Sweet mother of Discord... she's either going to bake a (Pinkie) Pie, or she actually knows about Cupcakes... which is odd, because that means Dash is already dead, and AB would be betraying her mentor... I'm reading too much into this, aren't I?
glorious. this is relevant to my interests, however I have a few criticisms...
Applejacks Death was pathetically done, not nearly painful or long enough. It lacked torture and was not drawn out, there was betrayal yes, but it wasn't done to it's potential, you could have included heartbreaking dialogue.
As always with these fic, the wounds inflicted upon the victim are way too lethal, I understand the fact that they're little girls and have little experience but still.
All in all however, I really did enjoy this chapter.
365266 I wanted to give the impression that AppleBloom was giving AJ a mercy kill. I know there wasn't much gore in this, but that was kind of the point. I don't want the crusaders to come off as completely psychotic.
Not till the next chapter anyway. Do not worry, your thirst for blood will be quenched.
When the cellar was mentioned, I expected something more Sweet Apple Massacreesque. I guess we can have Apple Bloom playing with her older sister like Big Mac did with her?
Lol, this gave me a boner.
Pinkie Pie style, eh? And a cannibalism cutie mark? I love this story!
Oh boy oh boy oh boy
YES. Got into the gore thing recently, and this only makes me love it more!
Great job!
Sweet mother of Discord... she's either going to bake a (Pinkie) Pie, or she actually knows about Cupcakes... which is odd, because that means Dash is already dead, and AB would be betraying her mentor... I'm reading too much into this, aren't I?
i like to eat nachos
glorious. this is relevant to my interests, however I have a few criticisms...
Applejacks Death was pathetically done, not nearly painful or long enough. It lacked torture and was not drawn out, there was betrayal yes, but it wasn't done to it's potential, you could have included heartbreaking dialogue.
As always with these fic, the wounds inflicted upon the victim are way too lethal, I understand the fact that they're little girls and have little experience but still.
All in all however, I really did enjoy this chapter.
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I wanted to give the impression that AppleBloom was giving AJ a mercy kill. I know there wasn't much gore in this, but that was kind of the point. I don't want the crusaders to come off as completely psychotic.
Not till the next chapter anyway. Do not worry, your thirst for blood will be quenched.
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OH, well then I apologize, I have completely missed the point and am now able see what you did thar.
This got fucked up real quick. Still, I'm enjoying this way too much.
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You ain't seen nothing yet.
372740 can't wait
Cannibalism cutie mark? After EATING their kills, I'm frankly not surprised. Creeped out but not surprised.
CONTINUING!
When the cellar was mentioned, I expected something more Sweet Apple Massacreesque. I guess we can have Apple Bloom playing with her older sister like Big Mac did with her?
358077 Actually, upon reading your final sentence, I shared your
Jeebus, why am I enjoying this? Oh well, on to the next chapter!
Also, I spotted a little error;
"Hat" to "had", by the way.
358077 I thought it was meant to be jam...
Ah well, works just fine the way it is.
Honestly, the looks you'll get from your cat if your muttering 'Kill! Kill! Kill! Kill!'
Anyway, this is intriguing me...