Twilight never became Celestia's student and Sunset Shimmer learned the power of friendship. Twilight is trained by her brother and then leaves Equestira for 7 years before coming back for her brothers wedding.
damn well on one hand i was smiling through out everything that happened to shinning armor and on the other hand i was just frowning and quite depressed at how krill and applejack treated her after saving two kids
3927843 Nice chapter. I hope Krill and AJ come to their senses and apologize to Twilight for yelling at her and hurting her. Kind of ticks me off they would do that. Oh well. Looking forward to the next chapter.
So let me see if I understand this correctly. Not only was Shining Armor being an asshole and doing some bad shit but Twilight's parents were in on it too! Man, talk about having a fucked up family.
Wow, another 5k words out of nowhere. I would have missed it, if it wasn't for the fact that I looked through my feed and noticed the difference in word count. And those new 5k words need some editing. Saw lots of grammar mistakes; wrong words here, missing letters there. But it made the ending more interesting, though it seemed a bit 'out of nowhere' (get it^^). Well keep it up, 'cause it's good.
After reading the edit, I'm starting to feel like the base is slowly turning into Torchwood base at Cardiff. The only thing missing is a stallion that will hit on anything with a pulse, a snarky doctor who likes to have sex with anyone, a real tech wiz who is a bit of a shut in, a butler that will time just about anything, and a new female recruit that the audience will not give two shits about.
Well it's official this is my favorite fanfic on the site (sorry everyone else I just love this story). You sir have written an excellent story so far. You may want to check yourself for a writing cutie mark.
yep im back to comment again (lol) and my judgment is i still hate krill and applejack for what they did i will never forgive them and even if they did get back together and all they shouldnt have done it in the first place and rainbow tried to place a little blame on twi for not calling and telling them to me it was all their fault but i liked this fic a lot and i hope shining armor dies a horrible death and her family gets some kind of punishment if that could be made into a chapter about what happened to her family that would be cool
5754708 Don't worry, you were far less severe with your reaction than mine. *Muffled noises in the background that sound like a particular stallion are heard* Like. I. Said. Far less severe, anyway have a great day and a happy whatever it is that you celebrate.
Ok at first I wanted to bash Applejack's head in, and all this other evil and cruel stuff. I'm glad that shining is now officially a prison toy cocksock. Imalso satisfied that in the endeavor finally got with Twilight and became a part of the Mare in question's here as she and Applejack as well as krill recovered from their fallout.
I hope this wont end up being a TwiDash
3927247 No no no Don't worry AJ will come to her sences
damn it, rainbow! you let her slip away again!
damn well on one hand i was smiling through out everything that happened to shinning armor and on the other hand i was just frowning and quite depressed at how krill and applejack treated her after saving two kids
3927261 *wipes sweat off of brow* good....good
3927369 I agree. Its almost as if they expected Twi to just abandon the children instead of taking care of them
3927395 maybe
3927433 lmao o god the rage! But let's just hope those two come there senses before they loose twi
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3927452 my goodness. My little old heart can't take all this shouting
3927828 lol
3927843 Nice chapter. I hope Krill and AJ come to their senses and apologize to Twilight for yelling at her and hurting her. Kind of ticks me off they would do that. Oh well. Looking forward to the next chapter.
So. That was heavy
Still awesome though!!!
3929184 sorry had to set the mood and that is a actual thing that happened to me in Iraq during a raid.
nice job with the kids twi... they deserve a better life
Very awesome chapter
3930461 thanks dude!
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3928375 Fixing to update chap 11 for a better ending to it
So let me see if I understand this correctly. Not only was Shining Armor being an asshole and doing some bad shit but Twilight's parents were in on it too! Man, talk about having a fucked up family.
3930888 yes, let her go with! rub it in the faces of the two abandoners!
Holy crap that was dark. You'd think an element of harmony would like giving a kid a new life no matter what the circumstances.
3931487 you think that's dark just wait for the battle
Wow, another 5k words out of nowhere. I would have missed it, if it wasn't for the fact that I looked through my feed and noticed the difference in word count. And those new 5k words need some editing. Saw lots of grammar mistakes; wrong words here, missing letters there. But it made the ending more interesting, though it seemed a bit 'out of nowhere' (get it^^). Well keep it up, 'cause it's good.
3935998 sorry I got excited but I'll be replacing the chap soon with the edited version
After reading the edit, I'm starting to feel like the base is slowly turning into Torchwood base at Cardiff. The only thing missing is a stallion that will hit on anything with a pulse, a snarky doctor who likes to have sex with anyone, a real tech wiz who is a bit of a shut in, a butler that will time just about anything, and a new female recruit that the audience will not give two shits about.
3936885 never heard of it but ok?
Well it's official this is my favorite fanfic on the site (sorry everyone else I just love this story). You sir have written an excellent story so far. You may want to check yourself for a writing cutie mark.
3940498 thank you!
yep im back to comment again (lol) and my judgment is i still hate krill and applejack for what they did i will never forgive them and even if they did get back together and all they shouldnt have done it in the first place and rainbow tried to place a little blame on twi for not calling and telling them to me it was all their fault but i liked this fic a lot and i hope shining armor dies a horrible death and her family gets some kind of punishment if that could be made into a chapter about what happened to her family that would be cool
So... Complete? I'm guessing you're gonna make a sequel, judging by the none-too-subtle cliffhanger.
3973960 sorry it's not done yet but thanks for bringing that to my attention
4005976 yes
Hahahaha eat it shining EAT IT LIkE THE PUSSY BI*** THAT YOU ARE
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But seriously thank god shining armour was completely and utterly destroyed for what he did and sorry for going a little insane there
5754708 Don't worry, you were far less severe with your reaction than mine. *Muffled noises in the background that sound like a particular stallion are heard* Like. I. Said. Far less severe, anyway have a great day and a happy whatever it is that you celebrate.
-- Your friendly neighborhood plague doctor
Ok at first I wanted to bash Applejack's head in, and all this other evil and cruel stuff. I'm glad that shining is now officially a prison toy cocksock. Imalso satisfied that in the endeavor finally got with Twilight and became a part of the Mare in question's here as she and Applejack as well as krill recovered from their fallout.