A series of robberies have sprung up around Ponyville, Manehattan, and even Zebzonia. All reports say the same thing-"A short colt, with a large marsupial sidekick. Getaways always involve some use of dark, powerful magic."
The mane 6 are sent out after him, and they find they get much more than they bargained for. Deeper plot interweaves, bonding opportunities, and hidden feelings are just the tip of the iceberg as they travel Equestira in search of the crook.
A collaborative effort with TehAlphaGamer and Dimondium.
Chapters (1)
not bad...
You used the word then to start sentences too much. Other than that, very catchy introduction.
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Habits, habits, habits...
Sorry about that
325386 Don't be sorry silly!
Just write more.
Hey! Remember me from the MCForums? Yeah...cant read it atm but i can over the weekend
Saw ur name on the recent stories and was like "heh, ill say hi XD"
Any typos complimentary my ipod
I have to say that this is much easier to read than your last stories and it didn't feel like i had to force myself to read at any time. I am looking forward to how this will continue as you two work together.
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But, eh, you're kinda right. I did rush it a little bit and hopefully by the time I'm finished with Betrayal (I added another chapter, unfinished ATM but you can still read it, BTW.), I hope it doesn't turn into the grammatical Frankenstein RONM was.
Thanks :D!