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Eternal Flame


Hey, I'm Eternal Flame. I'm Fifteen Years old, I'm Scottish (But I live in Canada) and Applejack is my favorite pony, along with Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie. I mainly read, but I write sometimes.

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81 years have passed since Princess Celestia defeated her sister in a battle, and sent her to the moon. Rebels who supported Luna tried to rebel against Princess Celestia, who she defeated with a simple spell. Realising how much power she had and what she could do with it, she changed Equestria for the worst. She ordered her army to set fire to anything and everything belonging to anypony who stepped out of line. And from that day on, The Pony Games began, a reminder of the Princess's power and how nopony should rebel against her again.





Thank you to Polaris, Moon Breeze, Serpent12 and Tornado15 for letting me use their OCs.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 113 )
Comment posted by Celestias Paladin deleted Jan 9th, 2014
Comment posted by SSJRandomMaster deleted Jan 9th, 2014
Comment posted by Celestias Paladin deleted Jan 9th, 2014

Awesome story so far, but I would think about you getting an editor. The fanfic has some grammar issues, and I think an editor would really help clear it up.

I am actually liking this story, though I still do have a couple problems with this, in example, if the drawing for Pegasi was clearly in Cloudsdale in Fluttershy's flashback, then why was it in Ponyville, a town consisting of mostly earth ponies? Also, if Nightmare Moon took over Equestria over a thousand years ago, then how could the mane six possibly meet? Let alone even exist?

Well, I'm glad I got more likes than dislikes.:pinkiehappy:
Thank you!

I need to do some editing. Thank you serpent12 and wakuboys for pointing out my mistakes.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Oh, and.. Should I change luna to celestia so that Luna is good and celestia is evil :trollestia:?

3733626 um, this in a completely different story set at a different time. So, that doesn't really matter. I will fix the problem in Fluttershy's vision, though.

This is awesome:rainbowwild: but it is so sad that the friends have to go up against each other :raritycry: I love it so far can't wait to see how it ends!!!

This is almost as good as the hunger games which is impossible to top in my opinion :pinkiehappy::raritystarry:

awesome story but it spoils that not all the mane six were chosen

3734268 that's almost impossible. They wouldn't be able to handle it. Plus I don't know what to do with Fluttershy or twilight in the arena :fluttershyouch::twilightoops:

Comment posted by Eternal Flame deleted Jan 4th, 2014

Oh yeah- forgot to add, I am editing right now. I am fixing my grammar mistakes, and instead of luna being evil, it's celestia. Thanks again serpent12, I wouldn't be editing if you hadn't told me.

3733626 there isn't anything about being in ponyville in Fluttershy's flashback! :facehoof:

3734363 I see what happened; In the show, there was only one reference to a mayor, the mayor of Ponyville, but there was never a reference (That I know of) of a mayor in Cloudsdale so it was safe to assume (for me anyways) that it was in Ponyville, especially with the drawing for the earth ponies being held in Appleoosa, instead of Ponyville.

3734408 Okay. I understand now. :pinkiesmile: there is probably a mayor for all the towns, if there is one for ponyville. But never mind.

Braeburn is the mayor/ sheriff of Appleoosa, right? Oh dear, I've just realised. More editing.

Okey dokey Lokey! I have finished editing and submitted it again.:pinkiehappy:

I never was actually excited for a fanfic before, I really want to know how they will handle going against each other, and with the possibility of having one of their friends brutally murdered by some psychopath, if not by themselves. :pinkiecrazy:

Why thank you. It's open ended so far, so I don't know what is going to happen. And yes, maybe someone will kill themselves. Or be killed by a psychopath. :pinkiecrazy:

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Yeah, I've been watching too many time-travel movies lately, so it probably was rather irrelevant now that I look back.

Okay! 5th chapter finished. I think there is about 2-3 chapters until the games. Maybe more.:twilightoops:

I need four stallon OCs to write the next chapter.:eeyup: they have to be earth pony or unicorn. If you have one that I can use, go to :

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/1776/hunger-games/thread/74424/i-need-four-ocs-for-my-hunger-games-crossover

Thank you :eeyup::eeyup:

Comment posted by Diamond Sparkle deleted Jan 6th, 2014

Aw. 5 Dislikes. Oh well.

Wow. This is amazing.:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Tornado15 deleted Jan 5th, 2014

3736839 see what happens.:pinkiecrazy: I have some rough plans.

6th chapter finished :pinkiehappy: we got the training, and then it's the games themselves :pinkiecrazy:

Don't worry the book took forever to:derpytongue2: but it all leads to something great so will this book:twilightsheepish:

Yay! Two new chapters, plus the games have started! :yay:

Comment posted by fluttershyyyyyyyy deleted Jan 9th, 2014

Yay! When do you think the next chapter will be out?

I personally thought that Chicken Elephant would show his mystic powers, but oh well, your version worked too. :pinkiecrazy::trollestia::pinkiehappy:

Yay, new chapter! :yay:

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I agree that Chicken Elephant should show his mystic powers. I will add that In the next chapter. Or add it in while editing. All in good time, my friend.

Third thing. I know this is late, but would anyone like to proofread/ edit this story? I keep seeing mistakes in my work. You will get to see my work before anyone else as well. :raritywink:

Pretty good just a few silly mistakes

Comment posted by Eternal Flame deleted Jan 12th, 2014
Comment posted by Eternal Flame deleted Jan 12th, 2014

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Okay. I will keep you in mind :pinkiesmile:

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I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I have updated some stuff. 'up a mountain' and 'encountering Coldblood' are now in 'the first day in the arena,' making one large chapter.

No! Rarity can't die so sad :raritycry: but interesting I like it have you read the books? Cuz the books can help the book a little more even though it is already great!!:pinkiehappy:


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Yes, I've read the books at least ten times each. :pinkiehappy:

New chapter! :yay: gonna add more to it to make it a bit longer, though.

Can't wait. :pinkiegasp: I didn't think it could get better (because it was awesome before:rainbowdetermined2:) but I was so wrong! I want to read more it is so good

make more!!!!!:raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

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