing.

Thanks.

#20 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>525038 then I suggest waiting until chapter 10 is up, which will be the final chapter.

#21 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Bizarro ponies? I'm certainly intrigued. Never read this story prior to the revamp, so I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

#22 · 134w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

My my, what a dramatic start.

Poor Trixie. :trixieshiftright:

#23 · 134w, 17h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

THE BACKROUND CHANGES.WHAT IS THIS I DONT EVEN.:pinkiegasp:

#24 · 134w, 16h ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>636730 WHADAFUCK IS HAPPENING?

#25 · 134w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>636800THIS IS HOW WE DIE!!!!

#26 · 134w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

So these newly posted chapters 2-9, are they the revised chapters?

#27 · 134w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>637163 They aren't as revised as they deserve, but quite frankly I don't want to shit you guys about. The last chapter is incoming within the week, hopefully.

#28 · 134w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

>>637274 Alright, I will give em a read.

#29 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

An action-filled chapter, glad to see it here at last. Is there another chapter coming?

#30 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

>>695065 No, or at least probably not. I left it too long and cannot bring myself to write more of it.

I have completed the story, told the tale, and am done. There's more I could write, maybe even more I should, but I lack the drive. That's essential. Is this worth reading? Definitely, especially if you started it. That's why I finished it, after all.

Most excellent my friend, keep it up!

#32 · 131w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

>>695333

you could write an "after" shot. a one time thing.

reveal what happened during the half year the 6 were gone, how the familys felt/reacted when the girls returned home, how the re-building is going on and if dinky will still help with the mail.

and lastly you need a "dear princess celestia" letter from twilight to cement in the moral of the story.

:trollestia:

#33 · 131w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

It's a definite good read however i am very disappointed that Discord wasn't even mentioned. Sure you brought up the concept of discord but not the character or for that matter the Estrosian copy of him. I think you should continue the story, however don't go back to the other side with the gates closed semi-indefinitely. That would just be a cop out for a continuation, what i would suggest would be to just add a time skip of a few years later. The time jump would not be for the sake of the story but rather you, because it would make the next story feel different enough that you would want to write it. And eventually should you want to you could write another story continuing the other side but again use a time jump and don't cross the bridge into the Equestria story connecting the two.

Anyways good (borderline great) story

#34 · 131w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

>>734803

This story was started around 18 months ago. Discord as a character was nowhere to be seen, and the plot itself was finalized around 12 months  ago. I should have finished writing this a year ago, basically, long before Discord even appeared. Adding him in now would necessitate a change in the story that I wasn't prepared to see through.

I hope you enjoyed it, and I am glad you think it at least as good as you did. I may come back to Estrosia, Weepy Cry and all the rest. I deliberately left it open because there are other stories to tell there, but for this story, it is done.

#35 · 131w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

>>735113

Well i definitely did enjoy the story, and i do hope you will go back and re explore both worlds one day. Also when might we expect a sequel to the Ambassador's son?

#36 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

...what happen to the banner :derpytongue2:

#38 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

If you haven't written a story exploring everything with the whole "Rainbow is a noble" and all the impacts it might have on the mane 6 and their relationship, you really should. Maybe her parents die and leave her everything and she gets roped into high society again? I don't know, it's just an idea.

I have a feeling it would be really good though.

#39 · 128w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

>>695333 I understand. Sometimes the story is not meant to go on.

#40 · 127w, 2h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Lady Prism Radiance Windemere Silverhoof- best fan name ever new headcanon for RD:rainbowdetermined2:

#41 · 126w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 6 ·

Why can't I... hold all these feels? :pinkiesad2:

seriously, why doesn't this have more comments? This whole story is great.

#42 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

This sounds intresting.:derpyderp1:

I'll download it and say what i think later.

#43 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

I'm reading this story for the first time, and so far really enjoying it, but this chapter alone could be its own story. Its really touching story of redemption and moving on to a new life. A+ for your excellent writing.

#44 · 122w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

I loved this chapter! I haven't gotten that close to tears since i read My Little Dashie! And believe me it takes a lot of feels to make me shed a tear. Well done!

#45 · 117w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 4 ·

Big Mac with lines?

Woona as the Element of Magic?

Derpy as the Element of Kindness?

Y :moustache: E :moustache: S

#46 · 117w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 5 ·

>>900167

Processing... ... ...

Headcanon Accepted. :rainbowdetermined2:

#47 · 117w, 5h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well crap.......we are in trouble already.......not immortal game level screwed......but.....yeah

#48 · 116w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Ok this either needs to become a free for all or the ponies need to bail.  They cannot fight the attack of the clones AND a zombie invasion at the same time........also GO DERPY FOR THE MUFFINS:derpytongue2:

#49 · 116w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww:fluttercry:

#50 · 116w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Opposite Luna for the win......until they open the door and.....crap:facehoof:

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